Additional rewrites to chapter 01 of Nyx and the Sunset. · 5:53am Apr 13th, 2016
I know that you're thinking, "You promised you wouldn't make another NatS blog until chapter 02 rewrites, WHAAA?! "
I get it, I contradicted myself but MixMassBasher (my personal BattyGloom for Nyx and the Sunset) Pm'd me some of his criticisms and suggestions to help the story out, and thus far they have been. So I took some of his suggestions and added them to the first chapter, I even rewrote a full section. Here's the changelog:
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Rewrote the dialogue between Flash Sentry and Sunset Shimmer.
Rewrote the entire section where Sunset and Flash talk on the way to school.
Made Nyx a rumor Sunset overhears so she ask's Flash about the thefts in the mall area.
Added Life is a Runway joke at some point in the mall section.
Added Nightstone Castle.
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It's only minor changes, but now I believe the chapter is many times better (the Life is a Runway joke is just a throw away joke), it eliminates the forced exposition that surrounds the mystery of Nyx in favor of a natural way to find out. The newly rewritten section is unedited, and I will be awaiting edits to it so I may copy and paste them in.
This is the last Nyx and the Sunset blog until the chapter 2 rewrites are done . I have my final One-Shot for a while to work on before unveiling a Fallout Equestria side-fic, which will likely be released before the new one-shot.