The Plague Master order of chapters · 9:36pm Oct 12th, 2015
So, after posting the recent chapter of The Plague Master, and reading the comments, I decided to make the edited The Doctor is In chapter be the prologue to the original The Doctor is In. I'll try to make another prologue chapter to give him some motivation, then change a few things in the other chapters to fit the new beginning. I have a basic idea of what the chapter will be about, but I still need to think about how he'll learn how to use his powers (I might just have him learn them in a fight, but that's a bit cliche). I'm open for suggestions on what you think.
Also, I need to think of a better chapter name for the chapter I recently posted. I need something either doctor related, or Plague related. (Don't suggest anything like '[insert plague name here] starts in Equestria]' because I have that planned for later).
Any advice is appreciated.
The main killer of the Story for me was your introduction of another crossover so soon after the story started. You already have a wealth to work with just plagues, ponies and the local wildlife. Also just the first few chapters alone a lot of it seems to easy for the main character though this could be your scenes being brief.
Well you could name it "Welcome to Plague Inc", since that's how a game starts after you name the plague.
As for learning his powers, How I see it the Manticore, which is sick as you've already stated, tries attacking him but the disease acts to protect him causing intense amounts of pain in the manticore(still think it would be cooler if you went with something else like the Jersey Devil or something) and he can feel what the disease is doing. He tells it to stop, it doesn't listen he gets angrier, his hands glow red and tells it stop again and it works. From there he starts to slowly learn how to control the virus, eventually leading to him saving the Manticore and gaining a friend.
Or
The manticore disease starts acting up allowing him to escape in which he starts having a panic attack as he recognizes the beast because he was taught about greek mythology like they used to in grade school and he knows it shouldn't exist and the possible dangers lurking in every shadow start to get to him but he starts to breath, and begins to meditate.(Actual meditating, the OHM things is not what everyone does. Meditating is for the most part. Drowning everything out as you focus on one thing. Like your breathing or a flame.) From their, as he starts to concentrate his powers manifest in being able to sense the things he can control like the disease inside the manticore. He starts to focus on the manticore and "sees" how the disease is killing it. He tries to intervene but is too far away. He runs tries to help the manticore tries to hurt him, he calmly talks to him, his medical training kicking in, and through the manticore's permission tries to stop the disease. Right now he doesn't know how to stop but figures out he can pull it out into him. Now he's stuck with the disease until he either gives it to something else or his body become immune to it which could take anywhere from to a few hours to a few years depending on the disease.
3467151 Ooh, the absorbing the disease into yourself sounds like a good idea. I might use that. I want to respond more, but I'm worried about spoiling things from the story. Also, the welcome to plague inc sounds like a good idea for the chapter.
Thanks for the ideas!