26 years old, Bipolar Disorder, Asperger's Syndrome, am legally blind, and am a born again follower of Jesus Christ! I like Pinkamena/Pinkie and Fluttershy best. Send me a message if you wanna chat!
Hey all, it's been about 8 years since i was last active here or watched MLP, but I've still logged in regularly to see if i get any DMs or comments.
I still do writing but just for other series. It's all posted on my Ao3 account: https://archiveofourown.org/users/Shadrake/pseuds/Shadrake
No, not MLP content currently, sorry to disappoint 
but I realized that I may as well share it here just for those interested. Whether I'll start writing here again remains to be seen (I'm not going to force myself to write something I'm not currently interested in), but I've finally started taking a hammer to that wall that keeps me from working on creative pursuits in my life.
PLEASE READ THIS WHOLE MESSAGE, IT'S REALLY IMPORTANT TO ACTUAL LIFE STUFF!
Two years it's been.... wow. I gotta be honest with myself and you all, it's probably not going to be finished. But I'll explain everything about the story, and much more importantly, explain some real life things you should all know and will probably be interested in knowing.
So many of you may be wondering why Unnatural Existence hasn't been updated in an entire 16 months. Well, I'll do my best to explain.
1. I'm not too into MLP anymore. To be honest, I only watched 6 episodes of season 5 and nothing at all of season 6. Though I have many reasons more for that than just not being very into the show that I don't think I really need to go into here.
So I've been reading a lot of pony fanfiction again lately. I'm looking at my fanfics too and they're not as bad as I remembered. In fact, I've started writing new chapters for my stories! 
I have been on the precipice of writing for DAYS now and it's really getting unbearable.
The reason I can't just write?
I don't know what to write about.
I have almost no idea what to do involving Unnatural Existence (those there on the night of July 1st will know why), and I'm not sure how to progress with Depths of Despair.
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Well, regarding Unnatural Existence, Like I mentioned on the July 1st Debacle: you have already set up some interesting conflicts, now it is time to explore them. The mistake you made last time was thinking you needed to outdo those conflicts with a 'bigger and better' one Involving a weird and out of nowhere kidnapping plot to overwhelm all the conflicts we are already emotionally invested in.
Just explore the following:
1. Two ponies with nearly opposite personalities are sharing a body and a certain amount of resentment is guaranteed to accumulate no matter how hard they both work to get along. How do they resolve that resentment?
2. Pinkamena suffers from severe social anxiety disorder. How does this get resolved? Does it get resolved? Does she make any progress?
3. Twilight is trying to 'fix everything' because that is what she always tries to do. Talk about an interesting conflict, there is loads of potential here. Does she get worse? Does she come to realize how inappropriate it is to force someone with social anxieties into therapy with threats of social exposure?
4. Do Pinkie and Pinkamena stay in therapy? What progress do they make?
These are the questions we want to see resolved in the sequel. You don't need gimmicky conflicts like a random kidnapping subplot to make the story work. You just need to explore the rather interesting foundation you have already built, and save the new and unrelated conflicts for the hypothetical sequel.
What he said: 3281257
Pinkamena will probably start to really resent Twilight for her "help" and Fluttershy will go nuclear when she hears what's going on. She's got all the same issues as 'Mena, but you don't see Twilight dragging her off to therapy or threatening to throw her in the middle of a crowd if she doesn't cooperate.
As for Depths of Despair, you could just as easily take my predictions as suggestions. I'm pretty sure that's what's happening on all the other stories where I manage to predict everything. It's about Surprise being depressed right? Well you have to give her a reason to be depressed. Kill off her idol and make it her fault, and then go from there. Surprising ponies is what she does, it's a core aspect of who she is. So when surprising somepony gets the one closest to her killed, that's one heck of a conflict. Her mom is dead, she blames herself and rejects a core aspect of who she is. Her world just got turned upside down and inside out. Have her break down, lash out, cry and scream and rage at the world. When all else fails, the five stages of grief are incredibly useful for writing a story about depression. Denial and anger seem like the ones you would end up exploring in that direction, play around with where the anger is directed. She's also Pinkie's kid, the concept of giggling at the ghostly could be an idea for her to explore. Does she have a dad? If not, you could explore her suddenly being an orphan. Who would take her in? I'm heavily biased to see Twilight take her in because she's my favorite character, but any of the mane six could do it. Maybe the CMC? Maud? There are just so many possibilities!
Was that enough ideas for you?
That's why I always finish my stories first before posting.
3281361 Yeah well I'm trying to plan out my stories first. But well the fiasco with Unnatural Existence Chapter 5 on July 1st basically made me lose where I was going to go with it....
3281257 Yeah I realized that after the whole event. I already know what I did wrong.
But thank you, and those 4 points gives me a basis to think off of. My mind was too cluttered and unfocused, I guess, to figure out where to even start, so thanks, that should make it at least a bit easier with coming up with what to do.
3281341 That was really helpful, thanks! ^__^
I actually already had a few main points of Depths of Despair down, though,unlike Unnatural Existence. I just wasn't sure how to realistically transition between them (which kind of discredits me.....).
I'll take a few of your ideas into account, for sure.
Bruh, you posted this ON MY BIRTHDAY.
3863877 I'm sorry!
3864288 That's not bad, it's cool!
It's also a coincidence.
3865871 oh, okay.
Happy birthday!
um...okay...