My Mortail Big Brother Chapter One Edits. · 8:13am Nov 12th, 2014
I'm having someone clean up the chapters. So far only the first chapter has been altered. I also took the liberty to reword some stuff and make a few minor changes and omissions. Besides one added sentence to Cystail, and some deletions of unsanitary descriptions of furniture, nothing major was changed. I figure I let you guys know when ever something like this happens, in case something major ever does change by mistake and some goes. "This line wasn't here before or, what happened to that born description about the grandfather clock."
Also, to help getting the story some more exposure, I'm going to be posting it not only onto Deviant, but possibly Fur Affinity. Chapter one is already up on deviant art, but I still need to replace it with the edited version.
Glad to see you're setting to work.
In my review, I said that the earliest chapters were best. The revisions really need to be done starting chapter 4 and later, The later the chapter, the more badly needed the revision.
2589862 I'll get to them in do time, The story and events will remain the same, but my goal is to make it all flow better so that people can enjoy the story without having the grammar hinder there experience. Also, in the last few chapters I have been trying to tie back to Shining Armors inner turmoil, but I did in away that also helped the story move forward.