I love meeting new people, but they terrify me.
I've noticed some mixed feedback on the sixth chapter of Prominence, so I made a poll.
On Thursday the 16th, before I start my daily writing, I will check the results, and do my best to follow the wishes expressed therein.
this will necessitate me taking wednesday morning off. And I wasn't gonna write tomorrow anyway, I usually just write before work and I'm off tomorrow.
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All hail democracy!
2530741 I'm trying to think of a joke about how we should put whether to hail democracy to a vote but it's just not coming together very elegantly.
2530748
That's democracy for you.
Hmm. If anything don't break the fourth wall in any way (so no Transformers references or anything). So in that way, less Pinkie I guess. It just doesn't fit this story in my opinion and therefore it breaks immersion. Also, the last sentence (with AJ and Rainbow) comes completely out of nowhere. I guess they have been at Rarity's boutique all this time? Since they do absolutely nothing after Fleur arrives, you might as well have them leave the boutique just before Fleur shows up. Pinkie feels a bit off in general. But that just means its your Pinkie, and that isn't necessarily a bad thing.
2530771 ...all I wanted you to do was vote...also I already took out the transformers reference. and they had been hanging out with their friends. one of them even mentions how fleur seems to enjoy dressing up the princess.
2530773
Ah, sorry. Just voting for "Reduce the pinkie" seemed a bit too much to me. I don't think Pinkie hijacking the chapter as you put it is a problem in of itself, and I didn't want to give that impression. So I decided to comment instead.
The only problem I had was that you wrote Pinkie as a bottomless well of randumb rather than as a real character.
(Also, I edited out the mean wording. It was probably too harsh even if it wasn't a personal attack.)
2530877
I agree on that point. Pinkie Pie could be made more three dimensional rather than two dimensional. But at least it was a few degrees above what some ponies give her in terms of personality [one dimensional stick of retarded dynamite strapped to an idiot ball].