Wow...

So I was giving my story a quick re-read and found...these:

Winter in Manehatten was not at a temperature that was any different the amount of cold any...

(Missing a "than")

Still, ponies managed to endure the freezing weather if just to make sure their daily business is attended to.

(Sudden tense shift)

A unicorn stallion was amongst a crowd trotting down a sidewalk, heading for his place of business.

(Not everypony going to his place of business, right?)

He had an aversion for the cold and only wished that the winds helping speed it along would die down if just for a few brief moments to allow him a moment of peace.

(Run-on)

Although he knew that he couldn’t hide his true feelings from the creature.

(Sentence fragment [HOW COULD I MISS THAT?])

It gave the ponies something to fear and they wonder about any further attempts of such an attack.

(Unclear context)

In the long-term it just became another distant nightmare

(That is NOT how you use a hyphen[UPDATE:Scratch that, I did mean to use that])

small pockets of resentments

(This is just grammatically incorrect)

O_O

Mind you, this is just the prologue.

Soooooo, yeah...I got a lot work to do. ^^;