Regarding the Outside World in "A Queen & You" · 4:03am Mar 11th, 2013
I requested a review for "A Queen & You", knowing that I'm nowhere near being a good writer.
I waited and waited for many days, and finally, the review came in. It was quite the review too, most of it covering the first two chapters or so. Was I angry or sad? Neither, actually. I want to thank the memeber of the group that reviewed, but his name slips my mind at this time.
Anyways, the review pointed out a few things, like:
• Tense Problems (Which I'll admit to having trouble with every now and then)
• Some scenes not advancing the plot (Which I'll admit, after going back and re-reading, there were a few of those)
• Usual grammar mistakes
• Occasional plot inconsistency
You know, usual stuff that a guy/gal could have trouble with, but one thing stood out: The story's too campy. I, feeling that there was going to be more going outside and exploring and stuff, thought that this claim was odd, but quickly found it to be all too true. I mean, the whole damn thing does happen inside "Your" apartment, with the exception of one or two outside scenes, but even then, Chrysalis is only in one of them! He brought up how it made it feel weird with "You" pretty much keeping Chrysalis to yourself, and I had to agree with him! It is damn creepy to be keeping a wonderful creatyre like that holed up in an apartment!
I'm not trying to bash the reviewer or whatever, but I thought I'd bring this up, and you can think of him and his comment on the matter as the catalyst for this blog post.
As previously stated, there was going to be much more of an emphasis on taking Chrysalis outside and go exploring, but I made a pretty bad decision early on, and that never came to pass. Now, with the reviewer pointing out the campy feel of the story, I thoight I'd make this as an explanation of sorts for other people that have this same problem with the story.
So, yeah. If you do not like the campy feeling of the story, remember that, even though the story of "You" and Chrysalis is almost over, there's no telling as to what the future holds.
Now, picture me winking. Just do it. Also, make me look like Tom Cruise. No, Tom Selleck. Wait.
A post-apocoalyptic biker Jesus. Yeah, that's awesome.
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You mean like this? (it was the best picture I could find...)
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Exactly like that.
What an awesome find.