TTA: Closing Thoughts · 6:07am March 20th
The Tired Automaton is yet another poorly made story by me. Starting like many other stories; brainstorming, writing, rewriting, and rewriting even more. This story however, became such a mess in almost every way that I want to talk about it.
Naming every way the story fails would be a long list that wouldn’t be interesting to you other than learning new terms to label other stories with. Instead I will list the three failures that highlight the story:
1: Failure to keep a consistent tone.
2: Inconsistent / unfocused plot.
3: uninteresting / nonexistent main character.
Looking back to the first chapter there are many red flags that I chose to ignore. The story was a collection of throwing darts at the ceiling and hoping the sharp blades at the end would stick but the truth is the darts never made it to the ceiling. At first I had hoped to ignore the darts falling, then I hoped to decorate them, make them shine, I then gave up, put a bow on them and walked away.
The real truth is that I started to make a story that I couldn’t write correctly mostly because there was no plan and no reason for the story’s existence. You can see this in the description and every chapter despite how I attempted to hide it. The story always was; Sweetie Belle learns she is a robot, she is trapped until Apple Bloom and Scootaloo, then they go to Twilight’s, then Rarity’s to tell her she is a robot. Everything in-between was trying to give purpose into the story but couldn’t because there was nothing.
It’s because of my failures here that I learned many things about the art of writing. More than anything I learned just how important planning is and establishing tone and meaning. A better understanding of motivation and going through with stories. Along with many more smaller lessons.
It’s only thanks to comments that I actually wanted to finish the train wreck. Thank you Cander, DarkSnowGaming, Oreng Pingvin, Kit Wolfkat, and Pony_01 for your comments. And thank you for reading this and or for reaching the end of the story.
Next story will be a dive back into insanity and hopefully I will finish editing it before the end of the month. It will feature the biggest word count in the series, three images that took a lot of effort (Not counting the one bellow in the image count or effort), and maybe audio of me crying. None of my friends would pre-read it after hearing the plot, I take that as a good thing.
Yes, I was destroying myself to make TEARING AGONY, and yes, this is why the final chapter of TTA took so long.
I want to leave off on a question: Why do you like Sweetie Bot stories?
No problem!
I don't think it's Sweetie Bot herself the reason why people like the concept of a Sweetie Bot story but rather the concept of a pony being a robot while thinking they were a normal pony throughout there entire life. Atleast that's why I like Sweetie Bot stories.
If you ask me, I would rather read a story where the concept applied to Twilight instead of Sweetie Belle, and I'm talking about a robot Allicorn Twilight, something like when Twilight Accended it made her into a robot without anyone knowing, I'm actually starting to give myself ideas while typing this.
I have never made a story on this site, and I came up with several ideas that has never been made on this site before, I have shared my ideas in comments hoping someone else would take the idea and turn it into something more, but it has never happened, and I don't think it will ever happen.
I'm planning on making a story soon but with the amount of ideas I have, I'm not sure if it would be good, especially since I never made a story before it could have some bad dialogue, grammar, and a bad plot throughout the entire story, but I'm getting there.
I think I’m having a meltdown. MA I’M BEING MENTIONED IN A ONLINE POST!!! But seriously speaking, you’re welcome. I haven’t used that phrase in ages. It sounds a bit passive aggressive, but I can’t think of any other wording
Also seriously speaking it truely is bizarre. I’ve never really bothered with a online presence until recently.
I had a whole section here about my thoughts on the last chapter, but as I kept thinking the more I started writing about the story as a whole. So instead I’ll read the story as a whole, and post a comment give off my own closing thoughts. I mean I did that for most of the way, so way stop now?
I will say I genuinely thought Rarity knew. I felt like she acted like it, and the story seemed to be building up to it. So the ending just kinda threw me off in all honesty. I actually felt my mind loosely trying to course correct while reading through, spoiler alert it couldn’t, and instead opted to push through and forget. No worries, that’s on me being a lazy thinker. Not anything on your behalf.
And on a more positive note, liked the way you handled the power thing. It might’ve been the easier of things to write, but I think you handled that well.
I’ll admit that my liking to Sweetie Bot is more artificial than I assume others are. I like Fim, I like Sweetie Belle, I like machines. Fim is a good show, Sweetie was a funny character, and I love watching machines operate, and learning how they function. Yeah Grimweird has my favourite rendition of Sweetie Bot.
But that’s not the question. Most of the stories I’ve read so far have been quite bittersweet (some especially so). Sweetie Belle comes to terms with being a robot, and I like that feeling. That and DarkSnowGaming basically covered it. It’s a concept that could lead to a variety of ideas, and I like to read those ideas.
I look forward to your next piece
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The concept applied to Twilight sounds like a very interesting spin. Twilight seems like a particularly good character to do the whole “I’m a robot,” thing with. Best wishes for the writing journey
Now let’s end with my own question:
Why do I spend so long on these comments, and why are they always so long?
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I do somewhat agree that it isn't exactly Sweetie Belle but there are things that are better or worse if it is her. A good example is the group she interacts with is smaller compared to Twilight so it's easier to pick which characters she talks with rather than Twilight. On the other hoof you can choose just about anypony when Twilight is the focus, even if it's harder to pick.
I would try not to worry so much about the negatives of your story when first picking up the 'keyboard'. If writing is something you don't exactly want to go into than don't worry about 'being good' or making sure the story is perfect. If you say "hey, it's my first story." than people won't expect a perfect story (not that we do anyways.) If writing is something you want to go into than learn to love writing before learning to make a good story, It'll carry you a longer way
(At least this is my suggestion) I wish you luck 
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I personally really enjoy having an online presence, it's something to work at a little bit and it gives you something to look forward to.
I'm interested to hear your thoughts as well. It seems there is a bit to talk about with this story, if it was 'just decent' or 'just bad' there probably would be nothing to say. There was a lot more I could say and I have more thoughts but I wanted this blog to be simple and the more I talked about how bad this story turned out the more depressed I came across
The Rarity thing was odd, if I remember correctly someone in the comments said that Rarity knew she was a robot with certainty and I think that swayed the opinion even though there wasn't exactly proof. I wanted it to be something that the readers questioned but I think it became frustrating to some readers because if they already have it in their head that Rarity knows then these actions would cause Rarity to talk with her about being a robot. It's fully possible that I goofed but that is something that I put some effort into that accidently worked against the story. I always tried to dodge talking about Rarity in the comments because there wasn't anything I could say really.
I agree wholeheartedly, I love those types of Bot stories I just kinda suck at making them myself. I've gotten better at writing sappy stuff but I still kinda suck at hitting those feels. Steel Soul is one of my favs, though it's been a while
Thanks
it'll be better than this story, that's for sure. You can already read Part 1 and Part 2 they are small but you can enjoy the new one without em. TEARING AGONY is before Part 1 but after Part 2 but it's also Part 1 and 2 anyways so it's not like it matters.
Took me until now to find time to read the last two chapters. You have improved immensely; and I can tell from the flow of the last two chapters. Keep it up dude.
I like Sweetie Bot stories because I love machines and stories with machines that gain or have a conscience and what the author does with that concept. Gives me ideas to play around with in my own writing.