Midnight Rising chapter rewrite off to prereaders · 9:06pm February 22nd
I’ve given them a week to hit it, and I’ve already started into into a brand new chapter, with the first 500 words down. At long last—and sorry again for the long sideshow there; I will address that directly in the first part of the text as Sunset gets dinged by creative writing instructor Ms. Cherilee for letting her narration lose focus—it’s time for Midnight to deal with Lemon Zest. Probably going to be a two-parter this go-around, but we’ll see.
The rewrite of 19: Enter the Griffons, Part 6 - v2 is now nearly 21,000 words long. Suppose I could break it in two, but it is a climactic chapter, which means I’m a lot more lenient on length. I truly believe I’ve found a much better way to handle the ending of the Queen Moly/Dragon Lord V duel than what was there before, though that in part means that it’s gotten a lot longer. I also removed the cuntboy fetish that fell flat from that scene before, and substituted something much more appropriate to each character in its place.
No teaser, because there’s no way to sanitize it this time; even the sideshow commentary is pretty explicit. The current plan is to depublish the current version of the chapter when the new version launches. I guess I should keep a link to it if anybody’s curious, but honestly? I’d rather have it just disappear completely, because it really was a dud.
In any event, look for it no later than next Wednesday, or sooner if prereads come in before that. As for the next chapter following, I’ll aim for having it ready in 2-3 weeks. Thanks again for your patience, and thanks again those of you who spoke up to call out what was wrong with not just the last chapter, but the whole bloody arc.
When the Lemon Zest chapter launches, I’ll add a note at the end of the last Shadowbolt girl chapter before the griffon arc explaining what’s ahead, and inviting readers to skip over that arc to Lemon Zest if it’s not something they’re interested in. Too late to split it off into a side story like I should have, so that’s the solution I’ve come up with.
Does that mean that the Dragons will wins this time and not end it in a draw?
Ah crap. I forgot to hit it. I'm going to check it out now.