A vote poll, and some other random stuffs · 12:27am May 21st, 2023
There are few things I want to do in this blog post
Firstly, about fate of Nightmare Moon's petrocks, Armstone.
Make a vote in this blog post give me y for yes and n for no.
Vote ended at the time when Chapter 7 come out.
Do you want me to bring him back? y/n?
At first, I thought of just outright killing him off there and let's him make a return as some off-hand mention jokes, because he's basically a narration tool. His presence allowed Nightmare Moon to randomly mentioned about anything and give me unlimited free pass to use Nightmare Moon as an exposition's giver free reign without being out of place. If I killed him off, I am rid of the easy way out and actually have to practice "shows not tells" that I, myself, always complain about......
But i noticed that comments about this topic have a lot of likes....
So, here, i gave you ability to make the choice.
Be warmed that if he came back, he likely won't make much presence when Nightmare Moon is interacting with other character. It's as hard as it is trying to make conversation between 3-4 people to both stayed in characters and not sounded like NPCs.
Secondly, this story's plot
The original skeleton is still there, but also vastly different already, like different between Neon Genesis Evangelion and Rebuild of Evangelion
If I choose to stick with first draft, then we will be in the Canterlot by Chapter 5 already.
But then as i wrote, I reach a blockade.
I don't know how to write drama...
This story has few components working together in order to keep it from stalling, the first one is the main plot itself, second are comedy sketches, and third is the character drama.
In Canterlot , I have no choice but to makes my own OC characters to keep drama and comedy going. There are not many cannon characters with correct criterias for me to play with.
A story about Nightmare Moon and her anime character-ripoff OC friends, who always have political drama with her, and fights with OC antagonists basically reskin of the many version of antagonist bluebloods that exist out there.
That thing above... is as horrible as it sound.
This is my first long story, and my writing is not good enough to execute something like that.
And it's even worst in other places like Appleloosa, or Manehattan, where i have even fewer cannon characters to worked with.
So, I made a decision to put Nightmare in a place that is both filled with cannon characters and give me ability to call in characters from other place naturally.
It's ponyville......yay
This story become another boring Nightmare Moon in ponyville, right?
This basically something generic like:
work in my farm, you black pony.
angelu!
lemme beat you up
it's alien monkey uwu
Can be avoid completely!
IUnlike other story, there are big changes happening already!
- Luna doesn't exist
- Celestia treated Nightmare Moon as imouto
- Mane6 do not exist as a team
- No magic rainbow laser of absolute destruction
- Nightmare Moon actually somewhat prepared and not completely helpless
- Nightmare Moon keep secret of her human origin.
So please, I promise you that it will be fresh. If you cannot believe in me, then just believe youself, who still believe in me!
I read alot, and have lot of data to pulled from. Most of novels I read are some kind of what i liked to called 'another chance'. There are many sub-genre: transmigrate, summoned, timetravel, reincarnated, or gamer. It is big in webnovel world and I read all! Japanese, English, Chinese, Korean.
Sure it can be generic, but there are different between each another chance sub-genres from different origin point. Even ones from the same sites, same genre, and from same language have subtle different felt sometime...
My brain contained backlog of more than thousand of these stories, ready to be dismantled and turned into part of my story.
MLP's Displaced genre is a weird one in a sense that it was made for fanfiction multiverse, it supported multiple timeline of the same world and different world at the same time.
The displaced protagonist can freely travel between world early on, and most even made contact with another displaced protagonists. In other another chance sub-genres, this was reserved for a being that reach realm of divinity already, some novels even only around god.
It has both positive and drawback. Which all of you who tired of displaced already known about. So i won't touch on that.
The point is, if your only experience with another chance sub-genres is only displaced, then you will likely finds my story pretty unique.
I might not be able to come up with something completely new myself, but hey, it can still be fresh.
Just like when Microsoft just basically turned a PC that run gutted-out version of Windows into a Game Console that time.
I just had to make good combinations to make it work.
Thirdly, politics, political correctness, government system, and economics
Two of these things are very important to identity to some people.
I still added them a little to my story here and there, but there is always a but but!
I can ripped off the censorship and just do it like my first story, and of course it will have biased and likely shits on opposing viewpoints.
And about political correctness. I don't really have a good track record...
Just looked at my previous work. A report on a interdimensional gothic winged unicorn goddess
Let's just says that when Nightmare Moon attacked Celestia, Armstone isn't my first choice. It's allahu akbar boom!.
Then I change it to I am atomic(which become its own fanfic), then railgun, and ended as mass driver in the final version.
The plus side is that i can drive deep into my imaginary homemade Equestrian government structure.
Or, I can use make a lore chapter and thrown everything in there for those who want to read...
Finally, your feedback matters!
I actually change a lot of things already.
What i want to keep is the main plot.
Drama, Location and Relationship are subjected to change as I continue to write. Sometime it cannot be properly implemented into dialogues, sometime it just felt unnatural, but there are times when I think readers' ideas have merits, better than mine even! or just general writing problems, like it's too fast or unclear.
For example, Chapter 4 and Chapter 5 were supposed to be a single 1.7K words chapter. There are comments complaining about not understanding what's going on, so i extended and cut it into two chapters.
I might only wrote replies to only some comments and not post thank on any reader who put my novel in their library, but that only because I don't know how. It's hard to just make a comment of pure emotion that has no actual raw data, without being snarky. It's one my default mode of writing, other than informative, questioning, and meme.
Those who pumps negative karma should have self reflection so that he himself does not become a troll. when you gaze long into the stock the stock also bankrupts into you
-Adam Smith, he who loathed landleachlords
I repost this blog and tagged correct story this time.... hope you all got the notification.
Doctor_Den vote y
Lord BLACKHUNTER vote y
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I don't rightly care about armstone, an exposition device for the sake of exposition doesn't really sell it for me, so I vote n
I honestly felt it to be really weak and detracted from my experience as a whole, tho I can understand your reasoning for him.
As for the story itself, all I ask for is consistency. Political correctness, OC's or canon characters don't matter to me, just make sure your story is consistent with what you already have and I'll likely find it a palatable and relatively enjoyable experience.
I don't care if you do things similar to things like Displaced or other typical HiE adventures, I just care that it's enjoyable to read as I don't judge a story by how many types of story exist of that "genre" as they are not required reading for what I am reading now.
Something that does bother me a bit is incorrect word usage or just bad grammar, but I can push through if I can still understand the story beats. It is something I have noticed in your story, but I am not the person to be an editor for this, tho if you can, you should enlist one if possible for others who read this story. I'll still read regardless of your choice.
*Noone is gonna see this edit, but I'm surprised I got so many downvotes for what basically says "don't make this story random, and no I don't care for armstone*
I want to see blueballs get face checked by Armstrong and maybe see him get a rock named Ackbar to the ball. So my vote is still YES!!!! OH I just thought of NM yelling out "ABRA CRAB YA" and teleport a bunch of crabs on to a bunch of nobles...of course they are the really crabby crabs that pinch first, second, and not let go. 🦀🦀🦀🦀🦀
I feel like it wouldn’t really make sense if armstone came back but it would be fun, plus Twilight and other characters would get to see how bat shit insane Nightmare is y.
Also sucks we won’t see Luna but oh well what’s done is done. RIP
I think it would be a lot of fun to see Nightmare go to Ponyville to annoy the main 6 since she knows this universe from the show and might gets curious. Also since Nightmare didn’t have any real interaction for a thousand years she would probably annoy or just creep out the main 6.
Over all I like the story so far keep up the good work.
Y to Armstone I just want some more mentions of him maybe use some suprdo glue.
What site do you use to read webnovels? If I may ask.
Vote ended
4 y
1 n