Chapter three of "The Two Deaths of Fluttershy" has now been edited. Was expecting small stylistic things, and some grammar and spelling. Found those, of course, but I also ended up plugging two plot-holes.

I need to read the printout of it out loud. Rather than unpublish after realizing this mistake, I am leaving it up. Updating with those tweaks should be happening within the next three days.

I also reduced the references to sexuality in Chapter 1 (since this REALLY isn't a clopfic AT ALL) with the help of Warmblood.

EDIT: Real Life slammed me... PROBABLY will have edits in the next few days.

I am up to ~6,800 words on Chapter 3. Progress is slow, and some of that might end up in chapter 4 due to not wanting to make the chapters too long. Like many other authors I may do a rewrite after the story is complete, but it depends on what my readers think. More specifically, I am considering intercutting Mayor Mare and/or Adamant and Westwood dealing (with only partial success) with brewing tension outside Ponyville.

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My characterization pre-reader is slow but should come through for me in the end. After that I just have to edit any problems they find and then read through it out loud for grammatical errors and that sort of thing.

I don't know enough people around here to feel comfortable with the tagging. Maybe later.

Rules:

1. You must post the rules.
2. Each person must post 5 things about themselves in their journal.
3. Answer the questions the tagger set for you in their post, and create eleven new questions for the people you tag to answer.
4. You have to choose 11 people to tag and post their icons on your journal.
5. Go to their page and tell them you have tagged them.
6. No tag backs.

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