Ante-scriptum: OPT fans, check out my other work if you want a bit more from me, or would like to see the ponies as good guys. WP3k fans: check out my other work if you don't like the genocide of the human race by the ponies.

Chapter 2 changes

Added conversion dream
Miscellaneous grammar, dialogue, action changes

Chapter 3 changes

Miscellaneous grammar, dialogue, action changes

Both:

Moved some scenes around for better pacing

Alright, I'm done jacking around with it. It's probably still crap, but I'm done being hung up over one chapter.
Change log:

Changed intro scene. Again. It's harder than you think to smoothly have a philosophical discussion on a rather complex issue.
Changed interrogation.
Hopefully got rid of the rest of the Cowadooty-esque action movie bull crap.
Ghosts no longer present. Replaced with 3rd SFG
African subplot starts in chapter 1

Deleted all the chapters and reworking them in GDocs. If you want to help, PM me. Otherwise just wait until I have a less shitty version up. Sorry for any inconvenience.

Because not being able to reread pony fanfiction is an inconvenience.

...I get a prereader. If someone is willing to preread chapter 5 I can probably get it out tomorrow. Please volunteer. Seriously. Guys seriously. I think the wait's been long enough. It can be over right now if I get one person willing to check for errors at minimum.

Same goes for OPT, although I need more. The first three chapters will need to be looked at once I'm done with them, but not yet.

I'm looking for people to comb through OPT and rip it apart. I need spelling screw ups, typos, repeated words,, things that don't make sense, unnecessary details, lacking details, anything you can possible find that would improve if I were to fix it. Look here and comments #39 and #41 for what has already been reviewed, and jump off from there. I am not yet done with fixing the issues from the list, however.

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OPT has updated!
yay

Anyway, I added a scene into the beginning of chapter one and reorganized chapter two.

And with three, we get to see the other side of the HLF, on you may be more familiar with...

Editing a chapter doesn't give you notifications, and I doubt anyone here uses their email to check story updates, I'm making this. Chapter 2 is about 3/4th written, and then editing.

And I'm definitely not checkmarking Warpony so I can cross audiences

Hey, I've actually been working on WP3k!
Just kidding. Chapter 2 was going to be released sometime in the next week or so (along with redone chapter 1) but it only has about 2200 words. I plan on lengthening it with another scene, but this would take extra time. That's my plan, and it will happen unless convinced otherwise. If anyone is willing to help rewriting chapter one, I can get that out of the way and focus on 2.

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Sorry that chapter 5 hasn't been posted yet. The reason is that I am the laziest son of a bitch ever. I have the first scene down, but have a massive writers-block on the rest of it. Barely 1,000 words are written.

HOWEVER

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Just a heads up on the backstory of WP3k.

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