Just to make sure, I imagine the scholar as a slightly more elderly stallion. Not granny smith age, but not as young as the mane six or Big Mac anymore. Thus the swearing seems to be a bit over the top and pulls me out of the immersion somewhat. If you want to make him younger, than this surely achieves that. But if you want to portray a more elderly and more sorrowfull stallion, you might want to cut back a bit on the colorfull swearing. ;)
so, Applejack knows the scholar, or met him before
Just to make sure, I imagine the scholar as a slightly more elderly stallion. Not granny smith age, but not as young as the mane six or Big Mac anymore.
Thus the swearing seems to be a bit over the top and pulls me out of the immersion somewhat.
If you want to make him younger, than this surely achieves that. But if you want to portray a more elderly and more sorrowfull stallion, you might want to cut back a bit on the colorfull swearing. ;)
I freakin' love this story