calling it Luna sees the picture in the paper or something... cue shitstorm.

You should read through this chapter, there's a lot of spelling errors..

The pegasi were still in the air doing their thing, but now, there was one very distinctive one in the air. It was light blue, like the sky, but its wane was a rainbow. “Joyous times.”

Dat error.

This second story seems very rushed somehow. There are loads of spelling errors.

His name is harkness. I knew this was connected to that others may live...

(Rarity looked at Ryan with a combination of glee and disapproval. Fluttershy looked at him like he was dying again.) That was funny -dying again

“What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny matters compared to what lies within us.” (The guy who stares at my six-year-old sensually)

FUCKING HARKNESS!!! WHY, WHY IS THIS SO INFURIATINGLY HILARIOUS FOR ME!!!!

Okay this Chopper disappointed me. He got himself caught let his guard down from sleeping knowing good and well he's being searched and chased. Now he's complying I don't understand?