When a high school boy is stuck with the responsibility of protecting a whole world, will he be able to pull it off, or will he flunk out on the world?
Try separating the dialogues of characters. By that i mean, every time a someone different begins to speak start a new line. It tends to get very confusing with more than one character talking in the same paragraph. Other than that try spelling out numbers instead of placing them. I love the story though ^-^
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Try separating the dialogues of characters. By that i mean, every time a someone different begins to speak start a new line. It tends to get very confusing with more than one character talking in the same paragraph. Other than that try spelling out numbers instead of placing them. I love the story though ^-^
2778669 I love it too, which is why I used it. Thanks for reading and I'm glad you like it.
2800659 Thank you for the advice. As a new writer, I need criticism to make my writing better.