well that was short... but interesting while i'm certain the detail about how they got a half ton spartan out of the forest will be explained in the next chapter, just one question. why in every line a character makes there are "..." in each sentence? it doesn't make it difficult to read, just slightly confusing... sorry
nonetheless, good chapter. keep it up hope to see more soon! Ace out
You are really inconsistant with the hell and tarterus thing, Discord said tarterus and Celestia said hell. Which one are they supposed to use. Also, I am glad that you did not have MC freaking out over the sight of ponys.
This needs work. A LOT of work. Your redundant use of "....", poor grammar and spelling, and your dialogue made this fic really hard to read. I was pulling my hair out from reading the first chapter. You need to revise this story and get an editor if you want to gain more readers. Do not just post a chapter without revising it. Your fic will not last if you keep doing this.
This story really needs work. It could be good and I always wanted to read a master chief x pony ship fic. Updates man please more updates.
I know it's hard to write a fic hell I'm trying to write four at the same time.
You know screw it just do your best and be awesome
Wooo insane Spetsnaz pinkie pie out.
well that was short... but interesting
while i'm certain the detail about how they got a half ton spartan out of the forest will be explained in the next chapter, just one question.
why in every line a character makes there are "..." in each sentence? it doesn't make it difficult to read, just slightly confusing... sorry
nonetheless, good chapter. keep it up hope to see more soon!
Ace out
2585669 well I use "...." These to separate dialog from the other parts of the story to give each character a line.
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okay, just wandering as all
anyway, i'll let you get to work so, see yah. hope to see more soon.!
You are really inconsistant with the hell and tarterus thing, Discord said tarterus and Celestia said hell. Which one are they supposed to use.
Also, I am glad that you did not have MC freaking out over the sight of ponys.
Oh well this is just great...
This can only end in two ways:
#1 Master Chief beats up Celestia and makes a run for it.
#2 Master Chief gets a free ride in Celestia's newest guest-disposer: the Pandora.
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I'm fine with anything though.
YAY an update but..... uh..... has celestia lost it. You don't threaten the Master Chief. Also I thought ponies believed in the Greek hell.
2586065 well it isn't the weirdest thing he's seen..
This needs work. A LOT of work. Your redundant use of "....", poor grammar and spelling, and your dialogue made this fic really hard to read. I was pulling my hair out from reading the first chapter. You need to revise this story and get an editor if you want to gain more readers. Do not just post a chapter without revising it. Your fic will not last if you keep doing this.
What did the ponies say that made Celestia come to that conclusion? Also this grammar is making puke