I'm already down here, might as well get obligatory comment ready. Heh... juicy... Edit to follow; standby...
Post-read edit: Octavia: Has my sympathy Lyra: My frustation, yet understanding Instucter: Gained respect points Vynal: Is a f***ing stalker. Not gonna lie, it's creeping me out. But, even for a "filler" chapter, I enjoyed it very much. The only thing that I would like to see changed is Vynal's behavior. That is a selfish comment and request as her behavior now fits the story like a glove, it's just that for backround ponies, I got a soft spot for Vynal. It kinda sucks to see her so nieve and desperate for Octavia, but it ties the story together well. Bravo, sir, bravo.
1997030 Glad to hear it. 1996646 We will just have to see how Vinyl progresses in the story. 1996502 1995953 you are too kind sir. But yeah this story needed a filler for some explanations. 1996646 juuuuuiiiiiiccccccyyyyyyy.
Good story, It's nice to see a new dynamic to these musical ponies. One thing I would suggest is expand the instructor a bit more. At least to the point where he has -a name-. It seems really awkward to refer to him over and over as the Instructor and eventually it gets very monotonous to see the same reference to him. Just like you wouldn't say "Octavia" all the time when referencing her, you'd use adjective and pronouns, the Instructor isn't a name and shouldn't be used as a replacement, especially in such a long bit of deep dialogue.
But that is just be being a nitpicking badger. Keep up the good work!
1998992 yeah there really isn't enough Lyra and Octavia fics out there, I don't know that is. As for the instructor, I could name him but I just like the 'instructor' as his name.
2005182 Immensely. Everything about the story thus far has been very enjoyable. It's moving at a good pace, conflicts and character interaction is believable plus it's a shipping that we don't see very often. It's a good day whenever I see an update on my list.
2041934 it will be up soon so don't worry about it taking too much longer. and as for the 'filler' chapters, if the story requires them then there will be more. But for now I cannot tell if there will be more or not.
2166456 yes I still live, I would have had this darn thing updated if it wasn't for work. I swear to god that bites into my writing time so much! I thank you for your continued pursuit of my stories update.
Tell ya what, I got work tomorrow as well... But on Monday-Friday this week I'm off. I'll have a long ass chapter posted by weeks end or even sooner.
pre-read comment Dude, if you don't put filler chapters, the clop isn't as good. With a good buildup, the sex is so much sweeter. Love you're work. Pass the message to the writer if you please.
"Then what does it sound like Tavi!? Because it sound's like you lied to me!" Lyra smeared the tears on her face as she tried to wipe them away. "God, I can't believe how stupid I am, of course your lied to me!" Lyra got up and began to storm her way past Octavia and head towards her room.
This was a nice filler, helps transition thngs over and explains a lot plus its also amazingly written.
Commence read.
That Instructor is rather involved.
Now to await Octavia's progress.
Every time there is an update, the story gets better and better.
Other than missing commas or apostrophes, it wasn't bad.
I'm already down here, might as well get obligatory comment ready.
Heh... juicy...
Edit to follow; standby...
Post-read edit:
Octavia: Has my sympathy
Lyra: My frustation, yet understanding
Instucter: Gained respect points
Vynal: Is a f***ing stalker. Not gonna lie, it's creeping me out.
But, even for a "filler" chapter, I enjoyed it very much. The only thing that I would like to see changed is Vynal's behavior. That is a selfish comment and request as her behavior now fits the story like a glove, it's just that for backround ponies, I got a soft spot for Vynal. It kinda sucks to see her so nieve and desperate for Octavia, but it ties the story together well. Bravo, sir, bravo.
When I saw an update, I was like then I read it and was like
1997030 Glad to hear it.
1996646 We will just have to see how Vinyl progresses in the story.
1996502
1995953 you are too kind sir. But yeah this story needed a filler for some explanations.
1996646 juuuuuiiiiiiccccccyyyyyyy.
1998036 Hazaa! Another pleased reader.
Good story, It's nice to see a new dynamic to these musical ponies.
One thing I would suggest is expand the instructor a bit more. At least to the point where he has -a name-. It seems really awkward to refer to him over and over as the Instructor and eventually it gets very monotonous to see the same reference to him. Just like you wouldn't say "Octavia" all the time when referencing her, you'd use adjective and pronouns, the Instructor isn't a name and shouldn't be used as a replacement, especially in such a long bit of deep dialogue.
But that is just be being a nitpicking badger. Keep up the good work!
1997318
You don't have to change her, but it would be cool if you did.
Juicy... giggity...
Just a 'filler' chapter eh? Awful lot going on here, my favorite kind of 'filler'.
2000002 I take it you enjoyed it?
1998992 yeah there really isn't enough Lyra and Octavia fics out there, I don't know that is. As for the instructor, I could name him but I just like the 'instructor' as his name.
2005182
Immensely. Everything about the story thus far has been very enjoyable. It's moving at a good pace, conflicts and character interaction is believable plus it's a shipping that we don't see very often. It's a good day whenever I see an update on my list.
applause. Awesome work ...
Octavia just needs to say that she was drunk. All that can be said.
2012161 Idk how good of a plan that'd be considering that she just confessed to her.
"I love you Lyra! BTW I got drunk and slept with some random mare."
"Oh..."
"Yeah...."
201957
Well Lyra is mad so if she yells at tavi all she has to say is that she was sad drunk and confused
Man, the wait for chapter 5 is killing me.
I guess good things are worth waiting for though
BTW, how often do you think you'll do 'filler' chapters?
2041934 it will be up soon so don't worry about it taking too much longer. and as for the 'filler' chapters, if the story requires them then there will be more. But for now I cannot tell if there will be more or not.
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All I can say is:
Good job and please update this even though this is the first time I read this. And, you, sir, have earned yourself a follower.
Last updated: Jan 21
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Nice.
I don't mind filler chapters I almost relish in the detail and emotion the can give a story
2168288 that's all it ever was. "Oatmeal, are you crazy?!" I just did it for some random humor. Got them mad love for Pinkie Pie!
2166456 yes I still live, I would have had this darn thing updated if it wasn't for work. I swear to god that bites into my writing time so much! I thank you for your continued pursuit of my stories update.
Tell ya what, I got work tomorrow as well... But on Monday-Friday this week I'm off. I'll have a long ass chapter posted by weeks end or even sooner.
pre-read comment
Dude, if you don't put filler chapters, the clop isn't as good. With a good buildup, the sex is so much sweeter. Love you're work. Pass the message to the writer if you please.
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"Then what does it sound like Tavi!? Because it sound's like you lied to me!" Lyra smeared the tears on her face as she tried to wipe them away. "God, I can't believe how stupid I am, of course your lied to me!" Lyra got up and began to storm her way past Octavia and head towards her room.