all i can say is don't use I use she... so like "she gave Luna a simple nod and with a little force the horn on my head glowed in it's beautiful golden aura and with little effort she raise the sun over the horizon giving my little ponies another beautiful day"
all i can say is don't use I use she... so like "she gave Luna a simple nod and with a little force the horn on her head glowed in it's beautiful golden aura and with little effort she raise the sun over the horizon giving my little ponies another beautiful day"
Yeah, just to be a pill. Not really, but, it's Took, not Tuke. From The Lord of the Ring. Okay. So, I'm hoping that when you're working from an actual computer your storytelling will improve.
Sorry if I did a bad job it's difficult using a phone to write a story.
I like it.
Looking forward for more.
oh i really hope they did that shit at the base that is about to be carpet bombed
This is pretty good, and very well done considering it's written with a phone. You get a fav from me.
I have to ask does the story feel a bit rushed?
Hmm, first chapter was nice, but the Celestia part of chapter two could use more description. I cant wait for chapter 3
I'm liking this! Looking forward to more!
all i can say is don't use I use she... so like "she gave Luna a simple nod and with a little force the horn on my head glowed in it's beautiful golden aura and with little effort she raise the sun over the horizon giving my little ponies another beautiful day"
all i can say is don't use I use she... so like "she gave Luna a simple nod and with a little force the horn on her head glowed in it's beautiful golden aura and with little effort she raise the sun over the horizon giving my little ponies another beautiful day"
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Not really.
You get a like and a fav from me.
I would like thank you all for the favs and upvotes it really means alot to me. FLUTTERYAY!
I'm hungry
...... pop goes the head
.... well I see that cupcakes was basicly repeated in this fic....I like it can't wait for more my good man.
I'm hungry now. For what, you ask. Human flesh, of course!
Yeah, just to be a pill. Not really, but, it's Took, not Tuke. From The Lord of the Ring.
Okay. So, I'm hoping that when you're working from an actual computer your storytelling will improve.
2630357 your profile pic is my reaction