Ch1: The Adventure Begins
Frost woke from her slumber feeling more tired than before. She used her scaled forelegs to wipe the sleepiness from her eyes as she looked about her room. It was a simple room, for her anyway. To her left were a door, a dresser, and a mirror. In front of her, was a closet with several pictures of her friends on it: Raspberry Pie, Apple Slice, Flawless Gem, Jetstream, Autumn Breeze, and Starry Night. On her right wall, lay her various weapons and Targets to use them all on. The racks held swords, daggers, pikes, and even chakrams she had custom made to be thrown from her wings.
She had to admit, she wasn’t like the normal fillies, and she like weapons and tended to be a bit more violent, she even had a drawer in her dresser dedicated to the many detention notes from school. She got out of her bed and walked out of her room and into the living room of her house. It was the generic Equestrian living room, sofa, coffee table, recliner, perfect for homework (which she rarely does), or family time and hanging out with guests playing board games.
Her mother walked in from the kitchen. Her name was Swift Shadow, and she had dark purple scales, and wings like Frost. She had feathers upon her head and at the end of her tail that were crimson in color. Her smile was slightly off-putting, being it that she looks like she would stab somepony in the back at any moment.
“Good morning Frost, sleep alright?” she asked, that natural Argonian accent ever so present in her voice.
“Had a weird dream last night and I somehow feel more tired than dad when he is late at work.” Frost replied, plopping down on the couch.
Swift dropped her smile, and stared at her daughter. “What was the dream?”
“Why the sudden interest?”
“Tell me, and I might know what to make of it.”
“Some weird bipedal creatures with pointed ears and black robes. They said something about a council and a dominion, and then plans that involved ponies. That mean anything?”
“You might have to ask Sheogorath during class, while I go to Canterlot today.”
“Oh right, its Wednesday. History with the mad god, woo.” She said in a joyless tone.
“You will listen to him Frost, he knows more then he lets on.” Swift said.
“Okay fine… at least I'm in a class with a few friends.”
“Try not to freeze Haskill this time.”
“No promises mom.” they both shared a laugh at that.
“Get going my little pony; if you’re late again I don’t know what he would do.”
“Wabbajack me again?” she asked with amusement. Last time that happened she wound up like some naked human girl, which was embarrassing.
“If you get Wabbajacked too many times I don’t think you might recover, remember when you spent a week as a rabbit?” she chuckled.
“Yea, great time for dad to bring a hawk home from work.” Frost growled playfully.
“Get going already, we’ll talk about how you got Wabbajacked again later.”
“Not today mom!” Frost yelled as she grabbed a sweet roll from the kitchen and flew out the door.
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“Well well well, look who’s early this time.” Sheogorath said as Frost burst through the door to the throne room.
“Early, crap!” She face-planted into the carpeted stone floor from exhaustion.
“Yea, ya are. You know what being early by thirty minutes means don’t ya?” he said smugly.
“The Wabbajack!” they said at the same time, be it with less enthusiasm from Frost.
“You sure I'm not on time?” she asked.
“Do ya see any other ponies in here?” she shook her head. “Very well, on with the fun!” he yelled.
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“Alright alright, ill bite, something is different about you… let me guess, you got your scales waxed!” Jetstream let out before bursting into a laughing fit.
“It’s not funny Jet!” Frost yelled out, the effect the Wabbajack had on her turned her scales every color of the rainbow, turned her spines into candy.
“Candy Spines! Why couldn’t I have been early?” Rasp yelled.
“Again, not funny!”
“Calm down the lot oh ya, class is startin.” Sheogorath yelled with his smirk still plastered on his face. “Alright, you all know where ya are goin, but today we will mix it up. A third oh ya are goin through the right door, and another third be goin through tha left one. The rest will stay with me. as an added bonus, you get to pick where you go, except for you Frost, today is our demonstration on magic, and you are my test subject.”
“Akatosh’s flame, this is going to suck.” Frost mumbled.
“Oh I gotta see this.” Jetstream said with a laugh.
“I'm here for ya sweetheart, just one day a week of this, remember.” Apple Slice said, making Frost blush.
“A demonstration of the Wabbajack, moms gonna love this~” Starry Night sang.
“Oh, great, let me guess, you guys want to watch too?” the rest of Frost friends nodded. “Crap.”
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Frost sighed deeply. The magic testing was a royal pain, and the last effect, courtesy of a hysterical Jetstream; she is now a walking chocolate bar. She had to freeze several creatures already to prevent them from eating her, and now she was stuck sitting in the throne room alone with Sheogorath.
“You know, lunch is a godsend, it’s just great, now I gotta fight to prevent myself from being lunch!” she yelled.
“Don’t get your panties in a twist Frosty; the effects will wear off in ‘bout an hour, then we can get back to tha fun!” Sheogorath said excitedly.
“You’re enjoying this way too much.” She growled.
“Not enough ahm afraid. So, I think your mom wanted ya to tell me something?” he said while taking one of her ears and eating it.
“Hey what the hell! Give it back!”
“Don’t worry; you’ll get it back when the spell wears off.”
“I’d better; otherwise I’ll just have to take one of yours.” She growled.
“Ah look forward to it! Now tell me about your dream last night.” Sheogorath said calmly.
“Alright. Well, it was about some weird creatures with pointed ears, black robes, and something about a dominion, you know anything about it?”
“You’re leaving something out.” he said.
“Yea, something about a pony battery.” She waved her chocolate hoof idly.
“Well, this came sooner than ah thought.” He rubbed his chin thoughtfully.
“What did?"
“It would seem that the Aldmeri Dominion has taken an interest in your home.” He said.
“Okay you lost me, who are they?”
“A bunch of idiots who think they can force their will upon everybody. They banned the worship of Talos and are avid supporters of the Vigilant of Stendarr.”
“I'm still lost.” Frost said.
“Well, ah could go into a long winded speech about them, or ah could send you on a little excursion, stop them from taking everything you hold dear, hmm?”
Frost smiled. “All I got from that was adventure, and you sure as hell know I'm in.”
“In what, I think putting you in chocolate sauce is a bit redundant.” He laughed.
“Grr, change me back jerk!”
“Okay okay, ah have had ma fun.” He snapped his fingers and Frost went back to normal, she even got her ear back. He snapped his fingers again and a portal to some kind of lake opened up. “Have fun, and try not to die!”
“Wait, wh-” she didn’t get to finish, because Sheogorath kicked her into the portal, yelling something about Sparta.
PREPARE YOURSELVES
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REGIDAR PLS
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I find that fact that you can keep up the Cobain GIFs pretty impressive.
Seriously though, about the fic. Just reading the description, I can see that your main character is a Mary Sue. Also, half-Argonian-half-pony? No.
Finally, I'd like you to answer me a question. What colors is Frost? What two spectacularly overused colors is she?
1634190 I've got them all, man. They're like Pokemon.
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purple and red. ifyou have read my first fic, you would know who she is. the leadership part will be explained next chapter.
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prepare your anus, more like
i'll go read the other story
maybe it will have something in it to mitigate this disaster
or at least explain it because towlie.jpg
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your story revival has 267 unique viewers, of which you and i are two. it's very unlikely that anyone who reads this off the front page has read the other already
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You missed the point entirely. And no, in your picture she's black and red.
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to sum up my first fic, two argonians foil a plot by dagon and Sithis to take over equestia. one of them dies and the second lives on. later, the dying tribe they were apart of is granted a place to live in equestria, but some changes happen. Frost is a child of an argonian and a pegasus, the next chapter will explain her role a bit more.
1634281 Prepare your trainus, more like.
But what would I know? I'm just a furfag.
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im pretty sure i made her purple when i colored her in paint... ill fix it to make it more clear.
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thanks dude, you saved me the trouble of reading and leaving a comment on your hard work
and probably everyone else who scrolls past that post as well
quoted for posterity
edit: like a misaimed rocket, the sarcasm flies right over your head
quads edit oh fuck: actually that wasn't really sarcastic at all, i really do thank you
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man thought you were smarter than to take any of that seriously
i don't care if people walk around in fursuits 24/7 as long as they upvote me
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your welcome
One of my greatest pet peeves is when people confuse "your" and "you're". They sound the same, but they are used for two different things. "Your" is used when someone is referencing something that belongs to someone else. Example:
"You're", a contraction of "you are" is used when someone is describing another person. Example:
It vexes me to no end how many times people make this simple mistake.
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whoops
thanks, ill look it over and fix it.
on an unrelated note, i use microsoft word, and apparently it doesnt know the difference between the two.
edit: and done
1634320 For the trolls, man. For the trolls.
Also, fursuits suck. It's worse then a mascot costume, I nearly died of heatstroke. Also, they seem really pointless. I keep my furrism in my head.
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1634432 Furries: Create animal/antho versions of themselves, and role-play as them, creating art and stories about them.
Bronies: Create ponies/use existing ponies, role play with them and create art and stories.
Yeah, nothing similar at all. Them furries sure are creepy.
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it's a natural reaction, yo
like a defense mechanism or one'adoze evolution thingz
then again we all furries on tha inside
othawise we wouldn't be writin' shit about talking ponies
amirite bruthaman?
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ACCEPT THE FURFAG IN YOU
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SERIOUSLY, WHERE ARE YOU PULLING ALL THIS COBAIN FROM? ARE YOU HIM? ARE YOU KURT?
1634543 Sounds like you have a pretty good idea. Being a part of the underbelly of both, my friends call me Furfag McCloppinstien.
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I'm afraid not, child. But fear not. I have plenty more where this came from.
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the chapter or the comments?
the chapters will get longer i assure you.
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None of this "I'll make it better l8r." crap. That excuse is so overused on this site it's not even funny.
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make it better later? i planned for the first two to be short. the other chapters will have more stuff is all im sayin.
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Well, at least he's purple now.
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Frost is a girl... sorry if there is a mixup.
My god...
SPARTA!!!!
I'm sorry man, but... Ugh. Really? This hurts. I'll try to be nice, but, no promises.
Your grammar is barely coherent. Editor, please.
Now, onto the thing that made me even CLICK the link. Frost is HALF ARGONIAN WTF IS DIS I DON'T EVEN.
Griffon, changling, DRAGON?! I can live with those, but HALF ARGONIAN?! That is taking artistic liberty too far. It is worse then an alicorn OC whose colors are red and black. I...
a0.twimg.com/profile_images/1763100962/Princess_Luna_avatar_09_normal.jpg Oh, Celestia. Someone broke Dawnforge again. Right. Princess Luna will take care of this... I don't have much more to add then Dawny did, however. The story is... bad. I really can't add much more, and not take all night here. Ohwait, I'm going to anyways.
Half argonian has to be the biggest thing ever. I'm actually surprised the TWE haven't been here. Just that bad? A Skyrim pony crossover could be done, Faust, a ponified Skyrim would be epic, but.. this? I feel like going into a corner and crying now. I mean, just skimming over this, you need alot of help in grammar and even writing. I wish I could be more in-depth, but that half-argonian in and of itself makes even fully reading the Prologue horrid and mind-numbing.
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your concerns have been taken into account, but frankly, i have asked for editors and even proofreaders before, so i dont think the issue around that may be solved soon. and on the topic of the prologue, she doesnt even show up... its a dream she has involving a secret meeting by the Aldmeri Dominion.
1637463 Horray! Friendz!
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1638656 Easy. Tumblr can be used for more then watching bitchy feminists cry about men and for looking up porn.
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That statement just made my day.