Da Fuck? Why did you let the traiters get away! They deserve to be put into a canter camp! Awwww well...... I can still hold on to the thought that Twilight will be enlightend and rejoin Celestia's holy crusade, The rebels get caught and thrown into a canter camp and have "HORRIBLE" things done to them, or you write multiple endings so that each side gets what they want, or for Celestia to win because she is right! Anyway, good chapter, can't wait to see how Rarity deals with life in the hoofswitchz and NightFlare's tendenc to rape anything that moves.
228312 You can shut the buck up, dude. What Celestia is doing is stupid, short-sighted, and makes her easily worse than Nightmare Moon, by a huge margin.
How does being born a certain way make someone automatically deserve death? Euthanization is a different matter, there is nothing wrong with Earth Ponies that makes euthanasia neccessary. You're just being hateful, really, and much as I usually tolerate (Not love. Jus tolerate.) some of the dirtbags that frequent stories like this, I have had it with you and your constant "KILL ALL PONIES THEY MUST DIE LOLZ" attitude, and it isn't even close to being vaguely justifiable.
Originally I thought it might've been a running joke with you, and if it still is and I'm sorely mistaken, I apologize, but really, if this isn't a joke.. Stop commenting about how much Earth ponies suck and should be tortured and killed just for being freaking born.
Stop commenting in the manner you have previously commented, because if you truly believe a make-believe race of animals that has actually done NOTHING WRONG deserves to hunted to extinction, then you are bucked up in the head.
(I am very sorry if this was just a running joke between you and other posters, but it has been irritating me greatly to see you posting this sort of thing, and having people either ignore it or agree, as I have assumed you were serious after the fifth or so post.)
The ping-pong nature of the dialogue gets tiresome after a while. Formatting-wise, there needs to be a lot more emphasis on action, and then characters stop to talk after things go down. I also think that the whole thing about Rarity falling behind should be tear-jerking, but it isn't given the way you wrote it. Remember the "show, don't tell" rule.
If I was writing this, I'd have Rarity do something clearly heroic like walk right up the bounty hunters and then smash sand into their face. Then, lead them in the other direction.
228415 I don't really like what mrhappyface has been saying, but he's pretty clearly being facetious.
228434 Possibly, and I almost certainly fed that bucking troll, but..
It feels so good to yell at him, even if he was being facetious. Well, yell as much as you can over the internet.
Oh, and about Rarity throwing sand in their faces? Nah. Maybe unearthing a crapton of gems, and attempting to bribe, followed by trying to stab them in the eyes with said gems? Totally. Either way, more drama than "GO!!!" is required for this audience, although I appreciate the realism. I doubt Rarity would actually be able to do much but distract them for a few minutes.
228461 I like idea of her turning around and then bucking hunks at them again and again... Then they're crying because they can't see. Then she uses her voice that they follow to lead them away.
228415 No the fillycaust is not as bad as what Nightmare moon had planned, example, Eternal darkness = no sunlight for plants, which means all ponies die because all they eat is vegetarian! and if all plant eaters die then the all the meat eaters would die as well. Plus what thimgs do the earth ponies acttualy do that can't be done better or faster with magic? Replace all earth ponies with unicorns then what usefull stuff do they do? ABSOLUTLY NOTHING! All they do is sit around all day taking up space and food. Then they get bored and start having sex to kill time which means the population rises and then pretty soon equestria is overpopulated with a bunch of free-loading, good for nothing, sex addicted ponies who don't do jack shit! Then the overabundance of earth ponie take up all living space, leaving no room for farm land, and since earth ponies eat more than pegusi and unicorns they hog all the food and everyone else slowly dies! Not to mention how greedy they are, Apple Jack stalks and harreses her freind (Who was unicorn I might add) for a ticket to a dance just so she can make money! and on top of all that Apple bloom convinces a unicorn and pegusis filly to run around blowing ponyville up just so she can get a freakin' picture on her ass! Also Pinkie goes to a picnic and brings nothing exept for 3 ballons and moches of the food her friends made not to mention she's already bat-shit insane and would end up kkilling somepony soon anyway! And on another note of how greedy they are when AppleJack left for the rodeo Mayor mare (WHO was unsurprisingly an earth pony) she didn't do anything exept yell "Bring lots of money!" then Apple Jack has the nerve to lie to her friends and run away when they get worried about her and come looking for her! And besides all that this is Celestia for christ sake! the smartest pony in all of equestria! If she's going around killing off all the earth ponies she must have some valid reason! And even after all the shit Celestia did for the earth ponies before all this they still had the nerve to start whining going "I WANT MOAR!" and move to a seperate country and kick all the buffalo off their own land just so they could have some fucking apples! The list goes on and on, I could name a shit load of other things expressing how greedy and good for nothing earth ponies are! So yes I don't like the earth ponies and support Celestia's efforts fully. And yes I probably am fucked up in the head I already knew that! Although I do think killing fluttershy was a little harsh, I mean she should have been aloud to live after a short stay at a reeducation camp. Good Day Also I must ask, where is Zecora in all this? Did she get taken to a canter camp or was she allowed to live because Zebras are techniclly not earth ponies?
229010 If you look through the lines he's got a piont, but then again I am a heartless person. I thought My little Dashie was a waste of time. Progress cares not for morals. Good day.
well done rainbow dash i will follow you and i will do all i can to help you take down celestia down with celestia for all the wrong doing's she will pay for what she has done
I was being totally seriouse about the idea of having multiple endings so that each side gets pleased. Well I was being seriouse about everything else that I said, but still I think it's a good idea.
233493 Wait... Celestia has done wrong? When? I must have missed that part of the story. The only ones doing wrong I can find is Rainbow dash, Spike, Rarity, Sweetie Bell, and Twilight, who are filthy traitors to the glory that is the Equestrian flag. Who for their horrendouse crime desearve to be captured, sent to a canter camp, and raped and then worked to death for siding with terrorists.
Good Day traiter . I shall ready the moon launcher at once.
242812 Well then, if you like the breathing peices of filth known as earth ponies so much, then why don't you join them at Hoofshwitz? I'm sure Night Flare would enjoy your "company" as much as he enjoyed that filthy pink whore's or as much as he'll like that disgusting terrorist bitch the bounty hunters just caught.
243500 Yes well i'm sorry that you are an unclean heratic who will burn in the bowels of hell for all eternity for supporting the terrorist plague that is afflicting all the hard working unicorns and pegusi. I am also sorry that you are disgusting and morraly revolting and that your moral compass is way off. Also author please hurry and write more to this noble epic, I can't wait for Rarity to get raped by Night Flare, and Pinkie agin, or maby he forces Rarity and Pinkie to go at it in front of a camera. Or maybe he takes his.... Oh sorry, I got off topic a bit. Anyway I also hope that they shave Rarity's mane and tail because that would be an intense phycological blow to her. and it would be funny to watch the filthy traitors suffer and lose the will to live.
243855 i have two statements i have come to relise that Celestia was right all along and please forgive me i was wrong all along and two i have to say even for the earth pony scum and even tho i was one and i was poven wrong that celestia is right rape i have to say is way to nice for them
244162 I'm glad you have deen touched by Celestia's holy truth, It would be my honor to welcome you into the Celestian party of equestria. Please except this complementery gift basket that includes A Swim suit calander featuring the mane 6, a dozen cream filled doughnuts, a statuete of a walrus rideing a 10 speed bike, a copy of the satanic bible, and toilet paper that has pictuers of dinosaurs on each sheet. Good Day
243624243839 Mabey Cows should be excluded from damnation as they have some uses such as giving milk and leather. They still, however are inferior to Unicorns and Pegusi and should be treated as second class citizens.
243624 That would make no sense given that they would be less productive in camps. They would be far more productive in mechanized factory farm complexes. Not saying that I agree with Celestia in what's she's doing (Heavens, no!), but she seems to be out for efficiency.
My favorite characters are earth ponies and it seems like unicorn fans have some misconceptions about the abilities of unicorns. 1. In the episode with Trixie Spike comments on how most unicorn's magic only really works with their special talents. Since Twilight's special talent is magic she can do many spells other unicorns can't do. 2. Unicorn lovers try to point out the "superiority" of unicorns by using twilight as an example. Twilight is a magic prodigy. You think Lyra or some other run of the mill unicorn could do what Twilight does? 3. Other than magic in and of itself earth ponies can do anything that unicorns can do. The show illustrates this as earth ponies are shown in all manner of occupations. So what if they don't look as fancy when they drink a cup of tea without levitating the cup to their mouths? Earth Ponies here have fallen victim to hate and negative propaganda.
258427 Good Sir. I am insulted. My comments have only contained wholesome values, postive lifestyles, and peace, love, and tolerance. And yet you say he's the best commenter after posting anti Celestian propaganda? How could you!
>>mrhappyface Lol, love. Anyways, I do see what you are saying. Earth ponies do not appear to have much going for them. Everything they do can be improved by magic or flight, and the strain needs to be strengthened.
Da Fuck? Why did you let the traiters get away! They deserve to be put into a canter camp! Awwww well...... I can still hold on to the thought that Twilight will be enlightend and rejoin Celestia's holy crusade, The rebels get caught and thrown into a canter camp and have "HORRIBLE" things done to them, or you write multiple endings so that each side gets what they want, or for Celestia to win because she is right! Anyway, good chapter, can't wait to see how Rarity deals with life in the hoofswitchz and NightFlare's tendenc to rape anything that moves.
Good Day.
228312
You can shut the buck up, dude.
What Celestia is doing is stupid, short-sighted, and makes her easily worse than Nightmare Moon, by a huge margin.
How does being born a certain way make someone automatically deserve death? Euthanization is a different matter, there is nothing wrong with Earth Ponies that makes euthanasia neccessary.
You're just being hateful, really, and much as I usually tolerate (Not love. Jus tolerate.) some of the dirtbags that frequent stories like this, I have had it with you and your constant "KILL ALL PONIES THEY MUST DIE LOLZ" attitude, and it isn't even close to being vaguely justifiable.
Originally I thought it might've been a running joke with you, and if it still is and I'm sorely mistaken, I apologize, but really, if this isn't a joke..
Stop commenting about how much Earth ponies suck and should be tortured and killed just for being freaking born.
Stop commenting in the manner you have previously commented, because if you truly believe a make-believe race of animals that has actually done NOTHING WRONG deserves to hunted to extinction, then you are bucked up in the head.
(I am very sorry if this was just a running joke between you and other posters, but it has been irritating me greatly to see you posting this sort of thing, and having people either ignore it or agree, as I have assumed you were serious after the fifth or so post.)
The ping-pong nature of the dialogue gets tiresome after a while. Formatting-wise, there needs to be a lot more emphasis on action, and then characters stop to talk after things go down. I also think that the whole thing about Rarity falling behind should be tear-jerking, but it isn't given the way you wrote it. Remember the "show, don't tell" rule.
If I was writing this, I'd have Rarity do something clearly heroic like walk right up the bounty hunters and then smash sand into their face. Then, lead them in the other direction.
228415
I don't really like what mrhappyface has been saying, but he's pretty clearly being facetious.
228434
Possibly, and I almost certainly fed that bucking troll, but..
It feels so good to yell at him, even if he was being facetious. Well, yell as much as you can over the internet.
Oh, and about Rarity throwing sand in their faces? Nah. Maybe unearthing a crapton of gems, and attempting to bribe, followed by trying to stab them in the eyes with said gems? Totally.
Either way, more drama than "GO!!!" is required for this audience, although I appreciate the realism. I doubt Rarity would actually be able to do much but distract them for a few minutes.
228461
I like idea of her turning around and then bucking hunks at them again and again... Then they're crying because they can't see. Then she uses her voice that they follow to lead them away.
But your idea also sounds great.
228469
Or the power of whining!
That could totally have worked.
228415 No the fillycaust is not as bad as what Nightmare moon had planned, example, Eternal darkness = no sunlight for plants, which means all ponies die because all they eat is vegetarian! and if all plant eaters die then the all the meat eaters would die as well. Plus what thimgs do the earth ponies acttualy do that can't be done better or faster with magic? Replace all earth ponies with unicorns then what usefull stuff do they do? ABSOLUTLY NOTHING! All they do is sit around all day taking up space and food. Then they get bored and start having sex to kill time which means the population rises and then pretty soon equestria is overpopulated with a bunch of free-loading, good for nothing, sex addicted ponies who don't do jack shit! Then the overabundance of earth ponie take up all living space, leaving no room for farm land, and since earth ponies eat more than pegusi and unicorns they hog all the food and everyone else slowly dies! Not to mention how greedy they are, Apple Jack stalks and harreses her freind (Who was unicorn I might add) for a ticket to a dance just so she can make money! and on top of all that Apple bloom convinces a unicorn and pegusis filly to run around blowing ponyville up just so she can get a freakin' picture on her ass! Also Pinkie goes to a picnic and brings nothing exept for 3 ballons and moches of the food her friends made not to mention she's already bat-shit insane and would end up kkilling somepony soon anyway! And on another note of how greedy they are when AppleJack left for the rodeo Mayor mare (WHO was unsurprisingly an earth pony) she didn't do anything exept yell "Bring lots of money!" then Apple Jack has the nerve to lie to her friends and run away when they get worried about her and come looking for her! And besides all that this is Celestia for christ sake! the smartest pony in all of equestria! If she's going around killing off all the earth ponies she must have some valid reason! And even after all the shit Celestia did for the earth ponies before all this they still had the nerve to start whining going "I WANT MOAR!" and move to a seperate country and kick all the buffalo off their own land just so they could have some fucking apples! The list goes on and on, I could name a shit load of other things expressing how greedy and good for nothing earth ponies are! So yes I don't like the earth ponies and support Celestia's efforts fully. And yes I probably am fucked up in the head I already knew that! Although I do think killing fluttershy was a little harsh, I mean she should have been aloud to live after a short stay at a reeducation camp. Good Day Also I must ask, where is Zecora in all this? Did she get taken to a canter camp or was she allowed to live because Zebras are techniclly not earth ponies?
229010
If you look through the lines he's got a piont, but then again I am a heartless person.
I thought My little Dashie was a waste of time.
Progress cares not for morals.
Good day.
well done rainbow dash i will follow you and i will do all i can to help you take down celestia down with celestia for all the wrong doing's she will pay for what she has done
I was being totally seriouse about the idea of having multiple endings so that each side gets pleased. Well I was being seriouse about everything else that I said, but still I think it's a good idea.
233493 Wait... Celestia has done wrong? When? I must have missed that part of the story. The only ones doing wrong I can find is Rainbow dash, Spike, Rarity, Sweetie Bell, and Twilight, who are filthy traitors to the glory that is the Equestrian flag. Who for their horrendouse crime desearve to be captured, sent to a canter camp, and raped and then worked to death for siding with terrorists.
Good Day traiter . I shall ready the moon launcher at once.
The wait...It is killing me.
Good Day
236767 yes i think that celestia is wrong and yes i will fight back and i will save those who are in the canter camp
242812 Well then, if you like the breathing peices of filth known as earth ponies so much, then why don't you join them at Hoofshwitz? I'm sure Night Flare would enjoy your "company" as much as he enjoyed that filthy pink whore's or as much as he'll like that disgusting terrorist bitch the bounty hunters just caught.
Good Day you terrorist supporter, Good Day
243213 you think celestia is right i cant forgive you and so you must be locked in complet darkness with nothing to be your friend im sorry
I think you could add Donkeys, Mules and Cattle in the camps as well.
243624
Well said.
243500
Friendship is weak and nothing compared to the allpowerfull state.
Good day.
243500 Yes well i'm sorry that you are an unclean heratic who will burn in the bowels of hell for all eternity for supporting the terrorist plague that is afflicting all the hard working unicorns and pegusi. I am also sorry that you are disgusting and morraly revolting and that your moral compass is way off. Also author please hurry and write more to this noble epic, I can't wait for Rarity to get raped by Night Flare, and Pinkie agin, or maby he forces Rarity and Pinkie to go at it in front of a camera. Or maybe he takes his.... Oh sorry, I got off topic a bit. Anyway I also hope that they shave Rarity's mane and tail because that would be an intense phycological blow to her. and it would be funny to watch the filthy traitors suffer and lose the will to live.
243855
And once again you cross the line.
Good day.
243855 i have two statements i have come to relise that Celestia was right all along and please forgive me i was wrong all along and two i have to say even for the earth pony scum and even tho i was one and i was poven wrong that celestia is right rape i have to say is way to nice for them
243896 Sorry, I got a bit carried away there.
228312
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Seriously, dude, you need a shrink and strong medication.
244162 I'm glad you have deen touched by Celestia's holy truth, It would be my honor to welcome you into the Celestian party of equestria. Please except this complementery gift basket that includes A Swim suit calander featuring the mane 6, a dozen cream filled doughnuts, a statuete of a walrus rideing a 10 speed bike, a copy of the satanic bible, and toilet paper that has pictuers of dinosaurs on each sheet. Good Day
244480 yay dinosaurs
243624 243839 Mabey Cows should be excluded from damnation as they have some uses such as giving milk and leather. They still, however are inferior to Unicorns and Pegusi and should be treated as second class citizens.
243624
That would make no sense given that they would be less productive in camps. They would be far more productive in mechanized factory farm complexes. Not saying that I agree with Celestia in what's she's doing (Heavens, no!), but she seems to be out for efficiency.
My favorite characters are earth ponies and it seems like unicorn fans have some misconceptions about the abilities of unicorns.
1. In the episode with Trixie Spike comments on how most unicorn's magic only really works with their special talents. Since Twilight's special talent is magic she can do many spells other unicorns can't do.
2. Unicorn lovers try to point out the "superiority" of unicorns by using twilight as an example. Twilight is a magic prodigy. You think Lyra or some other run of the mill unicorn could do what Twilight does?
3. Other than magic in and of itself earth ponies can do anything that unicorns can do. The show illustrates this as earth ponies are shown in all manner of occupations. So what if they don't look as fancy when they drink a cup of tea without levitating the cup to their mouths?
Earth Ponies here have fallen victim to hate and negative propaganda.
258126 appleshaq is best commenter
Everything else aside this is a dark and well written tale.
258126 It's not propaganda if it's true.
258427 The wait...it makes me sad... when is the next update to this masterpeice coming out? I cannot wait much longer.
258427 Good Sir. I am insulted. My comments have only contained wholesome values, postive lifestyles, and peace, love, and tolerance. And yet you say he's the best commenter after posting anti Celestian propaganda? How could you!
>>mrhappyface
Lol, love. Anyways, I do see what you are saying. Earth ponies do not appear to have much going for them. Everything they do can be improved by magic or flight, and the strain needs to be strengthened.
Moralfags just ruin it, man.
Anyways, great story so far