not bad, still a little quick but manageable.

To be completely honest, I don't know a single mother who would just stand aside while their husband beat their child. Even if she was threatened the mother would gladly take the beatings to protect their child (in this case foal).

The last couple of paragraphs seemed extremely rushed. Not only did you throw them into the same home together in a couple sentences, you also immediately had them playing music together without any practice. Even if Octy had the music written to include both of their brands of music, she would need to practice it with Vinyl to make sure it sounded good.

Ah fuck, you didn't do a detailed shower scene! I love those! D: