Part One
"Fire!" Princess Celestia yelled as multiple unicorns fired their magic at the gooey blue menace that was slowly approaching them. The blue menace withdrawed some but soon continued on its relentless strike towards the ponies. Suddenly a brigade of pegasi flying in a V formation flew high over the unicorns, dropping spherical objects into holes where the blue goo had pooled up, with the exception of Ditzy Doo, who was flying out of formation and dropped hers on some earth pony's head. With bright red explosions, most of the goo in the holes had been completely annihilated, causing the blue menace to withdraw at the frontlines as a group of earth ponies rolled in high tech looking cannons. As they were preparing to fire the cannons, a bright light shone from above and a spinning vortex opened as Platius and Admiral Abraxis were beamed to the ground. Turning her head, Princess Celestia examined the two and recognizing Platius, she rushed to greet the two.
While rubbing his forehead, Admiral Abraxis soon asked, "Where are we?"
"Ah, for this is another universe that requires assistance fighting the creeper" Platius replied. As Abraxis' vision started to come back to him, he looked around and saw that many things looked familiar.
"Wait, I know this place.... this is Equestria!" He quickly declared, "I know this because there was this EXTREMELY popular television series called 'My Little Pony Friendship is Magic'. In fact, it was so popular that it ran for over 11,000 years! From the year 2010 A.D. to just before The Great Exodus! And the series soon resumed after the fall of the first creeper nexus. Aliana, my daughter, used to love to watch the show as a child." As he finished, Princess Celestia had finally come up to greet the two, but before she could say anything, Admiral Abraxis saw her and yelled, "And you must be Princess Celestia, Ruler of Equestria!" Princess Celestia stepped back, surprised that the mysterious man knew her name and status, but she quickly replied,
"And you must be Admiral Abraxis, leader of the New Human Alliance!" The Admiral jumped back, even more surprised that the large white Alicorn knew his name and status.
"Ah, Young One," Platius began, "I had told this Princess that you could be of assistance to the ponies in this universe to fight off the creeper (the blue goo), for they only have control of one planet, Earth, but they quickly lost ground on it, all the other kingdoms on this planet fell to the creeper's wraith, millions of ponies' lives lost, and Equestria is the only kingdom left under their control, and they're struggling to keep it. I had also seeded this race with 'encouragements' which gave them their magical powers which you see in action right now." Platius finished his last sentence as he took a deep breath.
"Yes," Princess Celestia began, "what your friend says is true, while you were fighting the 'creeper' in your universe, he was here helping us develop technology to fight the 'creeper' in our universe, our unicorns' magic were able to hold the blue menace off for a while until we had the technology developed for our earth ponies to use, and just in time too, many of our unicorns became fatigued and were unable to continue to fight off the blue menace."
" Have you been able to develop a way to destroy any of the 'emitters' (things that emit the blue goo)?" Abraxis asked.
"Not really 'destroy' them, but 'convert them'" Princess Celestia replied, "oh, and there's six ponies I'd like you to meet" As she finished that sentence, the Princess called out six ponies names: "Applejack", "Fluttershy", "Pinkie Pie", "Rainbow Dash", "Rarity", and finally "Twilight Sparkle". When all six ponies arrived at their location, Princess Celestia began to speak, "Hello my little ponies, there's two people I'd like you to meet." as she pointed her front right hoof at Admiral Abraxis and Platius. "one of them is the man who helped us create the technology to fight off the creeper and the other is the man who will help us lead the defense against the creeper and maybe even offense." All six of the ponies greeted the two with a hello and several moments passed before Pinkie finally said,
"Those 'things' don't look like ponies, who are they?"
" Ah, my little pony, " Princess Celestia began to say, "that's because they're from a different universe, the one you see on the right is a 'human', and his race had successfully fended off and defeated the creeper, the other you see is a person that is the last of his kind from long, long ago, before even I existed!"
"Oh," the group said in unison.
Suddenly there was a loud beeping noise emanating from Abraxis' pocket, who soon withdrawed a small scanning device and he read the readings displayed on the screen, after many moments of analyzing the data, he finally said,
"It appears that my pocket scanner is detecting large amounts of fractal energy being produced, and it appears that the source is those jewels all six of you ponies are wearing... wait, THOSE ARE THE ELEMENTS OF HARMONY!!!!!! Now, I remember, those gems vanquish evil, and it also appears that they're miniaturized high efficiency fractal energy reactors that generate their own unique amount and frequency of fractal radiation, that when combined in different ways can have many different effects, but are near useless when alone. If we study these, we can provide much new insight in many different fields of science!"
"Yes, and the Elements of Harmony are what we use to 'convert' the creeper emitters, and what we discovered that if each unleashes it's power at different, but extremely precise times, it can convert evil to good instead of just destroying or banishing it." Princess Celestia told him," would you like to see them in action?"
"Sure!" the Admiral replied. The Alicorn told the mane six to go convert the nearest emitter, the cannons (which were more like 'blasters') the earth ponies had pulled out earlier had destroyed enough creeper for the six ponies to get within range of the emitter. As they started chanting, the Elements started to glow and soon they each blasted a distinct frequency of visible light and other electromagnetic frequencies that were detected by the Admiral's pocket scanner, and all the colors blended together to form a rather "odd" rainbow with the order of the colors being much different than of a normal rainbow, The band of colors quickly engulfed the emitter, soon, the emitter was "converted", instead producing Creeper, it produced a white goo, which Admiral Abraxis soon realized was "Anti-Creeper".
The white Alicorn soon explained the two men how the emitter emits a white goo instead of the "evil" Creeper, which doesn't harm anything except "evil" creeper. She also explained that the ponies could "control" the emitter, telling it when to start or stop producing the white goo. Astonished at what just happened, Abraxis suggested that they should set up a command tent and discuss how they would defend this land from the creeper. Platius, Admiral Abraxis and Princess Celestia soon had a tent set up and inside, began to discuss defensive tactics to use in order to protect Equestria.
End of Part One
I proofread this over and over again, you should find no spelling errors or grammar errors.
However, you could give me suggestions on how I could improve this story and for people who have played Creeper world and Creeper World 2 can give me ideas on what to write next.
<No Universe is Safe From the Creeper>
"SWEET JESUS!!!1ONE!!"
<They face a blue goo menace called "Creeper">
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Interesting concept! Being familiar with the game you're referencing (NOT Minecraft, folks!), I'll take a look at this one in the morning. :)
Nice way to use the Elements of Harmony with the anti-creeper, simple and strait to the point.
As for ideas, perhaps introduce the... Phantoms was the name for the flying creeper right? And perhaps dragons as a minimal version of the Thor.
If your talking about story ideas, not much help there I fear.
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in the first one it was spores, in the second they were called phantoms, I'll be sure to include something about them and how they're a nuisance to the pegasi in part two
However, I still don't know how the creeper will react to spike's breath though.
I also have some ideas of the group traveling to the dark and alternate reality that originally corrupted the creeper and I'll throw discord into that!
First two things that came to mind were:
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Honestly, I would've perferred you to used the latter.
95945 I'm not sure how Spike's breath would work. Only thing that comes to mind from the game is that it somehow has to do with the worm holes used to warp stuff between two points, as he used it for letters on the show.
Also, could you guys gie me feedback on how well written this is? I want to know if my writing is any good or not.