Ok, this went harder than it had Any right to be, God damn.
Can't wait to see more.

11897998
Thank you dude!

We need more of this story now

Is nice. But I feel like I got lost somewhere along the way and have only a slight clue what is happening.

To be honest, the whole battle thing was pretty confusing, but the dialogues that followed between Luna, Tia and Sombra were quite disturbing, I really hope to see more to read how this ends

For me, it was neat......right up till the whole fight bit....then I lost the plot in the confusion.

11898521
Yeah, tbh I'm not really good at describing fight scenes. I'm trying to get better though!

11898614
Hopefully I can get better at making fight scenes so I can actually bring my cool ideas and not make them confusing as all hell, thanks for the feedback!

11898752
It’s not the fight scene itself, usually if I can understand a fight scene, but the lyrics to the song are quite distracting

11898792
I could see why the music would be distracting. I was trying to go for the most accurate parallel to the actual fight scenes in Smile HD with different attack but I think I just overdid it.

Thanks for the feedback though!

...what in oblivion did I just read.

11906206
Something very cringe my friend, something from the deep recesses of my mind, something I should really get a physiatrist to look into.

11906208
Despite the detailed analysis of the data presented, I have failed to reach any meaningful outcome from the process due to a cascading dissonance of cognitive process.

11906227
I did not understand a single word of that but I'll take it as a compliment.