Spike, after mindfucking Twilight and then attempting to fix her with duct tape, finds himself thrust into a strange new world of mind fuckery in which he decides, or is forced to, mindfuck the rest of his friends.
Spike had basically everything he wanted, so why didn’t he feel happy?
Umm maybe because you transformed almost all of your friends into mindless, walking objects?
Aside from that, I have some complaints about this story, especially after Pinkie's chapter: 1 - I don't understand why this story has a "comedy" tag. I didn't find it funny at all, in fact I think it should have the "dark" tag instead, or at least "drama". 2 - I didn't expect Pinkie's chapter to go the way it did, especially since it was the chapter that made me think "damn, this turned dark fast". I am not complaining, I simply think that in a way, it wasn't very fitting for Pinkie to be the one raped. 3 - again, AJ's chapter was also pretty dark, considering the way Mac treated her. I know you probably avoid the "dark" or "gore" tag by making the mares enjoy this(which like I said, it's pretty strange to me), but she was literally tackled and ear raped by two dudes. 4 -my biggest pet peeve so far: I expected Rarity to actually be the one raped, since, in a morbid way, it made sense for Spike to go to her and do the deed forcefully, but imagine my surprise when it turned out that IT WAS HER FETISH ALL ALONG!! Holy shit dude! Not to mention, she basically gave up her dreams, life and job just to be ear fucked???
11856073 Yeah, honestly it is pretty fucked up, but I felt the comedy tag fit better then the dark tag due to the fact that being ear fucked and it somehow not just instantly killing you is darkly comedic. The whole story was working up to the fact that eventually his (Meaning Spike) dark deeds turn against him because the mares start to be into it, which doesn't make the slightest bit of sense. I felt that the comedy tag fit due to this, though I will admit it is an incredibly dark, twisted type of gallows humor.
Umm maybe because you transformed almost all of your friends into mindless, walking objects?
Aside from that, I have some complaints about this story, especially after Pinkie's chapter:
1 - I don't understand why this story has a "comedy" tag. I didn't find it funny at all, in fact I think it should have the "dark" tag instead, or at least "drama".
2 - I didn't expect Pinkie's chapter to go the way it did, especially since it was the chapter that made me think "damn, this turned dark fast". I am not complaining, I simply think that in a way, it wasn't very fitting for Pinkie to be the one raped.
3 - again, AJ's chapter was also pretty dark, considering the way Mac treated her. I know you probably avoid the "dark" or "gore" tag by making the mares enjoy this(which like I said, it's pretty strange to me), but she was literally tackled and ear raped by two dudes.
4 -my biggest pet peeve so far: I expected Rarity to actually be the one raped, since, in a morbid way, it made sense for Spike to go to her and do the deed forcefully, but imagine my surprise when it turned out that IT WAS HER FETISH ALL ALONG!! Holy shit dude! Not to mention, she basically gave up her dreams, life and job just to be ear fucked???
11856073
Yeah, honestly it is pretty fucked up, but I felt the comedy tag fit better then the dark tag due to the fact that being ear fucked and it somehow not just instantly killing you is darkly comedic. The whole story was working up to the fact that eventually his (Meaning Spike) dark deeds turn against him because the mares start to be into it, which doesn't make the slightest bit of sense. I felt that the comedy tag fit due to this, though I will admit it is an incredibly dark, twisted type of gallows humor.