This looks good, but I can tell its already looking rushed. slow it down and have fun with it.

VinylJack?
AppleScratch?

interesting...

1405323 Thanks ill keep that in mind
1405367 ive never seen it before so i thought id give it a try

A Unique pairing alright, but try to slow the pace down a little bit, work on ambient descriptions to immerse your readers. I know that writing around your story and not the story itself can be hard, my own stories had the same problem.

Still I liked the part about AJ having to buy her own cider at an inflated price. Thats Capitalism for you AJ

That's certainly not a pairing you see too often. I think I'll fav to track this story.

Your grammar is fairly perfect, no complaints there. But your writing is still... amateur. It's not terrible but it's... not great. Chin up though, with practice and experience you'll get better. I'm still looking forward to reading more of this!

Note: An easy way to get better at writing is simply to read more. See what other people do right and wrong.

1432177>>1432481 thanks for the feedback guys. i'll take your advice to heart

I like it. It isn't a standard ship but nothing odd. Small notice.

"Vinyl rolled over and tried to sleep. It took her a while, but, when sleep finally took her, she dreamed of and orange earth pony with a blonde mane."

It should be 'she dreamed of an orange earth pony' not and. Still nothing else jumped out at me. nice job.

1492482 thanks. fixed

There's one thing I saw that lacked a lot.
Actually, two.

One, as Fox-Sama said, it is rushed. Part of the reason for that is because of your lack of description and emotion. You have plenty of dialogue and action. For example:

Each mare seemed equally intrigued by the other's story. However it was getting late.
"Whoa, nelly," Applejack exclaimed, looking at the clock behind the bar, "is that the time? Ah better get heading home."
"Awww, OK." Vinyl pulled out a mobile phone. "Hey, can I have your number?"

Insead, try:

Each mare seemed equally intrigued by the other's story.
Applejack happened to glance at the clock - and realized just how late it was. "Whoa, nelly," Applejack exclaimed in disbelief. "Is that the time already? Ah better get heading home."
"Awwww." Vinyl sighed. "You sure?"
"Ah'm sure." She took another chug of her drink. "I got business to take care of in the mornin', ya'know."
Vinyl gave a small chuckle. "I get the feeling." She pulled out a mobile phone. "Hey, can I have your number?"

By the way, if you need an editor, just say the word, either through this comments section, or through PM.

I ship Rarijack like my life depends on it, BUUUUT I can make room Vinyl Scratch befriending AJ and more. I like this pair, but don't rush it.