Ever heard of the saying "Show, don't tell." ? Basically you didn't have to tell everyone about the MCs powers in the description, so instead you could have shown everyone his powers in story format progressively. Better this way than a info dump.

Well, I'm not that good at giving advice, but I can give you some possible directions you can take:

1. The protagonist follows a camp where he seeks revenge on the ponies and on all of Equestria for being unjustly imprisoned. If you follow this option there are other options for how he will take revenge, he can do it himself, or influence the events that will happen, both helping the villains and ending the chance of Equestria being able to form alliances with other races, such as the griffins, hippogriffs, dragons, yaks, and you can even make them stay on your side.

2. The protagonist, despite the injustice he suffered, does not hold a grudge against Equestria and tries to use his powers to help the world. This is a more classic choice, here the protagonist would follow the canon by helping the mane six, defeating the villains, making friends, perhaps falling in love with some characters, even here there is a greater chance of a scene happening where he grants a cutiemark to Gabby.

3. The protagonist simply acts like a neutral being who will only do whatever he wants or finds fun. Just caring about the creatures he likes.

Hope this helps.

Will Vetrix’s children ever appear in this story?

dont know who this is a picture of but it looks like Tanya from "Saga of Tanya the evil"

This is an interesting story so I'll keep an eye on it for the next chapter but other then that keep up the good work

11784846
same here

11783931
True, but I thought that it would be a good idea give my readers a description of Vetrix’s powers, so that you lot can call me out on any inconsistencies I accidentally make while writing this story.

11784733
Nope, not Tanya. It’s a picture of Vetrix, one of the antagonists from the Yu-Gi-Oh! ZEXAL anime. Though I can understand why you could get confused, as Tanya and Vetrix do share very similar silhouettes (and their similar attitudes and psychology, or used to, until Vetrix redeemed himself.)

11783987
Not directly. I do plan on referencing them later on though.

11784846
I’ll try not to disappoint.

11791397
Okay 🙂

11791397
Quick question but i want to make sure what I'm thinking is right or not but is your displaced a villian or are they like a miss understood person who Celestia thinks is evil?

11791885
Ah, spoilers!

11791961
Lol true