We follow a human scientist with a fascination for the living dead, turned griffon 200 years before the return of Nightmare Moon. Will he continue his quest for madness or will he find something worth protecting?
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Telling what happened is cool and all but... Its boring, for example instead of this, you could do this:
Look at the expression plastered on his face, I couldn’t help myself and pushed it all the way down to the knot.
"Ugh!"
He jerked.
CRACK!
And then snapped another shackle locking his hind leg with my own.
"Mhm"
He was liking it and so was I but it’s a shame I can’t feel what it feels like. But it must be good from the faces he normally pulls…. He also bites when he’s about to knot? I think I’m gonna copy him. “You ready?”
This way, by showing the character moaning, the sounds and their reactions instead of describing it the scenes become much better
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I guess I could, thanks for the suggestion.
I feel very unconfutable.
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So will Anubis be when he sits down~