It was supposed to be a routine goodwill trip to Saddle Arabia, but now the ponies of Bronco Company have found themselves framed for burning a town to the ground, and a full blown war isn't far behind...
That was an INCREDIBLE twist at the end. Who would have guessed that the villains being smart and fixing their mistakes would end up HELPING the heroes?
Beyond that, when I saw Nocturne freaking out about somebody in the group, I didn't give him enough initial credit. Because the name wasn't given, I assumed he had noticed Cravat, and was imagining he must be awesome due to coming from a noble family, and was just being an idiot again. I was completely taken off-guard when the individual he noticed was Shillelagh. Given you didn't give the name until you had Nocturne approach Maniple, I'm not sure whether you intended that bait and switch, or whether it's something that happened without being meant, but either way, it was great.
11848510 Yeah, that scene was definitely written to be 'bait' intentionally; because the reader has been explicitly told that Cravat has a noteworthy past and so obviously we know that he's a significant threat to the conspiracy. Shillelagh's nature and skillset, meanwhile, has only been hinted at (at least, I hope there were enough hints for it not to feel like a complete ass-pull :P).
Nocturne would, of course, have reacted similarly to discovering that a noble was among Corsair's crew, since that would also represent a big problem (just a different kind).
Such a shame he got tunnel vision when he saw Shillelagh's file, huh?
11848550 Okay- so it was intentional, in which case, my hat off to you for successfully setting up such a narratively consistent subversion of the reader's expectations.
That was an INCREDIBLE twist at the end. Who would have guessed that the villains being smart and fixing their mistakes would end up HELPING the heroes?
Beyond that, when I saw Nocturne freaking out about somebody in the group, I didn't give him enough initial credit. Because the name wasn't given, I assumed he had noticed Cravat, and was imagining he must be awesome due to coming from a noble family, and was just being an idiot again. I was completely taken off-guard when the individual he noticed was Shillelagh. Given you didn't give the name until you had Nocturne approach Maniple, I'm not sure whether you intended that bait and switch, or whether it's something that happened without being meant, but either way, it was great.
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Yeah, that scene was definitely written to be 'bait' intentionally; because the reader has been explicitly told that Cravat has a noteworthy past and so obviously we know that he's a significant threat to the conspiracy. Shillelagh's nature and skillset, meanwhile, has only been hinted at (at least, I hope there were enough hints for it not to feel like a complete ass-pull :P).
Nocturne would, of course, have reacted similarly to discovering that a noble was among Corsair's crew, since that would also represent a big problem (just a different kind).
Such a shame he got tunnel vision when he saw Shillelagh's file, huh?
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Okay- so it was intentional, in which case, my hat off to you for successfully setting up such a narratively consistent subversion of the reader's expectations.
why was twilight not asked for help?
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Because that's what we call a plot hole!
Um...
She's at the Wonderbolt Academy with Rainbow Dash on a map mission? ¯\_(ツ)_/¯