Coldness...
That's what was being described right now. Nothing but coldness and snow.
There was a blizzard going around a town. As the town it self was abandoned it self as the buildings were broken down as well as Houses and stores. They were all tore down and we're destroyed aswell. The blizzard was moving fast as it was making anything freeze to Crystal Ice. There were also dead frozen skeletons on the streets and places as they all had clothes still on. It was like something happened that took them by surprise. And the light of a different moon was shining on the planet. Not a moon but a ringed planet type moon with a small moon on the side.
The most distinguished scene was the pile of Robot bodies lying around broken. It was like a massacre happened as there were some heads in the snow that had a 'ERROR' on the visor.
But then a hole pile of the robot bodies were scene made in to a large mountain as a dome of some sort. A figure then came in to view from the blizzard as it walked through it without any casualties. The figure was described to be a robot it self.
This one was different as it arms and legs were modified longer a bit also with his hands futuristic type and as his legs were metallic white blue boots type. He also had a tail on his back which had a vile with yellow liquid inside as it also sported a sering. It looked like a scorpion tail if being precise. The figure face was the same as the destroyed bots on the ground as it had a visor on it. The visors showed his blue holographic eyes on the screen as well as the mouth underneath the visors that was an actual mouth. It also had blue hair on its head which were comed up in stile but they had Five small circle lights which glowed yellow . He also wore a jacket that was sporting a Lighting shield symbol on its back.
He walked through the crowd of dead bodies as he didn't care for any. He even stepped on some and broke them. He stopped as he picked up a dead bots head as it spilled oil from the bottom. He bring it up and opened his mouth drinking the oil inside, Once he was done he crushed it with his bare hands and throw it away. He began walking again but stopped as he stepped on something weird. He looked down to see it was another bot but it was looked like a baby of some sort as the visor on the screen showed 'ERROR' on it.
He also felt something beside the Baby Bot and saw a hand holding the bot. It reveals to be another Robot but female. He guessed that this is the mother of the child. He looked down on them once again but he signed coldly.
"No, Don't show any regret for the dead." He spoke. His voice was like of a young teen. His arms changed into claws as he grabbed them both and ripped them apart spilling oil on the snow. After he was done he dropped them both as they were left in some peaces. He wiped the oil from his mouth and went off."There gone. No point in keeping the bodies like this if not being used." He told him self.
Just then another figure came in flying and landing behind him creating a bit of dust as he didn't look back. The dust went away to reveal to be another Robot like him but he had white hair. Yellow eyes and was wearing a fire coat. He also had wings behind his back but they went away soon.
"Hey! F.S! Hows the hunt going there?" He asked in a casual toon trying to sound cool."You know. Getting a bit of stomach fuel. Killing the worker bots and.."
"N, What are you doing hear now?" F.S asked the now named N as he looked at him."I'm just taking a walk around. You just happened to drop now?"
"Oh me!" He said."Well, if you asked. I was just coming back from meeting with V as she was doing her thing. You know.."
"Ripping off worker drones organs and feeding them there own intestines Infront of there whole family.." F.S deadpanned.
"Well. That's how she is you know. She's just showing her own mutual side."
"Her mutual side is off a craze sadistic and loves to cause harm to others. Then yeah we can see that already on how she communicate with us." He sarcastically told N.
"Yeah, But that's what makes her more charming." N dreamingly said as he had his hands on his face and his visors eyes were replaced by hearts.
"Then talk to her then. If she knows you even exist around hear or not." F.S muttered."She'll know me eventually F.S. she just needs.. a bit of... Time." N scratch his back as F.S gave him a look."Don't give me that look ok! She's just busy doing her own thing that's all. I'll get her to notice me in no time once I show her my worth!"
"N." F.S signed as he looked at his coworker and friend." The time you let her notice you would be ages away even after our mission is done hear. And by the time she does. She'll say on 'Oh God, Who the heck are you?'"
"No she won't." N scoffed at that."Cause she already said that a whim back." He muttered the last part.
F.S just signed at his antics to get the girl. He just doesn't know what he sees in her that makes him fall for her. On that would be too much exaggeration but still, he has a mission to simply kill all the worker bots and return back to base that's all.
"By the way. What are you hear again?" N asked."I-I mean. You just spend a afoul lot time out side. O-Other then back at ship. I don't have any problem or anything if you may be asking. But, Just a hint of, You know curious?" He smiled innocently and was trying to not pry his coworker private life..
"... It's non of you business N. So stay out of it. Its for your own good!" F.S harshly told making N take a bit.
"R-Right, Right. Sorry for the prying your personal life thing. 'Which-is-quiet-bad-but-good' I was just asking that's all" N gave him a nervous smile.
"Good. Now leave me alone ok. I'm still a bit of hunting." He told
"Oh! Can I come with! Please! I'll promise to be very good and quiet if you let me! So please how about it!" N requested with his eyes turned into puppy type. F.S rolled his eyes at that.
"Fine~" F.S said.
"YES! FINALLY, A CHANCE TO HANG OUT WITH MY BEST BUD AS WE KILL MORE WORKER DRONES TO ALSO FEED ON." N cheered as he hugged F.S, Who pushed him back in annoyence."So what should we do first. Play eye spy! Or how about guessing game. Or Charlie says." He asked as they started to walk away.
"How about a game called.'Who could be the most quiet one around.'" F.S suggested as he wanted to shut him up. His tail was almost close to hitting him in the back of the head.
"Oh! I could do that with no problem!" N cheered not getting what he meant."Prepare to lose cause I'm the best in this!"
"Hahhhhh~!" A tired signed released from a female worker drone as she sitting in the waiting room.
She wore a punk type outfit as she had purple long hair and also wore a hat over her head. She was sporting a bandage over her right visor and had an icepack over it. Beside her could be described a high-tech gun as it was glowing green and was smoking, meaning it was just used a while back. She had kept it close and was not leaving it out.
"Ew, That didn't kill her.." She heard the comment and looked to see two other bots making fun of her. They laughed and went off. She simply rolled her eyes. Well one eye to be precise.
"Again sitting hear Uzi?" Another worker bot came in as it wore a simple football shirt and a cap."Trouble again with the the teacher?"
"I'm an angest teen Davis, Bite me!"
"Hah.. Why did you even have that gun with you again?"
"You mean my.. Awesome Railgun!" She told standing on the seat and pointing at him in the face."Yeah this Baby was made to take care of those Murder Drones outside of the doors! Had to make this out of the left over things found at the stores."
"Your planing on going outside to face the killer Robots, Send to kill all of us and possibly drunk our oil. Which I have been hearing all this time." Davis told her."And doesn't your dad, Khan, make those doors to keep us away from those killer things."
Uzi shoved the gun Infront of his face scaring him a bit more.",Don't put my dad's work into this ok!"
"Sorry, Sorry!" He screams in fright.
She pulled it back."Besides, The last part I need to finish this bad boy up is outside there and I'm gonna sneek there tonight so I could finally finish this and help save the world, And get my dad's respect. But mostly the world save part." She quickly told not to sound uncool. Classic teenager stuff.
"Well. Isn't it a bit. You know... Your personal grudge against those bots." He tried to find reason but was cut off.
"I doesn't involve any of my personal grudge against the murder bots OK and no more feed back on my repression aswell!" She told him."I'm doing this so I could save the world instead of sitting around copping in this base you all call SAFE!" She yelled as she went off."Were done hear. BITE ME!" She went off to another room. But not before coming back."I'm not angry at you or anything!...Just generally Hormonal!" She gave a thumbs up and went away.
Now when the Satrun moons came up and it was night time it was the perfect time for going to fallow her plan.
An alarm started beeping showing it was 3:00 am. The alarm was on her visor as she smacked her face to turn it off and woke up.... That's one way of doing it? But any way she then went and get ready as she strapped her gun on her back. Steadied her hat and gave her self a thumbs up. Then she quietly opened the door of the room and carefully took the Master Key hanging on the hanger.
She sneaked through the halls and went towards the giant door area. She used the mater key and granted access. The door opened but there her dad was standing with his eyes narrowed and had his arms crossed.
"OH, Robo Jesus!" She freaked out seeing her dad there.
"And where are you going young lady at this time of night?" He asked her still keeping his straight face.
"Um... Trying to sneak out to go and make out with my boyfriend. Which I totally have." She made up an excuse hoping he'll bye it.
He looked at her for a second. Then buyers out laughing."Hahah... But seriously where are you going?" He got straight back on topic not buying her story.
"Ok. Ok you caught me... I'm.. uh... Trying to find and... Um.. understand the steel.. hydrolysis.. mechanism of... Door 1!" She quickly told."Cause this... Is a.. school project of mine.. which the teacher... Told me to do. And I really want to understand on how the door works.. you know just like my old man does. Other then playing cards and making doors."
He looked at her daughter seeing her excuse. He bought it."Well. Why didn't you say so in the first place! My daughter taking after her old man works!"
"Yeah." She said in a forced smile trying not to feel to much guilty for lying to him like this." But I. Was hoping you'll let me check the outside door. To make shore on how it's operating and all."
"Oh. This is great! My daughter fallowing her old man's foot step's and making doors rather then fighting like a rebellious teen." He suddenly hugged the door."Good doors. Good. Good doors." He then went back."And your making them so why fight when your safe from the danger out side. For that, I like you to have this wrench." He pulled out a old oiled rench from his pocket."It was the same rench I used to tite the nots on my first doors. And to put your mother out of her misery when the murder Drones got to her by there nanite virus." He said the last part darkly." And I like you to have it."
She ackwardly accepted the wrench." Great.... Therapy is fun." She muttered.
F.S flew in the Strom by his metallic wings. He was flying through the blizzard as he was trying to get something out of his mind. He landed on a roof top as his visors scanned the area around him. No worker bots hear or anything so he's free a bit.
Suddenly his mind start to hurt making glitches appear in his visors."Gah! Not again!" He grabbed his head trying to stop the pain from happening more.
He suddenly saw he was running as a human girl with purple short hair was scene running happily Infront of him as she looked back."Come on Flash. Try to catch up!" She told him. Flash? Who's that and why is she calling him that.
Next he saw he a human family sitting on a table and we're eating food. He saw a orange skin man with blue hair likes his and a white skin violet hair women and the same young girl. He was getting confused."So, Your still up for applying to the police academy there kido?" The man asked him.
This was getting out of hand.
The pain finally stopped as he breathes in a sign of relief. He was breathing heavily as he saw the images."Who the hell are they! Why was I with them and why do they call me FLASH!" He asked no one in particular as he try to make heads or tails of this.
He suddenly felt someone beneath him as he looked down to see a worker drone down the road as he was looking for something. Well looks like he got a bit of hunting done right now.
"Were is that excuse I'm looking for?" The worker bot muttered as he looked around for something."Ah hah! Finally found it!" He said picking up a pair of glasses."This is a good excuse to be around hear."
Suddenly F.S dropped behind him as he was pushed back. The boy looked to see the him as F.S looked more demonic with the sharp three knief claws and the metallic wings spread out as well as his visors showed a huge blue X. He had a murderous grin on his face as he looked at the worker hungrily.
"Gahhh! Please don't kill me! I have so much to live for and I didn't even get to have wife and kids!" The worker bot yelled in fright and tried to make a brake for it but was grabbed by F.S tail as he was held upside down. He was screaming for help but no one would come for his aid."At least let me get to see my Sister for the last time!" He yelled in fright.
F.S stopped in his assault as he was triggered again.
"Come on Flash!" The young girl pulled him by his hand.
The same memory again. This annoyed him so much. He looked back at the worker and then threw him to the side. He's visor went back to normal as well as his hands."Get out of my sight this instant you hear me! If I catch you hear again you'll won't be lucky then! Got it!" F.S yelled at him with his claws out.
"Yes. Yes. Mister murder drone sir. I won't be-"
"GET OUT OF MY SIGHT!" F.S Yelled
"Ahhhhh!" The worker bot screamed away leaving F.S behind.
F.S looked back at his robotic hands as he was like trying to see him self. He started to take heavy breaths as he was like gonna have a panic attack or something. He then got mad as he yelled and started to trash things around. He made his hand in to a gun and start to shoot things around him and causing more distruction and explosion. Finally after a few minutes of taking out self anger he finally calmed down.
"Why... Why are these videos, Images playing in my head... Why are they making my work so hard to do?!!" He yelled out at heaven. He stopped in his thoughts when he saw a bright green light in the other part of the street. It was at his launch pad area. He quickly flew off to see what happened.
(10 minutes ago)
Uzi was walking through the blizzard as she managed to fool her dad. It wasn't a good feeling for her but she needed to prove to others that is good to fight back instead of hidding behind the doors. She walker through the desert storm as she finally reached the crash landing area she was looking for. But it shocked her when she saw a whole pile of bodies of mountain around it. She looked at it and tried to not get frightened. It was still hard for her to see death even if she was a robot.
She went further inside through the hole there and saw the landing ship. She went inside and went through the piles of bodies as she looked around. She picked up a useless hand and threw it away. She then saw a glowing small container and smiled as she finally found the missing part. She suddenly felt something coming as she ran into a hidding spot.
A murder drone landed behind some car crashed site as it reveals to be N. He took a worker bots head and drank it's oil. The crushed it by his claws. Uzi looked through the broken mirror to see what's happening. She needs to refill her gun quickly before he gets to notice her. But the moment was ruined when N looked at her holding the mirror.
Uzi saw the danger and quickly mad a run as N flew after her as she turned back and threw the battery up and quickly unloaded her previous one. She caught the battery in her hand and loaded it in her hand and took aim. But N created a crater maming Uzi take back as her gun landed the other way. She flipped back in te right time and took a fighting pose.
"Hah, Guess pirating all that anime wasn't useless at all then." She muttered.
N went directly Infront of her taking her by surprise as she saw his X on his visor. He launched his venom tail at her which she blocked with her right hand. Big mistake, The venom injected in her hand making it burn. He then threw her at a broken car as she grunted. She looked around and found the gun was near her.
N looked back at her through his visors as he saw her aiming the gun at his face."Bite me!" She yelled as she fired the gun as it blasted a giant green beam which took over half of the spot. Uzi was flung back but was ok as her gun showed it needed to recharge as it take 30 minutes. She looked at her work and saw the Murder Drone head blown off as his body fall down lifeless.
"Holy hell, Hah! Suck on that Dad!" She cheered as she looked at her handy work.
Her cheering stopped as she saw the body get back up and the head was growing back as it was like it wasn't destroyed at all. But the one light was red instead of yellow like the others. "Oh crap!" She quickly looked around and grabbed a hand and ran at the Robot before it could start and slapped it with the hand. The visor of N showed it was rebooting as it soon came back on. He blinked at seeing her and took everything thing in."Did you just slapped me with that arm?" He asked
Uzi got a second to think what happened."Holy crap, It talks." She muttered
"Yeah, My head kinda hurts now. It was like something hit me or anything else." He scratch the back of his head."Hey, Are you new hear on our squad." He asked her as she didn't know what to say."You look a little?" He narrowed his eyes at her. His visors were showing error on her image and couldn't work right."Short for disability drone." He narrowed his eyes at her.
Now she's in trouble as she was being faced by a killer machine who could rip her into pieces and is most likely would do now.
N looked at her in seriousness. Then smiled."I'm self determined N, At your service. I'm kinda of the leader in this group." He tried to play cool."Actually, I'm not, Everyone calls.me useless and an idiot. Well everyone but F.S. as he and I are buddies! Well mostly buddies. We have a good good relationship going on right now. BUT I DIDN'T HAVE TO TELL YOU THAT!" N shouted."Damn Biscuits. Well I can't seem to remember my past whole 3 hours on what happened. But hopefully it would come back to me soon" He smiled at her.
Uzi just ackwardly smiled back at him."Well, It's been nice knowing you N, But ah, I gotta go and... Do some disassembly dorne... things." She threw the arm away as she went for her gun but she felt her right hand in pain as the venom was burning her arm."Gah!"
"Oh, You stung your self by accident. Well why don't you use your saliva then good thing to or I'll be Disassembling.y self alot." N told with a smile as he caught his tail from hitting him in the head. .
"Hah?"
"Yeah, Disassembly Drones secrete an anti toxin in our mouths as a defence mechanism, "
"Yeah....And it could only be done by a disassembly drone" Both said at the same time."Right, we could do that. Hey how about we go to the ship. I wanna try something." She suggested quickly.
N looked at the ship and smiled."Sure, I'm up for new things."
Minute later Uzi Fist was pulled out of N mouth as he spit out saliva."Well... I'm up for trying new things." He said ackwardly and was weird out by this now.
"Uhh! We are never talking about this!" She warned him.
"Talking about what?" He quickly said."Consider it, Repressed." He said in a grove fashion.
She then wiped the Saliva off her hand."So, You mentioned there others hear right." She slowly asked.
"Yeah, There are three more of my comrades. First there's V. She's kinda of a......" He was quite for a second."Intense"
Uzi took a second to think about it."Define intense?"
"Like, Pulling your vital parts out and feeding it to you Infront of your family."
She had a full minute to think on what he said." What the actual fuck?!"
"Yeah.. there's our mutual relationship there. But just between you and me, I kinda have a small crush on her. But you can't tell her ok!" He creeped out a bit but chilled down.
Uzi made a zipping motion but still was a bit nervous at him.
"Then there's J... She's kinda of our boss hear and is Awesome... Well she does call me useless and worthless and told me that she'll kill me if the company wanted it to.... But we still have a good on team relationship." He said.
Uzi felt a bit bad for him. Even if his a robot he still doesn't deserve this.
"Then there's our last member F.S. He's my best buddy and... We hang out a lot. Mostly me hanging out with him. He's the only one to at least not throw any insults at me or anything. Nor he try to kill me or forget me that I'm hear." N told her."He's a good friend. Even if he's not showing it."
"Is he... That good of guy?" She asked as he was telling about this F.S in high regard.
"Why not ask him your self.." A voive spoke making them jump in fright.
"Ahhhh!" Both screamed and looked to see someone landed Infront of them. It reveals to be F.S as he looked back at the two startled Robots. He narrowed his eyes at Uzi who was now in panic.Things took a whole lot worse for Uzi now.
"Hey, How's it hanging.." He asked
-To Be Continued-
Wow, what do we have here? Two new Murder Drones crossovers in the same day? I'm floored. Let's see what you've got, dear author.
Edited: I'm going to go blunt here: The entire first chapter contains zero pony-related contents. From all concepts you introduced within the first four thousand words, this seems more like an insertion au fic of MD than a crossover.
Edited: Oh, I just saw Flash Sentry in the tags, so I'm going to assume F.S is based on him. But then, he isn't displaying much characteristic of Flash Sentry, and appears more like an oc that shares the name.
There, you've unsold the story to me. People come to FIMFiction expecting pony fanfics; you probably shouldn't offer them something barely related. I'm sorry, but I downvote this and will see myself out.
Wonder if other MLP characters will show up?
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Don't worry. The next chapter will show about him more. Just need a bit of time.
OK, I'm gonna be honest, it needs a few more pony references in order for it to be a legit crossover with MLP, and there are plenty of typos that can be changed up. But, this is only the first chapter. I'm sure this story will get better.
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Yup. Also it's murder drones. You gotta aspect these things to happen in it right and done worry the second chapter will come out soon.
I had dreams of crossover of it except i was N and i was raised by celestia and lived in ponyvile as murder robot with chaotic murder power with some dark scary stuff and funny stuff even mlp stuff
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Eh,Nice dream. You should do it. I had a dream and look now I did it
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nice except i bad at report at grammar (very lazy even though i uni student. I more of a maths person then report and i never made my first dream that made me join the fiction come true years ago. I give up) also well done
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Well thanks. But hears a suggestion. Never give up. I was lazy aswell but now I'm doing this.
YESSSS!!
FINALLY!!
A good story involving murder drones
im speechless
you really can make a crossover with anything.
Time to fix some grammar here. I knew that my story is bad because of bad grammar, but I know basic-intermediate level grammar.
There was a blizzard going around a town. As the town itself was abandoned itself as the buildings were broken down as well as the houses and stores. They were all tore down and destroyed as well. The blizzard was moving fast as it was making anything freeze to death(maybe, also don't include this text inside this close-open parenthesis). There were also dead frozen skeletons on the streets and places as they all had clothes still on. It was like something happened that took them by surprise. And the light of a different moon was shining on the planet. Not a moon but a ringed planet with a small moon orbiting it.
This one was different as it arms and legs were modified longer a bit with his hands being futuristic and as his legs were metallic white blue boots type. He also had a tail on his back which had a vile with yellow liquid inside as it also sported a syringe. It looked like a scorpion tail if being precise. The figure face was the same as the destroyed bots on the ground as it had a visor on it. The visors showed his blue holographic eyes on the screen as well as the mouth underneath the visors that was an actual mouth. It also had blue hair on its head which were comes up in stile but they had five small circle lights which glowed yellow. He also wore a jacket that was sporting a lighting shield symbol on its back.
Note: Fix some words that are capital letter for no reason please.
"They're talking to her then. If she knows you even exist around her or not." F.S muttered."She'll know me eventually F.S. she just needs.. a bit of... time." N scratch his back as F.S gave him a look."Don't give me that look okay! She's just busy doing her own thing that's all. I'll get her to notice me in no time once I show her my worth!"
F.S just signed at his antics to get the girl. He just doesn't know what he sees in her that makes him fall for her. On that would be too much exaggeration but still, he has a mission to simply kill all the worker bots and return back to base that's all.
"N." F.S signed as he looked at his coworker and friend. "The time you let her notice you would be ages away even after our mission is done here. And by the time she does, she'll say on 'Oh God, who the heck are you?'"
"Again sitting here Uzi?" Another worker bot came in as it wore a simple football shirt and a cap."Trouble again with the teacher?"
(I think you need to remove double words in a sentence)
"You're planning on going outside to face the killer robots, sent to kill all of us and possibly drink our oil, which I have been hearing all this time." Davis told her. "And doesn't your dad, Khan, make those doors to keep us away from those killer things?"
Uzi shoved the gun Infront of his face scaring him a bit."Don't put my dad's work into this ok!"
Now when the Saturn's moons came up and it was night time it was the perfect time for going to follow her plan.
"Oh. This is great! My daughter following her old man's foot steps and making doors rather than fighting like a rebellious teen." He suddenly hugged the door. "Good doors. Good. Good doors." He then went back. "And you're making them so why fight when your safe from the danger outside? For that, I like you to have this wrench." He pulled out a old oiled wrench from his pocket. "It was the same wrench I used to tite the nots on my first doors. And to put your mother out of her misery when the murder drones got to her by their nanite virus." He said the last part darkly. "And I like you to have it."
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Dude. You could have just did a private message to me
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Sorry. I didn't realized.
Ok, I really wanted to give this story a chance, but the sentence structure is just awful. Sometimes it's even hard to decipher the meaning of some of the sentences. And for the love of god, itself is one word.
Let me give you an example of a paragraph I found especially bad:
Alright lets try do dissect this. First, the paragraph is way too long. While it does keep the same topic, that of description, it drags a little. That is only a minor thing and it isn't even that long, so it's far from condemning.
Let's go for the first sentence:
1) modified longer doesn't make sense. What you probably meant to say is that their ("they" is a unisex pronounce that is used when you don't know the gender, "it" is used mainly for objects which could still qualify considering they're a robot) arms and legs were modified to be a bit longer. It should also be said that we as the audience don't know it's a modified worker drone so saying they were modified isn't ideal.
2)missing a comma.
3) This sentence is just a mess. What I think you meant to say is that he (not sure why you switched pronounce) has futuristic hands and metallic blue boots. You should avoid using "type" in descriptions unless it's an actual recognised type of something.
Alright, sentence two:
1) Tails don't grow from your back. Your back is where your spine is, not where your ass is. A better way to phrase this would have been that a tail was showing from behind his back or just a tail coiled behind him.
2) This part doesn't specify where the vile is, just that the tail has it.
3) And. "As" doesn't make sense in this situation.
4) I'm not completely sure what you meant but it was probably meant to be a syringe. A syringe is strictly a medical tool, which that thing definitely isn't. A needle or a spike would have been more appropriate.
Fourth sentence:
Just as a comment, it doesn't.
1)To be precise.
Fifth sentence:
1)Figure's
2)Robots. Or drones if you want to be lore accurate. A bot isn't a literary word, it could be used when quoting characters speaking, but not anywhere else, just like most slang words.
3) I don't even know what is this trying to say.
Sixth sentence:
1) Due to this being one sentence, it's still talking about the visor (which is more of a viewing thing from which you look out of rather then a screen. Similar looking things are often described as visors, but that's because there are eyes under them) so it makes it seem like the mouth is also on the screen.
2) A mouth that was an actual mouth? A very awkward, indeed.
Alright that will be everything, I don't have enough time to go over every little thing you did, and I have to go to sleep. I hope I inspired you to consider your sentence structure (aka syntax) a little more in the future, since it really is pretty important. At this point it's pretty obvious English is not your first language. My first language also isn't English. You should probably pay more attention in your English class or if you don't have it, just try to consume media that actually has good English. This site is a great example of how people can integrate bad syntax into their own English because of seeing it so often. A significant part of the new releases here are with bad syntax and you should probably strife to avoid them so they don't influence your syntax.
Also, I can't make this clear enough, but I'm not trying to insult you or bring you down or anything like that. People rather say how good something is then criticise here, so it can be difficult to know when you're doing something wrong. I merely want to point out that your syntax isn't ideal so you could improve it. I don't want you to feel bad about it. I was bad at English too, but I learned to be better. And you can too. It may take a while, but eventually if you keep at least some of your focus on improving English, it will improve.