Electro Spark

by Joshweiser22

Years 0-3

I was born on January 1, 1997. My parents are Humid Oasis and Abby Normal. At the time, my dad was 21 years old and my mom was 19. I also have a brother and sister named Thunder Shock and Freezy Snowflake. Freezy wasn't born at that point though. She wasn't born until 2004. Thunder Shock on the other hand was already 5 years old.

I've got to say that a really surprising thing about my family is that my cousins (all three of them) were born on the exact same day as me! They were triplets. I doubt they were born at the same time as me but if they were, that would be pretty cool! Their names are Aqua Splash, Pyro Flame, and Ivy Blade. Now of course, like everypony, I have aunts, uncles, grandpa's and grandma's and more of an extended family but I wont get into that. Instead, what I will get into is what life was like in Canterlot.

Canterlot was a very, uptight place. It seemed as though everypony had to be perfect. Anypony goofing around was considered almost considered a monster. Of course, anypony who knows me knows that goofing around is something I'm really good at! Unfortunately, that wasn't such a good skill to have there. Luckily, my parents weren't too hard on me. I just hoped that I never embarrassed them in front of the other Canterlot ponies. I can't help it though. I am who I am. I'm glad they understood that. My big brother Thunder was always there for me too so I was happy for most of the time.

My cousins came and visited some times too. It wasn't that hard, they lived nearby. They made fun of me sometimes and called me nicknames like Sparky but I know they were just playing like family. Everything seemed to be perfectly awesome in my life. That however changed on my first day of school.

Well it wasn't exactly school, more of a pre-school. I was so excited to start learning! I was 3 years old at this time. That's a pretty young age but I managed to learn well. Most ponies learned the correct way to write with their mouths but I taught myself a much easier way to write. I could just use the magic from my horn! The teacher always got mad it me. I wasn't really doing anything wrong. The whole point was to get us to write and I was...that was the basic everyday life of mine at school.

And I forgot to mention how everypony bullied me. They thought I was stupid because I didn't know how to write even though I could clearly write words on paper. I never tried to anything wrong. But everypony hated me for it regardless back then. Of course, this was only pre-school! Things got even worse in Kindergarten, however, there was a certain pony who always knew how to cheer me up...

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[Axel Nyan]

I was born on January 1, 1997. My parents are Humid Oasis and Abby Normal. At the time, my dad was 21 years old and my mom was 19. I also have a brother and sister named Thunder Shock and Freezy Snowflake. Freezy wasn't born at that point though. She wasn't born until 2004. Thunder Shock on the other hand was already 5 years old.

Hm... 1997? So we're going by standard Earth time? Ok.. I can deal.. Humid Oasis? It's an ok name... Abby Normal? That... doesn't sound like an OC name.. it sounds like someone got lazy trying to make up a HUMAN OC... Thunder Shock? Alright, although somewhat unoriginal, it is underused... Freezy Snowflake? Eh, a bit overused, but that's forgivable. There aren't too many ways to make up a snow related name for ponies.

I've got to say that a really surprising thing about my family is that my cousins (all three of them) were born on the exact same day as me! They were triplets. I doubt they were born at the same time as me but if they were, that would be pretty cool! Their names are Aqua Splash, Pyro Flame, and Ivy Blade. Now of course, like everypony, I have aunts, uncles, grandpa's and grandma's and more of an extended family but I wont get into that. Instead, what I will get into is what life was like in Canterlot.

Ok... triplets? Not bad.. Aqua Splash? Not bad! Pyro Flame? Ok... Ivy Blade? Eh... I don't think ponies would use the word 'Blade' in naming. It sounds too violent, and going by both canon and fanon, ponies aren't very violent by nature. If this isn't going by usual canon/fanon, please make it more clearer! Thank you for not wasting too much time on chip info* *This means useless info* He lives in Canterlot, eh? Alright..

Canterlot was a very, uptight place. It seemed as though everypony had to be perfect. Anypony goofing around was considered almost considered a monster. Of course, anypony who knows me knows that goofing around is something I'm really good at! Unfortunately, that wasn't such a good skill to have there. Luckily, my parents weren't too hard on me. I just hoped that I never embarrassed them in front of the other Canterlot ponies. I can't help it though. I am who I am. I'm glad they understood that. My big brother Thunder was always there for me too so I was happy for most of the time.

"Anypony goofing around was considered almost considered a monster." Yea.. you repeated. Goofing around as a skill? Kay...

My cousins came and visited some times too. It wasn't that hard, they lived nearby. They made fun of me sometimes and called me nicknames like Sparky but I know they were just playing like family. Everything seemed to be perfectly awesome in my life. That however changed on my first day of school.

"They made fun of me sometimes[COMMA_INSERT] and called me nicknames like Sparky[COMMA_INSERT] but I know they were just playing like family." Yea... fix that. "That[COMMA_INSERT] however[COMMA_INSERT] changed on my first day of school." Again, fix it.

Well it wasn't exactly school, more of a pre-school. I was so excited to start learning! I was 3 years old at this time. That's a pretty young age but I managed to learn well. Most ponies learned the correct way to write with their mouths but I taught myself a much easier way to write. I could just use the magic from my horn! The teacher always got mad it me. I wasn't really doing anything wrong. The whole point was to get us to write and I was...that was the basic everyday life of mine at school.

Pre-schooler? Cool. Starting at 3 years, eh? Hmm.. don't know why a teacher would get mad for using magic, when it SHOULD be a momentous occasion.. Meh, maybe it's for plot.

And I forgot to mention how everypony bullied me. They thought I was stupid because I didn't know how to write even though I could clearly write words on paper. I never tried to anything wrong. But everypony hated me for it regardless back then. Of course, this was only pre-school! Things got even worse in Kindergarten, however, there was a certain pony who always knew how to cheer me up...

And here it is, where you mention the bullying. Not that I don't mind using that for character development, but it's very overused. Meh, oh well. It seems like there is a bit of discrimination against Unicorns.. And here we leave a cliffhanger after you mention a possible love-interest.

Overall, this fic is decent, at least, judging from this first chapter. A bit too many OC's man. You might wanna cut down a bit, like maybe denote 1-2 OC's. The story itself is... interesting. I'm the kind of guy who enjoys reading OC's, but only if they are well done. This seems like it COULD be well done, just from the first chapter. I'm going to continue on to the next chapter and see if I'm right..

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~Axel Nyan, TWE Official Reviewer.