Not a bad chapter, but considering he's talking to pastel ponies you would think magic would be a bit more believable. His reactions are a bit overboard. The hay fries, Spike being a dragon...he might be in another dimension or reality, but he can't accept things are different?
Romance seems fairly abrupt for now. I'll give it a bit, but they haven't even known each other 24 hours.
11497775 Thank you for you're opinion! It may have been a bit overboard, but I also thought it would have been a bit lame for him to just "accept it," without too much thought. And yeah the romance may seem a bit rushed, but it's the first time their emotions clicked. I plan to do some time skips in the future, but for their first romantic moment, I wanted it to be intense.
That question will be brought up as I am going through a progressive world build
I see I am going have to wait longer to learn what the reason is . Though to be fair and generous you didn't promise this chapter exactly, so I guess I will wait for it to come up.
"Allow us Derek." Twilight insisted as her and Starlight's horn began to glow. Derek raised his eyebrow again, just before witnessing the most amazing thing he had ever seen. The plates and cups began to glow with the same aura around their horns, and then they began to levitate on their own. Derek's jaw practically fell into his lap and his eyes went as wide as the plates themselves. Twilight and Starlight began to set the table themselves, all without touching anything physically. They put a plate in front of him, full of food, and an empty cup. "What would you like to drink Derek? Milk, Coffee, or OJ?" She said while she levitated all three around her. Derek just looked at her, like he was about to be ran over by a car.
Him learning magic is real hadn't happen before this point? Right, it hasn't. Weird, I figured it would have come up sooner, but ok. Find it a little weird, though admirable in a way that his skepticism hadn't been shattered upon being sent to another world. If it was me I would have just accepted magic being real since at that point my skepticism would have been destroyed already.
"But.. that.. that can't!..." Derek had trouble trying to find the words.
Average people: Ha! Knew it! Average people pretending being pro-science: B-but... That can't!... Impossible! Real pro-science people: So, apparently there are dishes moving upward with atypical change in its vertical momentum. This day is unlikely to become more interesting than it already is.
Okay, let me be honest. (And as I am beginning to write this comment, i am trying to think of how to speak my thoughts as clearly as possible...) First thing is, in any story set in a fantastic universe, be it magical or science fiction, the main thing here is for the reader, not the author, to let go of any preconceived notions regarding said universe. Yeah, I agree that that notion is hard to set aside for many people; we are indoctrinated from our earliest years to disbelieve in anything strange or beyond our way of thinking. To physically witness actual magic being done before our eyes would be quite a shock. Unicorns are, for the most part anyway, a magical creature, so magic to them are as easy as breathing air. That is something that Humans are incapable of understanding since we are not magical in nature. The next part of my remarks is that this Human character seems not to have any meta-knowledge regarding Equestria. Okay, I can accept that. I've never heard of MLP until just a few years back. Thus, his reactions tup to this point seems quite believable. I mean, we all would have similar reactions to this pony world ourselves, if we came into this universe without any prior knowledge on how this universe works. Even the fact of these horse-folk creatures (ponies if you prefer) are able to talk, (and in English!) would be off-putting to say the least. I myself have read so many stories set in the most fantastical settings over my life that I find it hard for others to question things, things that truthfully need no questions. Any fantasy setting needs a suspension of belief, whether fantasy or science fiction. Consider visiting a world where the indigenous folk are lion-like centaurs, or another world filled with 1056 different species (the world of the Well). I feel that a world of ponies is something quite acceptable. I look forward to more of this fic, just to discover how the mc will survive here...
"Magic is an essence inside every creature. But we all use it differently. Unicorns have horns, allowing us to manifest out magic physically. It allows us to do many things, levitation, teleportation, manipulations, illusions. Anything you can think of really. Pegasus have magic stored in their wings, allowing them to fly. According to all known laws of aviation, there is no way a Pegasus should be able to fly. Their wings are too small and weak to get their big bodies off the ground. The Pegasi, of course, fly anyway because the magic in their wings allow them to. Earthponies on the other hoof, channel their magic to give themselves unnatural strength, and agricultural abilities. It's quite impressive actually." Twilight used her magic to levitate a book, showing pictures of each species as she explained them one by one. Derek listened closely, she was able to explain it pretty well in his opinion.
no fucking way did you just make twilight quote the bee movie script💀
Uh... OK. I could understand him asking something like "When is the estrus season?" particularly because he's horny. But the sheer importance of "Why did my species go extinct" seems to be overwhelmingly important. Knowing what to avoid (or what to do) could be the difference between life and death.
Not a bad chapter, but considering he's talking to pastel ponies you would think magic would be a bit more believable. His reactions are a bit overboard. The hay fries, Spike being a dragon...he might be in another dimension or reality, but he can't accept things are different?
Romance seems fairly abrupt for now. I'll give it a bit, but they haven't even known each other 24 hours.
More good
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Thank you for you're opinion! It may have been a bit overboard, but I also thought it would have been a bit lame for him to just "accept it," without too much thought. And yeah the romance may seem a bit rushed, but it's the first time their emotions clicked. I plan to do some time skips in the future, but for their first romantic moment, I wanted it to be intense.
Why would anyone ever want to make something so obviously dangerous?
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That is a typo, I just meant to say creating man made black holes, not the largest
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I see I am going have to wait longer to learn what the reason is . Though to be fair and generous you didn't promise this chapter exactly, so I guess I will wait for it to come up.
Him learning magic is real hadn't happen before this point? Right, it hasn't. Weird, I figured it would have come up sooner, but ok. Find it a little weird, though admirable in a way that his skepticism hadn't been shattered upon being sent to another world. If it was me I would have just accepted magic being real since at that point my skepticism would have been destroyed already.
Average people: Ha! Knew it!
Average people pretending being pro-science: B-but... That can't!... Impossible!
Real pro-science people: So, apparently there are dishes moving upward with atypical change in its vertical momentum. This day is unlikely to become more interesting than it already is.
Okay, let me be honest. (And as I am beginning to write this comment, i am trying to think of how to speak my thoughts as clearly as possible...)
First thing is, in any story set in a fantastic universe, be it magical or science fiction, the main thing here is for the reader, not the author, to let go of any preconceived notions regarding said universe. Yeah, I agree that that notion is hard to set aside for many people; we are indoctrinated from our earliest years to disbelieve in anything strange or beyond our way of thinking. To physically witness actual magic being done before our eyes would be quite a shock.
Unicorns are, for the most part anyway, a magical creature, so magic to them are as easy as breathing air. That is something that Humans are incapable of understanding since we are not magical in nature.
The next part of my remarks is that this Human character seems not to have any meta-knowledge regarding Equestria. Okay, I can accept that. I've never heard of MLP until just a few years back. Thus, his reactions tup to this point seems quite believable. I mean, we all would have similar reactions to this pony world ourselves, if we came into this universe without any prior knowledge on how this universe works. Even the fact of these horse-folk creatures (ponies if you prefer) are able to talk, (and in English!) would be off-putting to say the least.
I myself have read so many stories set in the most fantastical settings over my life that I find it hard for others to question things, things that truthfully need no questions. Any fantasy setting needs a suspension of belief, whether fantasy or science fiction. Consider visiting a world where the indigenous folk are lion-like centaurs, or another world filled with 1056 different species (the world of the Well). I feel that a world of ponies is something quite acceptable.
I look forward to more of this fic, just to discover how the mc will survive here...
no fucking way did you just make twilight quote the bee movie script💀
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This!! This is the most accurate assessment of a normal reaction on this website! At least for any human from modern times anyway.
Uh... OK. I could understand him asking something like "When is the estrus season?" particularly because he's horny. But the sheer importance of "Why did my species go extinct" seems to be overwhelmingly important. Knowing what to avoid (or what to do) could be the difference between life and death.