When the life of a death knight of Azeroth comes to an end, how will he cope with finding himself not only truly alive once more, but in a new world that couldn't be more different than his own? A World of Warcraft displaced crossover.
11393970 I wasn't really sure how to get the accent across in text but I was trying, if you have suggestions to improve it I'd be down to hear them out.
11394146 Oh, you pulled off the accent quite well. Certainly better than some attempts, including some of mine. I meant more how what appears to be a human is still calling herself a pony. It implies something screwy's going on, and the mystery has me engaged for further chapters.
Maybe not be quite so vague in the physical description of a character (like you did with Applejack for instance in this chapter) and be a bit more descriptive?
I know I personally like it when an author gives a good,solid physical description during the initial introduction of a character in their story (height,physical build,eye/hair and skin/coat color,hair length/style ect.) to help me try and build a better picture of the character in my mind.
I imagine at least some others might like a good,detailed physical character description as well. I was admittedly a bit dissapointed with the description initially then a bit confused without a more detailed physical description of AJ,when the MC had no real kind of reaction to her physical appearance (I was admittedly expecting an anthro version of Applejack to answer the door and thought the human tag was just for the main character).
Or at least that was the case up until AJ talked about "not seeing many new ponies" with the MC questioning that and thinking to himself it was a strange comment since she looked human like he did. But other than that though I didn't really see anything that blatantly stuck out to me in this chapter,it was good work overall so far as I could see.
11470041 Oh yeah I do see what you mean, I can definitely work on that in the future and could come back and update things a bit yeah. Thanks for that feedback!
Huh. A strong opening and an interesting hook, given Applejack's word choice. I'm only passingly familiar with WoW, but I'll keep an eye on this one.
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I wasn't really sure how to get the accent across in text but I was trying, if you have suggestions to improve it I'd be down to hear them out.
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Oh, you pulled off the accent quite well. Certainly better than some attempts, including some of mine. I meant more how what appears to be a human is still calling herself a pony. It implies something screwy's going on, and the mystery has me engaged for further chapters.
you have gotten my attention and I will keep a eye on this story.
Maybe not be quite so vague in the physical description of a character (like you did with Applejack for instance in this chapter) and be a bit more descriptive?
I know I personally like it when an author gives a good,solid physical description during the initial introduction of a character in their story (height,physical build,eye/hair and skin/coat color,hair length/style ect.) to help me try and build a better picture of the character in my mind.
I imagine at least some others might like a good,detailed physical character description as well. I was admittedly a bit dissapointed with the description initially then a bit confused without a more detailed physical description of AJ,when the MC had no real kind of reaction to her physical appearance (I was admittedly expecting an anthro version of Applejack to answer the door and thought the human tag was just for the main character).
Or at least that was the case up until AJ talked about "not seeing many new ponies" with the MC questioning that and thinking to himself it was a strange comment since she looked human like he did. But other than that though I didn't really see anything that blatantly stuck out to me in this chapter,it was good work overall so far as I could see.
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Oh yeah I do see what you mean, I can definitely work on that in the future and could come back and update things a bit yeah. Thanks for that feedback!
Welp I was potentially interested, then it turns out to be Anthro and all my interest is immediately killed.
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I share the sentiment, I'm not really into anthro fics, but I'll give this one a try, maybe you will too