I like it very good work also so when is the next chapter is going to show what happens next or what?

Again just asking is all

11304072
The next chapter shows part of how they got to equestria

11304094
Ah got it but after that what next? Also when’s the next chapter?

Also what’s the sex tag for and is it what I think it is hmm?

11304154
I dont know exactly when I will get the next chapter done but I will do my best

11304170
Makes sense but yeah don’t worry just asking is all but about my other question

Hopefully, with this redone. You can make the ponies more likeable to me, and some others.

Because, I really hate their ungrateful, racist/xenophobic asses for constantly antagonizing the actual heroes/anti-heroes of their entire pony species!!!! ( Because once I saw this. I quickly try to read the original. )

Against the real villains of the Changelings. ( Which is actually Chrysalis evil sister. I'm surprised that Chrysalis is the victim in here.)

11304221
dont give to much away.😉 I will do my best. I cant promise much at this point but I do hope that you will like the story.

11304241
Wait what is the sex tag for?

And does this mean what I think it means

11304221
The poines should all grow a set and a spine because not everything can be sloved through talking and friendship sometimes it requires violence and a gun

11304274
I do not know what do you think it mean?

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True! I mean, look at Equestria at War, Assassinationverse, Fallout Equestria, or especially Fall of Equestria timelines.

( I would probably mentioned Equestria Divided. But the Mane Six are highly corrupt and evil in that one, ssssoooooo. )

11304358

Fall of Equestria timelines.

Why are you mention this thing

Is this a sequel or something?

I feel like some of them like.... you know... Equestria have a network or something similar?

11304370
this Is a redo of my other story.

11304371
Yeqh but... I feel like some of them like.... you know... Equestria have their own network or something similar?

11304373
I dont understand what you are meaning

11304377
HUD requires a network to work while talkie-walkie require radio signal. So... I guess this is modern Equestria, right?

11304367

I was talking to AgentKorpsman here. On the topic that a whole lot of certain kinds of people deserve to have violence and lots of bullet onto them. And who do you think I am targeting in the Fall of Equestria timeline!!??

11304386
Need more gun

11304390

Amen!

There was a supply cash below me but it would take to long to climb down and return before the girls were over runned.

Supply cache

11304358
Yeah best to leave the evil mane 6 out but I haven’t read that one plus the hell then followed universe.

But yeah they might treat Batman actions as good and what they expect a hero should do but a real hero is willing to do the bad for good and kill to protect those who threaten or harm for fun like the real heroes are from the marvel universe since they kill and wound bad guys who kill or threaten hood and innocent people but if you can’t then yes kill if you must but always be prepared to kill or defend yourselves if harm comes to you or your family or friends or any one else you associate with but if one of them becomes a bad guy and come to harm you then you have a choice of either let him/her do it or defend yourself from harm.

Plus there society is so fragile it took like not even 5mins or an hour or day to collapse in reality it would take three days for society to collapse but them oh boy good luck with the outcasts and rikers

11304386
*cough* the caribou *cough* *cough*

11304695

Yeah, best to leave the evil mane 6 out of it. But, I haven’t read that one. Plus I don't follow that universe.

Actually, NO! I'm not just giving up on that particular Universe/Timeline. Why should I do it and quickly abandoned the remaining "innocent" in that massive six-way civil war!?

The Equestria Divided Mane Six corrupted as Tyrants really DESERVE to be teach a very severe lesson by me.

I mean, this crazy huge civil war shit all started because both Celestia and Luna are mysteriously missing. And ponies like Twilight, or even Cadence and Shining. DIDN'T have the BALLS to be temporary leaders for Equestria at that time?

And now, Twilight herself, her friends ( Including a undead Pinkie Pie!!?? ) are RESPONSIBLE to cause the civil war to last over 15-20 years, and be the same corrupt and tyrannical leaders themselves!!??

Way worse and no better than any of the MLP Villains.

I won't stand for that. Being a OP Godly being myself. I can just as easily fix this, and put the tyrannical Mane Six back in there place. So, IF I made a hypothetical story with this concept. It will go like this;

First, I can just have easily find out what truly happened to Celestia and Luna. Quickly locate and rescue them from the real evil mastermind of their disappearance.

( Don't know who, what, or why? Because the original creator for Equestria Divided DIDN'T explained what exactly happened to the two princesses. Or who really caused their disappearance in the first place. And the creator just didn't update and abandon it long ago. Luckily, the fandom of it, and myself. Still trying to keep it alive.

But, I will think of something to put a evil OC as the "mastermind". And make them my very own punching bag. Or maybe it's the real Grogar, Cosmos, or Eris this whole time!? )

And after I brutally trashed and torture the same evil unknown villain/villainess that kidnapped Celestia/Luna. Either kill him/her, and took their own soul to be damned for eternity. Or make them my eternal slave as punishment for their sins. And help "reforming" them by forcing them to help me fix their own mess.

And after the princesses are eternally thankful for finally rescuing them. Once I fully explained and even show the rescued princesses on WHAT Celestia's "precious" student, and her "heroic" friends ( Along with Shining/Cadence ) did to Equestria for the past 15-20 years.

And ooooooooohhhhhhhhhh boy! Once they both saw the brutal war, needless violence, death, chaos, crimes, sins, and atrocities of the corrupted and tyrannical Mane Six to poor Equestria and their "innocent" little ponies. I bet that both Celestia and Luna WON'T be very happy!

I also bet that Celestia and Luna are so disappointed, angry/wrathful, livid, and super pissed off at Twilight and her friends, Shining/Cadence, and the rest of ponykind for the brutal 15-20 year old civil war they have all caused. And also including the other non-pony races for also joining the war, and fueling the fire of violence and death.

They will immediately turned into their "dark" selves ( Nightmare Moon and Daybreaker. ). But the twist is that they aren't "pure evil", and still have their original personality. And both want to be permanently stay in their "dark forms" that way, until everything is resolved. And even beg me to personally join my crusade on punishing them all, and quickly end the civil war.

Besides, they ain't enough Equestria Divided stories in here anyway. Much less of no new recent stories either. And I REALLY want all six of them to getting their asses handled to them. And get their own consequences/karma for their actions. So, this is a good excuse to do it myself.

But yeah they might treat Batman actions as good and what they expect a hero should do but a real hero is willing to do the bad for good and kill to protect those who threaten or harm for fun like the real heroes are from the marvel universe since they kill and wound bad guys who kill or threaten hood and innocent people but if you can’t then yes kill if you must but always be prepared to kill or defend yourselves if harm comes to you or your family or friends or any one else you associate with but if one of them becomes a bad guy and come to harm you then you have a choice of either let him/her do it or defend yourself from harm.

Couldn't have said it better than myself. 👍 👍

Plus, there society is so fragile. It took like, not even 5 mins, or an hour, or a day to collapse in reality. It would take three days for society to collapse, but then oh boy, good luck with the Outcasts, Rikers.

You forgot to mention the rest of the enemy factions like the Cleaners, Rioters, Last Man Battalion/Black Tusk, Hyenas, True Sons, Rogue Agents/Hunters, etc. once again.

I put this link to the Division fandom wiki to help remind you;

https://thedivision.fandom.com/wiki/Category:Factions

But anyway, in the sense of Tom Clancy's The Division Universe.

At least we last much longer than the ponies ever did!!!

It's still bad that the Division universe's society still collapsed, but it shows that pony society is WAY WEAKER than we once thought.

11304696

Exactly.

11304761
Oh knownI know about the other factions but those you can at least try and reason with or well desert them but those two are the major ones you shoot on sight especially outcasts rushers since those guys are scary especially when their elite rushers and on fire.

But I am making a divsion story with divsion agent/agents in equestria

11304777

Oh, I already know about the other factions. but those you can at least try and reason with or well desert them. But those two are the major ones you shoot on sight, especially outcasts rushers since those guys are scary especially when their elite rushers are on fire.

Wait!? Which ones are you referring to be "reason with"? Because, as much I can see and read about them all. The antagonistic factions are ALL BAD!!!! ( Yes! Including the Last Man Battalion/Black Tusk. And especially the Rogue Agents/Hunters. ) Why should I "reason" with even one of them?

11304761
Agreed

Also they might think we’re barbaric and other humans too who think like equestrians we actually think with reason and common sense becuase as the saying goes “the road to hell is paved with good intentions”

11304780
No what I mean true because the true sons have deserted from their ranks plus the BTSU leader not the black tusk commander did get capture on purpose and some last man battalions soliders actually join the JTF, also agent Faye actually turn rogue but was only doing it since their was something bigger going on it’s all in the new manhunt season in the divsion 2 but other rouges and hunters yeah no

But the most part yeah no also how do you think the anthro ponies especially the nobility will react to agents actually gasp killing and actions will happen

Also you have any OCs that I can add or put in

11304802

No what I mean true because the true sons have deserted from their ranks plus the BTSU leader not the black tusk commander did get capture on purpose and some last man battalions soliders actually join the JTF, also agent Faye actually turn rogue but was only doing it since their was something bigger going on it’s all in the new manhunt season in the divsion 2 but other rouges and hunters yeah no

Oh! So it depends on certain people and situations? Makes sense.

But the most part yeah no also how do you think the anthro ponies especially the nobility will react to agents actually gasp killing and actions will happen.

What do you think? They are a bunch of babies. And I personally don't give a f*** on what they think! They should just be grateful that I have just saved their asses from the real bad guys.

Also you have any OCs that I can add or put in

Personally, not for your own story. Sorry. I do have many concepts and ideas for many OC's of different franchises and crossovers on my head. I just didn't put them on paper and "refresh" them out. And they are meant for my potential future stories.

11304787

Did you completely read on what I said here? I personally made a hypothetical concept on what if I finally made a story out of it, with myself as my godly OC in it?

Yeah, best to leave the evil mane 6 out of it. But, I haven’t read that one. Plus I don't follow that universe.

Actually, NO! I'm not just giving up on that particular Universe/Timeline. Why should I do it and quickly abandoned the remaining "innocent" in that massive six-way civil war!?

The Equestria Divided Mane Six corrupted as Tyrants really DESERVE to be teach a very severe lesson by me.

I mean, this crazy huge civil war shit all started because both Celestia and Luna are mysteriously missing. And ponies like Twilight, or even Cadence and Shining. DIDN'T have the BALLS to be temporary leaders for Equestria at that time?

And now, Twilight herself, her friends ( Including a undead Pinkie Pie!!?? ) are RESPONSIBLE to cause the civil war to last over 15-20 years, and be the same corrupt and tyrannical leaders themselves!!??

I won't stand for that. Being a OP Godly being myself. I can just as easily fix this, and put the tyrannical Mane Six back in there place. So, IF I made a hypothetical story with this concept. It will go like this;

First, I can just have easily find out what truly happened to Celestia and Luna. Quickly locate and rescue them from the real evil mastermind of their disappearance.

( Don't know who, what, or why? Because the original creator for Equestria Divided DIDN'T explained what exactly happened to the two princesses. Or who really caused their disappearance in the first place. And the creator just didn't update and abandon it long ago.

But, I will think of something to put a evil OC as the "mastermind". And make them my very own punching bag. Or maybe it's the real Grogar, Cosmos, or Eris this whole time!? )

And after I brutally trashed and torture the same evil unknown villain/villainess that kidnapped Celestia/Luna. Either kill him/her, and took their own soul to be damned for eternity. Or make them my eternal slave as punishment for their sins. And help "reforming" them by forcing them to help me fix their own mess.

And after the princesses are eternally thankful for finally rescuing them. Once I explained and even show the rescued princesses on WHAT Celestia's "precious" student, and her "heroic" friends ( Along with Shining/Cadence ) did to Equestria for the past 15-20 years.

And ooooooooohhhhhhhhhh boy! Once they both saw the brutal war, needless violence, death, chaos, crimes and atrocities of the corrupted and tyrannical Mane Six to poor Equestria and their "innocent" little ponies. I bet that both Celestia and Luna WON'T be very happy!

I also bet that Celestia and Luna are so disappointed, angry/wrathful, livid, and super pissed off at Twilight and her friends, Shining/Cadence, and the rest of ponykind for the brutal 15-20 year old civil war they have all caused. And also including the other non-pony races for also joining the war, and fueling the fire of violence and death.

They will immediately turned into their "dark" selves ( Nightmare Moon and Daybreaker. ). But the twist is that they aren't "pure evil", and still have their original personality. And both want to be permanently stay in their "dark forms" that way, until everything is resolved. And even beg me to personally join my crusade on punishing them all, and quickly end the civil war.

Besides, they ain't enough Equestria Divided stories in here anyway. Much less of no new recent stories either. And I REALLY want all six of them to getting their asses handled to them. And get their own consequences/karma for their actions. So, this is a good excuse to do it myself.

11304812
Oh I know their a bunch a bunch of babies but that is fine but can you help with editing and proofreading since I could use all the help I could get me and deathwolf06

11304815
Didn’t see the last three parts but never read the equestria divided series can you link it please

11305015

Here are tons of links for you;

https://mlpfanart.fandom.com/wiki/Equestria_Divided

https://www.fimfiction.net/group/197422/equestria-divided

https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Fanfic/EquestriaDivided

https://www.deviantart.com/Equestria-Divided

P.S. What do you mean didn't see the "last three parts"?

11305014

I am not a total "professional and expert" on editing and proofreading. But, I might try.

11305041
Thanks

11305046
If you can’t no pressure is all and that’s all I ask my friend

11305041
Also meant I read the first two paragraphs but didn’t see the rest of what you wrote about it

11305223

You mean this?

But yeah they might treat Batman actions as good and what they expect a hero should do but a real hero is willing to do the bad for good and kill to protect those who threaten or harm for fun like the real heroes are from the marvel universe since they kill and wound bad guys who kill or threaten hood and innocent people but if you can’t then yes kill if you must but always be prepared to kill or defend yourselves if harm comes to you or your family or friends or any one else you associate with but if one of them becomes a bad guy and come to harm you then you have a choice of either let him/her do it or defend yourself from harm.

Couldn't have said it better than myself. 👍 👍

Plus, there society is so fragile. It took like, not even 5 mins, or an hour, or a day to collapse in reality. It would take three days for society to collapse, but then oh boy, good luck with the Outcasts, Rikers.

You forgot to mention the rest of the enemy factions like the Cleaners, Rioters, Last Man Battalion/Black Tusk, Hyenas, True Sons, Rogue Agents/Hunters, etc. once again.

I put this link to the Division fandom wiki to help remind you;

https://thedivision.fandom.com/wiki/Category:Factions

But anyway, in the sense of Tom Clancy's The Division Universe.

At least we last much longer than the ponies ever did!!!

It's still bad that the Division universe's society still collapsed, but it shows that pony society is WAY WEAKER than we once thought.

11304696

Exactly.

11305233
Yep also just finished the lore and outline of the divided equestria series and all I have to say is three words

What the f**k

11305262

Yep, it is. And this is wwwwaaaaaaayyyyyyy back from the MLP fandom's beginning. Post-Season 2, and Pre-Alicron Twilight from Season 3 I think?

I wasn't joking on the Six-Way Civil War part. It's like Warhammer Fantasy/Age of Sigmar, or Game of Thrones vibes to it. Doesn't it kinda remind you that it has that The Division vibe as well, with the multiple antagonistic factions/houses/cult?

Now do you see why that particular alternate world of MLP fandom is on my long list for me to "visit" and punish the deserving sinners!? Especially the corrupt Mane Six.

11305287
Yeah it does give me the divsion vibes to it and may I come with you on your visits

11305294

You mean, having your OC on my potential stories? This is the first time I offered this.

11305321
Well I guess so also I’m think of writing a divided equestria fanfic in the furture

11305645

11305795
And when I do it I’ll PM you the first Chance I get plus post it on my blog so make sure to follow