It was alright, but there could have been more details regarding female anatomy, such as breast licking. Since they were dating before, you could have also included mention of previous bedroom activities. Maybe add some reflection on how they started dating and throw in a little world-building. Basically, it was good, but there's room for improvement.
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I like the story so far. My personal taste trends toward Non-fatal/endosoma, unbirth and more descriptive insides
Good chapter man, I'm enjoying this story so far
It was alright, but there could have been more details regarding female anatomy, such as breast licking. Since they were dating before, you could have also included mention of previous bedroom activities. Maybe add some reflection on how they started dating and throw in a little world-building. Basically, it was good, but there's room for improvement.