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It's not bad I think maybe it's because of caribous.
The story is not that far so you can change it up maybe go with adventure through (name of planet) it would be a great way to show off the world and the people there by having them explore the world maybe have dearing do join in for and epic battle fantasy world tour
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I have plan to that world but... 2 more season. This story focus on Caribou kingdom (not Fall of Equestria story, don't worry)
not very strong sentences in the first 7 paragraphs.
1. Celestia can move the sun which is more enough. Also she also moved the moon for 1,000 years.
2. Luna can move the moon with magic.
3. Fancy pants is making a 5 year project of solar panels (good job this was the smartest thing but I doubt that he would do such a thing since he seems more of a butler.)
4. Old ways causes many diseases I doubt that since magic is an easy fix.
5. Black mage.... this makes me think of final fantasy 14 0_0...
Chapter 1 seems a bit messy.
you should look back at this... again >.> it still needs more work.
Sister might be a character but it isn't a characters name... you should fix this on all chapters.
oh this is still chapter 1
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Wel about this "Sisters", I throught Celestia and Luna have that title "The Sisters"