The concept is great. I like where this is going.
But a couple things threw me off. The quote box is for quoting other text, not for dialogue. Some sentences are missing punctuation at the end or after a name. Definitely could use another editing pass.
Also, second-person means ‘you’ are the main character, as in “Cadence was laying on some cushions reading a book when you walked into your bedroom, with a big smile on your face.”