10971542 Noted I'm currently in the field so if it doesn't get done it doesn't get done but I'll try to do some quick edits here and there while I've got the little internet and time to do so thanks for the comment
"AAAAAAHHHHHHHH" Came a scream from the Castle of Friendship as birds flew off into diffrent directions as a crash could be heard. "Ugh did you have to hit me so hard Twilight?" Came the voice of a certain dragon. "Well that should teach you to knock before entering the bathroom next time Spike." Stated a now dressed and annoyed alicorn as she came out of the bathroom dressed in a black t shirt, and blue jeans.
That’s an interesting way to start a story.
" It sure has. When we came here you were 10, and I was 18. Aj and Rd were 18 Pinkie Pie was 17, Rarity was the oldest at 19, and Flutteryshy had just turned 19. Now we're all in our early to mid twenties, and you just turned 16." Twilight said, as she played back memories in her head.
So they’re legal?
"That and your a princess now, and all our friends have relationships. Fluttershy is dating Big Mac, Rarity is dating Emerald Blitz, Pinkie's dating Caramel Volt, Rd is dating Soarin, Applejacks got Artic Ace, and Starlight is dating Sunburst. You seem to be the only on thats not interested in anypony." Spike says as he finishes his food.
Are some of those original characters?
'Must have been recently added on.' thought Twilight, there was a screen going around that seemed to be used to keep bugs out. There was also a flag hanging from the front it had red and white stripes and a blue square in the corner with what looked to be stars on it. Walking up to the house the girls started to get more nervous as they got closer.
10972566 Thank you they are of age except the cmc that are around 15 to 16 get there later yes some are original characters and you ever seen a porch that had the same material as a screen door but it goes around it to keep bugs out its like that you see it alot on older houses down south and some newer homes through out the states
10972784 Since I don't have a computer and can't seem to beable to add photos with my phone just search screened porches and it should come up with it and when I get to a laptop when I'm out of the feild I'll post what it'll look like in the next chapter or idk I'll figure it out for the next one Or email idk I won't be for a little bit so idk
*passes this back covered in red ink*
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Noted I'm currently in the field so if it doesn't get done it doesn't get done but I'll try to do some quick edits here and there while I've got the little internet and time to do so thanks for the comment
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Done at least i think so curse my fat fingers not hitting what I want then to
Interesting so far keep up the good work!
That’s an interesting way to start a story.
So they’re legal?
Are some of those original characters?
Is the screen a window?
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Thank you they are of age except the cmc that are around 15 to 16 get there later yes some are original characters and you ever seen a porch that had the same material as a screen door but it goes around it to keep bugs out its like that you see it alot on older houses down south and some newer homes through out the states
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Have any images or something?
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Since I don't have a computer and can't seem to beable to add photos with my phone just search screened porches and it should come up with it and when I get to a laptop when I'm out of the feild I'll post what it'll look like in the next chapter or idk I'll figure it out for the next one
Or email idk I won't be for a little bit so idk
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Oh ok