She appeared as if from nowhere, a dark shadowed figure full of dread magic. Shining Armor and Cadance scowled with apprehension, but her attention was on the _other_ shadowy overlord that stood before her. Only one could remain.
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It feels like a poor decision, to continue the story in such a pivotal way in a chapter you've labeled clop in the chapter name. Maybe consider moving this chapter's author's note to the header position, and mentioning the existence of clop there? Maybe give a keyword for people who don't want to read clop to skip to?
Should be
Cadance waved a hoof
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How's that look?
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Oops, fixed!
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Is that first sentence in the author's note from before when it was the chapter footer? I didn't take a very good look at how it originally was. The sentence in question reads in past tense, and seems to correlate to this chapter. If I'm right and it is an artifact from the note's previous state, maybe change the tense to present or future? Other than that, it looks good.
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Adjusted.
>There is clop in this chapter
The fourth word in, even!
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Too much clop around here. How was the chapter?