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Honestly, I agree with you. The first part of Bunny's backstory came out a lot more edgy than I wanted it to be. Also, I don't want to spoil anything, but trust me, Bunny's father is something much worse than a raider.

As for how he knew what books were and what written language does, I kind of rushed things. It's just that if I wrote it entirely from Bunny's perspective, it would end up too vague and the reader wouldn't even be able to tell what was going on. Because of that, I unfortunately had to throw some realism out the window and make it so that Bunny could tell what was going on, at least somewhat.

Thank you for the criticism. Every little bit helps me improve my writing.

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I'd argue Bunny's nonverbal perspective would have been an intetesting place to go. You don't see stories that try to capture that kind of perspective very often. And depending on how it's done it can be really engaging.

But it would have been much harder to write and execute that perspective, especially for a novice. It's a little late for me to be making recommendations, seeing how the story's already being published, but I think it might have been easier on you as well as the readers if you gone ahead and started the main plot then slowly filled in his backstory as you went.

That way you could make the backstory as vauge or as detailed as you wanted and you wouldn't have had flaws like magically understanding the concept of written language so readily apparent to the reader.

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Thank you for the advice! It really helps!

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You're welcome