Let's face it, even Lyra was not mentally ready for such sort of humans.
might be a good idea to find an editor to help you out with this, not sure how to describe it exactly, but reading it almost feels... stunted maybe? not sure what the exact word is...
Why did you make the chapters so long?
Definately could use some editing, but besides that, you made a good reflection of the CMC on how they would act
might be a good idea to find an editor to help you out with this, not sure how to describe it exactly, but reading it almost feels... stunted maybe? not sure what the exact word is...
Why did you make the chapters so long?
Definately could use some editing, but besides that, you made a good reflection of the CMC on how they would act