The story’s idea is solid, always love a good mind control fic. Rainbow is sufficiently debacherous that it keeps it fun. Main issue, I fear, is lack of polish. Perhaps a few more exciting runs would elevate it to a more enjoyable level. Overall, good stuff that can be better with time.
This was a pretty great chapter.
Alright, so thoughts:
The story’s idea is solid, always love a good mind control fic. Rainbow is sufficiently debacherous that it keeps it fun. Main issue, I fear, is lack of polish. Perhaps a few more exciting runs would elevate it to a more enjoyable level. Overall, good stuff that can be better with time.