This is the story how Shine Yellowsoul met and fell in love with Derpy Hooves.
Good story so far. But just a little nitpick about something.
Derpy tilted her head, looking at the strange creature that for the second time now helped her without her ever asking.
but earlier she clearly said
- SHINE! HELP!
just something I noticed was all. Doesn't detract from the story all that much but it did break the flow for me just a bit.
Good story so far. But just a little nitpick about something.
but earlier she clearly said
just something I noticed was all. Doesn't detract from the story all that much but it did break the flow for me just a bit.