it's not brutal bad... I give it a 6/10 I mean I read it so far and this is what I could come up with. It may be incomplete now... but unfortunate that I'll have to wait for the rest.
early days still. It is a good start to the story, just make shure you switch back and forth between Equs confedaration and the Imperium at regular interwalls so that no side gets to far a head in the story.
I agree whit 10525011 a 6/10. Averige whit great potantial.
it's not brutal bad... I give it a 6/10 I mean I read it so far and this is what I could come up with. It may be incomplete now... but unfortunate that I'll have to wait for the rest.
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First, thanks for giving it a read.
Second, may I ask you what the really bad parts are? It would help me a lot
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not very much... just some punctuations on all chapters.
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thanks, I'll keep that in mind
early days still. It is a good start to the story, just make shure you switch back and forth between Equs confedaration and the Imperium at regular interwalls so that no side gets to far a head in the story.
I agree whit 10525011 a 6/10. Averige whit great potantial.
It seems you are quoting a lot from "Helsreach" book quite religiously. I mean wow there is just so many.
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I swear that the only intentional reference is in the third chapter.
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thanks for the very valuable feedback