Sometimes, being the only pony who knows how to fix an obscure sound system from the 1980s is a good thing. After all, it led to getting in bed with Celestia...
I like it so far, but remember to keep dialogue limited to one speaker per paragraph. It gets a little confusing otherwise.
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Hey, I just proofread this chapter, and I split up the dialogue! Woo! I'm about to fix the other chapter, did I do good with this one? uwu
10423959Just finished rereading it, it looks really good!
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Thank you!! I'm taking the dialogue-by-paragraph thing to heart, heh
I like it so far, but remember to keep dialogue limited to one speaker per paragraph. It gets a little confusing otherwise.
10388962
Hey, I just proofread this chapter, and I split up the dialogue! Woo! I'm about to fix the other chapter, did I do good with this one? uwu
10423959
Just finished rereading it, it looks really good!
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Thank you!! I'm taking the dialogue-by-paragraph thing to heart, heh