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Chapter Three
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What, you don’t believe khajiit? You wonder how this one knows what all those ponies in that village were doing? Fine, we learned all of that later, from questions and answers. Now shut up and let us continue.
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I awoke rather comfortably.
I still lay on the dirt where I had fallen, but my wounds no longer hurt or bled. My clothes, despite being rather torn apart, weren’t even covered in blood stains. This surprised me, but not quite as much when I learned what was sleeping next to me.
Turning to my right, I gazed upon the manticore, snoring loudly, half its left wing slung over me, as if to protect me. It carried a slight smile on its face, and seemed rather content to just lie there all day. I had other plans though, and I carefully began to weave my way out of its wing.
This of course, woke it.
Its response was different than what I was expecting. The creature was a manticore, a violent species, one that is known for its viscous nature. I expected it to try to finish me off, to try to make me its morning breakfast.
What it did was nuzzle up to me, grip me in both its huge paws, and lick my face repeatedly. Nothing could have confused me more, but try as I might, it had a strong grip, and I couldn’t get out of it. The manticore must have sensed my struggles, for it put me down soon after, and began to pat my head. Then it simply sat back down, and stared at me.
Now that it wasn’t trying to kill me, I had a good chance to get a look at it. For starters, it was far larger than me, my head ended at the top of its shoulders. It had a very, very large shaggy mane, and its face was unmistakably that of a lion. I bent over and gave its sniff, and sure enough, it carried a scent very similar to a lions as well.
After I had had my look over, it knelt forward, and lay down on the dirt next to me. It seemed content, and the way it watched the environment around us reminded me a mother wolf watching over its cubs. Not wanting to seem weak, I leaned over and whispered in its ear, “This one is not your newborn you know?”
To my surprise, it responded. Not with words, but it shook its head in an agreement before leaning close and licking my face once more. I pushed it off me before it could get in another one however.
I let myself sit next to it long enough to catch my bearings, as well as my belongings. Because it was cooler today, I decided to wear my armor, although the fur lining did become uncomfortable, it wasn’t unbearable. Then I threw my swords onto my back, as well as my pack, pulled on Krosis, and began to walk away into the woods.
Then the manticore jumped on me.
At first I thought it had regained its rage, but after several moments, it licked my face again, grabbed me in it huge left paw, threw me on its back, and flew off into the sky.
I have to admit, it was rather amusing. Because of my dragon soul, I have always held an affinity to the sky, and no matter how much thought I put into it, I could never shake the everlasting need to fly. Odd, considering most khajiit and cats hate high places. I guess it’s just a trait dragons have, one that was given to me as well, but know I could finally, for the first time since I rode Odahving, lose the ground beneath my feet and join the clouds.
It was exhilarating.
I found myself smiling, wide. Below my legs, the manticore glided with utmost grace. Its course was obvious; it flew towards the forest edge, to the nearby town. I could see it in the distance, albeit less detailed due to the morning fog. That reminded me, I had no idea what time it was. I checked it, using the sky as a clock. It was just barely over the horizon, so sometime around five or six, give or take an hour or two. I leaned backwards and stared upwards at the sky, knowing that I would not have a chance to be this close to it again for many a year, if ever.
Below me the manticore gave a roar that shook the earth as he crossed the border of the forest. I sat upright and scratched behind its ear, much to its enjoyment. Then I opened my sack, and began to rifle through my few belongings. I didn’t have much, a few scrolls to summon undead, a whetstone for my swords, several potions of assorted colors that I would have to organise later, and a few books, mostly novels. It was a bad collection of items, but I preferred to travel light, not heavily, and for that, it worked. I closed the sack and tossed it over on my back. The manticore was beginning to near the town, another minute at most and we’d be there.
I cracked my neck as I attempted to predict what I would find. Maybe I would find I was in some far off land, or some backwater country. Perhaps I was in a realm of Oblivion, being toyed with by some cruel deadra. Perhaps this was someplace else entirely. Nonetheless, I relaxed a little, knowing that with all that I had experienced, nothing down there would surprise me.
I was wrong.
As the manticore drew close, I spotted three things that through me off guard.
One, the people of the town was not like any I had ever seen. They appeared to be equine, with bright colored hides. Several of them had wings or horns, making them unicorns and pegasi respectively. They walked around doing the same day to day activities as a normal person might do, hinting at intelligence. From where I was, they appeared slightly shorter than me, maybe up to the top of my ribs or chest, but no farther.
Second, I noticed a huge flaming gate in the center of the town, near a house built into a tree and a lavender unicorn. It occurred to me that none of the horses were looking at me instead fixing their attention on the gate.
Third, I saw a dremora walk out of it. This would have surprised me regardless of where I was, but the details on that certain dremora nearly drew me into a panic. He wore fine armor, I could tell from where I was that it was real deadric, not the cheaper and more common form that lesser dremora wear. It was also far larger than any dremora I had ever seen, towering over me, which only served as a testament to how much taller it was than the surrounding horses. There was no doubt about it; this dremora was a Valkynaz, one of the lesser princes of Mehrunes Dagon, a member of the deadra prince’s council and honor guard. One of the most powerful entities to exist, and here it was, in a town populated by colorful horses, something that defied all the laws of Oblivion.
Below me the manticore stopped in place, hovering above the ground. Together, we both watched the dremora lord.
It seemed pleased with itself, it laughed out loud and looked around the town for several moments. Then it did the very thing I hoped it wouldn’t. It unsheathed its sword, a giant claymore the make of which I had only seen in Vvardenfel, and then it motioned at the lavender horse near the tree house, and ran at her.
Then, the flaming gate widened, and dozens more dremora and deadra poured out.
The manticore wasted no time in dashing forward towards the town, seemingly forgetting about me, much to my dismay. The speed at which it moved forward made it near impossible to hold on, and by the time it reached the outer area of the town, I could hold on no longer. My grasp weakened, and I fell from its back, all the way to the ground, two hundred meters below.
To call the fall painful would have been a lie. It wasn’t painful, it was unbearable. I landed on my back and let out scream in agony as I heard a snap. Everything in my body went numb from the back down. At first panic set in before I remembered the potions in my sack. I prayed to the divines as I opened the sack top, hoping they hadn’t cracked or shattered. To my luck, none of them had, and soon I picked out a large red one, topped with a wine cork. I wasted no time in downing in, and soon after feeling returned to my body, and all the aches and bruises I had vanished. I stretched my legs out, testing their mobility before standing up.
The deadra hoard had worked quickly. Already they were near my position, although I doubted the horses had given them much resistance. I sighed as I unsheathed both my swords. When I looked upon this town from the forest I expected a warm welcome, a guide on where I was and instructions on how to get home. Nothing that was happening was something I expected, or wanted. The deadra saw to ruin that, and now, I was going to make them pay. I ran forward, swinging both my swords, towards the town.
The first wave I reached was made primarily of low ranking dremora shock troopers, churls. They barely put up any resistance. I jumped between two of them, swinging my blades as I sliced through the right one’s armor. The left one turned around soon after, but only met a blade to the throat. Then the last of them, a kynreeve and two more churls ran toward me. The kynreeve was strong, stronger than me, and it took all of my skill not to let his blows through, but the churls were weak and undisciplined. I killed the first with a stab through the abdomen and the second with a counter attack to the chest. The kynreeve laughed as they fell, screaming about how weak they were. He boasted a shield and long sword, and the pose he took showed me of his skill.
He made the first move, nearly taking my head off with an overhand swing, but I dodged it and sliced to its side, to which it blocked with its shield. Before I could pull away, it bashed me in the face with the shield, knocking me off balance and allowing it to swing at my unguarded chest. My armor stopped it, but I made note to chastise myself for letting such a blow in.
The dremora obviously didn’t expect his sword to stop at my chest, and his surprise allowed me the moment to get in one good swing, which opened his armor up from gut to neck. It fell down to its knees soon after, and stared straight ahead at me. Before I took its life with one final swing, it had the time to say “Well fought.”
After allowing the deadra to fall, I moved onwards. The main hoard that pressed through the gate ended up numbering at around seventy. In that, I had to engage and fight around thirty. The closest I got to losing a fight was when I had three catiffs fighting me at the same time. One of them, the largest, carried a warhammer, and with it, it knocked Dragonbane out of my hand. I had to use Oathblade instead, this time taking on a more defensive stance. In the end I used the dremora’s hammer against it, dodging its swing, making it over shoot and hit instead its ally, caving in its breastplate. In its rage it swung wildly at me, which I once again dodged, letting it swing over shoot again and smack into the face of the other catiff, shattering its skull. This time it was too tired to pull another swing at me, and I easily slid past its defenses, killing it with a thrust straight through the heart.
Afterwards the rest of the battle was easy sailing. I saved several of the horse-people (Really? Horse-people?) as I made my way through the town, all of whom looked at me strangely, but never saying a word to me as they fled for safety. I didn’t mind their looks; beneath Krosis mine was the same. I pushed all questions to the back of my head. I would have my answers, later, when the battle was over. Looking up at the sky, which by then was red, I wondered if the horses had any sort of ruler or government, and if they would send help. I couldn’t hold back the entire army of Oblivion, not forever, and if I didn’t get help soon then the dremora would overwhelm the town. They would chase down the ones who were fleeing, kill the ones who begged for their lives, and put the town and all in it to the torch.
I couldn’t let that happen.
Ahead of me, in the town center, the Valkynaz I saw enter the gate still stood, cutting down the few ponies who dared to oppose him.
There weren’t many, certainly not as many as the dremora, but several a large and brave ponies had been able to make a sort of makeshift militia, ten or so ponies, fighting with whatever they could find. Pitchforks, shovels, their own hoofs, I even saw a rainbow haired one slam into a churl so fast it generated a rainbow behind it. There was another pink one that shot a kynval in the face with a cannon of some sort. The blast threw it across the town in a comical fashion. I would have been amused if it weren’t for the circumstances.
They seemed to be led by the lavender unicorn, perhaps the smallest of all of them, as she barked orders and loosed spells at the nearby hoard. They were makeshift spells, fireballs, heat rays, and frostshards, nothing especially powerful. I began to wonder just how they hadn’t been cut down yet, until I saw her let loose a golden glow at an injured horse, instantly healing him of his injuries, to which he dived right back into the fray. Whenever a horse got injured, she would heal them, and they would get back to the fighting. It was an efficient method of repelling the attackers.
But sadly not enough.
All around her there were horses she hadn’t been able to save in time, and several of them had run off in fear, only to be killed before they could get ten meters. It was a hopeless endeavor.
Fortunately, the cavalry soon arrived, in the form of dozens of chariots pulled by armored pegasi, in which sat unicorns, also armored. Each one was throwing spells down upon the dremora hoard, but one in particular was having more luck, her spells more powerful and accurate. I glanced around until I saw her, to which my jaw dropped.
She was tall, just under my height, and she wore a sort of golden battle armor, more decorative than anything. Her mane was strange, and seemed to be made out of waves of colors flowing in the pattern of a rainbow, and she boasted not just a horn or wings, but both. Everything about her screamed royalty, that much was certain as the look on her brow as she searched the battlefield, tossing spells down by the dozens, until she saw her target.
“The general,” I said to no one in particular, “She’s trying to kill the general.”
And she was. When she spotted him taking on four horses at once, and winning, she jumped off her carriage spreading wide a pair of wings, and landed ten meters from him. He seemed amused he pulled back his head in laughter as she said “Why are you hurting my little ponies, what do you want from us? Answer!”
That seemed to amuse him more. He yelled something at his army I didn’t hear, earning laughter from the invading dremora, as he leveled his sword with her chest and began to approach her. That was about when I noticed the crowd that had gathered around her. Many of the horses, and many of the dremora, even me, had stopped the fighting, momentarily, to watch the fight that was about to commence. The fight that would decide the fate of the town.
Sadly however, it was over before it began.
The royal horse started by throwing a fireball at the dremora, which he deflected with his sword. Before she could make another one, he lunged at her, holding his sword with both hands in an over hand swing. She summoned a mystical sword from thin air, and blocked the blow at the last second, but she seemed to flinch at the force. She continued to block the dremora’s swings, but she soon grew tired. Her levitating sword began to slow, and after a particularly strong swing, she ended up in a lock with the general.
They stared at each other for several moments, before the dremora pressed all his force down on her bound sword. In a flash of light, it vanished, accompanied with the crack of shattering glass, and the royal horse fell to her knees. When she tried to rise, he butt her just under her horn with his pommel, and she fell to the ground. She repeated this twice more, and by then, she was barely conscious.
It was clear to the crowd, to the shock of the horses, she had lost. In front of her the dremora raised his sword, a wide smile on his face as he swung downwards with all his might at her head.
Instead his sword found Dragonbane’s edge.
His shoulders shook from recoil as pulled away from me, snorting in disgust at my defense of the royal horse. I heard her sigh from behind me, half in joy and half in fatigue. Around me the deadra and the horses stared, especially the horses. I had a sneaking suspicion that they had never seen a khajiit before, but I neglected to say anything to them, although my tail shook nervously. Instead I spoke to the dremora general, using first person instead of my preferred third to get my point across.
“If you want to fight anyone today, then make it me. I cannot let the weak be abused, and I will not let your deeds go unpunished. So raise your sword, this goes to the death curr.” My threat was accompanied by a feline growl.
Behind me I heard the royal horse stand up and make her way back to the crowd. She seemed confused, something I expected. When she was back in the crowd, next to the lavender pony from earlier, she looked at me and nodded. I nodded in response as well, and cracked my neck. In front of me the dremora prepared himself, taking up a fighting position.
I let him have the first move. It came into reality as a side swing with both hands, which I barely blocked with both my swords. Next he threw an overhand attack, which I sidestepped. Before he could get another attack in, I stepped close and slid Oathblade against the back of his knee, cutting through a small layer of chain mail and giving him a very small but deep cut.
If he felt the slice, he didn’t show it. He elbowed me in the face, hitting Krosis instead, but the force was enough to push me backwards several meters. Then he was on me again, this time putting an extra bit of power in his wings, now that he knew I was a legitimate threat. The horses around me winced with every blow, but the dremora cheered their leader onwards, which he responded to by adding even more power to his swings. I found myself struggling to keep up with his movements, and finding very few opportunities to get a blow in, and those that I did hardly scratched his armor.
Eventually, I failed to block one of his attacks, and it struck me on the shin, cutting straight through my dragonscale, and soaking the fur underlining with my blood. I let out a growl in pain, much to the amusement of the dremora, and the horror of the horses, but to me, the wound only succeeded in putting me into blood frenzy. The world glazed over as I began seeing everything as red, everything, except the general.
Then I reversed the table. I put myself on the attack, swinging my two swords in different motions, catching him off guard and getting numerous, albeit minor hits in. They hardly made any marks on his breastplate, but one hit his thigh, and when I pulled back my blade, there was a small smear of blood on it.
The dremora reacted exactly as I expected him to, pulling his sword around and pressing the attack. This time however, he was almost without grace, pulling his energy from rage. That made every swing the more powerful, but also made him clumsy. He missed several swings, and I found it easier to dodge them than before. I eventually missed a dodge, having to resort to my swords to stop the blow, a diagonal chop, which ended hitting the back of my left shoulder, forcing me to drop Oathblade. The horses gave a wail of despair; all expect the royal one and the lavender unicorn. They instead seemed more focused than ever before.
Not bothering to react from the wound, I pushed the general’s sword off me, and took up Dragonbane alone, this time holding it with both hands. I ended up blocking more attacks than I could before, but the general didn’t seem to tire. He seemed more dedicated than before, and every blow shook my foundations. Once again, I found myself tiring before his onslaught, until I was practically on my knees, clutching my sword with one hand, completely out of breath. The general stepped in front of me and took up the same stance as when he had attempted to finish the royal horse. He had a wide smile on his face, something that just looked wrong on a dremora, and I could tell he was about to enjoy what he was about to do.
I knew I wouldn’t, so I called upon my last inner strength as I stood up and yelled right into his face “Fus Ro!”
A sudden burst of air hit him, completely throwing him off balance, his swing missing me by meters. I lunged at him catching him unaware and slicing open his leg from his thigh to his ankle. He let out a grunt of pain, and stuttered a set to the left. This allowed me to get a single swing in.
That turned out to be a terrible decision.
With unsung precision, he lifted his sword, knocked mine off course to the right, performed a spin and struck me straight in my side, punching through my armor. The horses in the crowd winced all at once, none of them wanting to imagine how much the strike hurt. I couldn’t help but scream out in pain as his sword made its way through my armor, embedding itself just under my ribs, around an inch into my flesh. He pulled it out and stepped towards me. I didn’t let myself fall to my knees, if I did that this time then I was dead, there was no doubt about that. So I forced myself to stand through the pain, leveling my sword at his chest.
The Valkynaz attacked faster than he ever did before. He threw an underhand slash at me, which I parried, and then a side swing. When I tried to dodge it, he hit me in the shoulder, taking a chunk of my dragonscale armor off and cutting down to bone. Before I could retaliate he leaped forward and thrust his blade straight through my abdomen. The pain was unbearable, I yelled as my mouth filled with blood. I spit it out right before falling to my knees in front of him as he pulled his sword out of me with a sick “shlick!”
The general once again took up his overhand chop stance, and I knew it was over. I couldn’t hope to block or dodge that attack. I had tried my hardest, but I couldn’t defeat him. There were worse ways to go I supposed, I went trying to save a village from doom, and I could live, or in this case, die happily in the knowledge of that. I gave up; I just sat on my knees and awaited the blow that would end it all.
Then I caught a glance at the lavender horse’s eyes, her strangely human eyes. She seemed sad, worried. She knew that with my death also died the hope of her town, her friends. A single tear appeared in her right eye before she blinked it away, and then looked away from me.
I couldn’t let her stay like that. The wounds I had suffered were fatal, that much was certain, I was bleeding too much to deny it, but I could at least die after saving this town. That much I knew.
The dremora general began his downward swing at the same time I jumped forward, towards him, holding my blade behind my head horizontally. When the deadric sword swung over me, it caught Dragonbane, and with a single twist, I had it locked in position.
And with it, the general’s life.
I had locked him in what a friend of mine called the death grapple. The attacker’s sword would be held behind my head, but prevented from hitting me by my own sword. Once that happened, there was no going back, if the attacker tried to pull his blade out, he would leave his head completely exposed and defenseless. Nothing could counter the death grapple save from outside interference.
And that was what had happened to the general. He didn’t realize it at first; he just stared at Krosis, but mere inches from his own face. Then I watched as he discovered what I had done and realization crept up on his face. Then he sighed, growled and mouthed something in a language I didn’t know to me. All around me dremora and horses held their breath’s in anticipation.
After several moments the dremora closed his eyes, opened them, looked straight into mine, through Krosis, and nodded.
Then we pulled out of the grapple.
As he did so, I swung my sword around my head, picking up momentum as Dragonbane’s edge approached his neck, bit by bit.
And then it passed right through him.
I stepped away as he dropped his sword and fell to his knees, his mouth open and his eyes closed. Straight ahead of him the royal horse stared at him. She continued this until he fell to the ground, and his head rolled off his shoulders, silently making its way across the floor until it rested just in front of her.
Everything in the area was silent as I stepped back into the center of the circle, sheathed my swords, and looked straight at the lavender unicorn.
She wasn’t crying. She was smiling. It was something I could live with. I tore off my mask and looked at her for a second, looking at her without the mask slits, with my own eyes. I was at peace. I was content. I was mortally wounded. I was falling. the world was spinning, its colors were red.
I fell to the ground in a pool of my own blood. Around me, horses approached to get a glance at me. The lavender unicorn was shouting something, and I could see the dremora running away towards their gate. The royal horse walked up to me, parting way through the crowd until she was at my side. A gurgle and a mouthful of blood came out of my mouth when I tried to say something. She held her hoof to my mouth and told me to be silent, to be still. She turned her head and shouted for someone, but I didn’t hear the name. Everything was going dark, and I found it difficult to focus on anything. Then the lavender unicorn was at my side. She knelt down next to me and whispered something, something I wasn’t expecting.
“Thank you.”
I stopped holding on. I was too hurt. Ahead of me, a white light was forming. I focused on it, and it grew lighter. It called for me, told me to stop trying.
So I did, and died.
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Game Over
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(Note: The story is not over. I left this reminder out originally because I thought most people would see the incomplete tag and make the connection. One person apparently didn't, so I have decided to post this. There is more to come, so don't ditch this. As before, please like or dislike, and feel free to leave a comment.)
Elesweyr is the khajiit homeland. Valenwood is the woodelf one. Also: poor ending. Or is it? O_o
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It isn't over. That's kinda why it's in the incomplete category. And by chance, did I say Valenwood was the khajiit homeland? I don't really remember. If I did, then my apologies. I haven't really played an Elder Scrolls game in a few weeks. Actually, did I even say mention those places? I don't remember.
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Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Khajiit! The most badass a cat can get!
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Agreed. Khajiit have almost always been my favorite of all the races in the series (save for Oblivion's khajiits, they were ugly as death in that one).
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Argonians are pretty cool, but I kinda like khajiits more. It's just a matter of preference I guess.
I love khajits to be honest they are one of the best classes you can pick for up close battles
When will the next chapter be up just for curious' sake
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To respond to all of those, (AHEM)
1. Yep, long chapters, and three of them. Yay.
2. As I said previously, khajiit are my favorite race, but I generally always use them, no matter what play type I choose (except for in Oblivion). This character was actually a thief in the beginning of my game, but I got really bored of one hit KO-ing dragons, so I switched out those daggers for katanas.
3. No idea. I'm going to do the same I did with this and release several at a time, maybe three or two. It takes me about three hours total to write one, not counting proofreading/editing/general laziness. To be honest I am notorious for procrastinating, to the point where I completely forget to do them at all. I wouldn't bet on it, but you may see them sometime this next week. Hopefully. Maybe.
Aww that stinks I really like this one and no see it's only original if you suck ass and ruin the whole entire idea of the dragon born but you did good with this so it is very original *not in a sarcastic voice*
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Don't worry, I'm not ditching this fic. You will see an update, I promise you. And thanks for the assessment, it means a lot to me.
It's all good I honestly enjoy talking with the authers of a story also the fus ro doesn't generally send any type of enemy flying it just makes them stumble longer he would need to use fus ro da
I liked the khajits the most for their increased unarmed damage/night eye.
I would also have thought that face full of fire/ice breath dragon shout would have worked wonders on the general.
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I like khajiits simply because of how creative and original they are (sort of). There are a thousand fantasy games where you can play as dark elves, nordic humans, wood elves, and whatnot, it's fantasy 101, but there are very very few where you can play as a cat person, and even fewer where the cat person is actually done well (I'm looking at you Oblivion).
As for the Frost Breath thing..... You're half right there. I suppose a good excuse would be that he was panicking and simply brought up the first shout that he could think of to save himself. In reality though, I can't just give a character an instant kill move that works on everything. I believe the proper term I'm thinking of right now is Gary Stu, a character that doesn't have to worry about anything and generally solves all his problems easily and without challenge. If he could win every fight easily, there would be no challenge, no feel to the danger he was in. I have to make him lose, or come close to losing fights every once in a while, to keep him feeling real and creative, which introduces a challenge, seeing as I still have to make him feel like a badass.
I got a bit out of hand with that comment, but my point remains the same. As always, thanks for reading.
Awesome story but a am curious about the khajiits are they weaker to magic because I get my ass beat by a lot of mages.
1183778 Honestly you could have your dragonborn only have a small slew of shouts as though they didn't go to all of the little word walls.... maybe around 4 or so.... The Fus Ro Dah one, the whirlwind sprint one, the one that brings dragons to the ground, and the fire breath one.
The Fus Ro Dah one is pretty much a given as it is the first one you get, the sprint one also as it more of a supportive shout, the dragon rend one doesn't really do much aside from ground dragons and you gain that nearing the end of the game, and the fire breath one would just be a good offensive shout.... Granted you could always introduce some sort of cooldown to how many can be used in a certain timespan.
Also the fire breath one in essence would be less powerful/op than the ice breath one in the sense that it wouldn't freeze them solid for a good couple of seconds.
I have to ask, is he going to go thru the oblivion gate, or assuming that he may not know how the gate is closed it may just stay open till some one jacks the sigil from within it.
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Alright then, time to consult the walking Elder Scrolls encyclopedia that is me.
As a good Skyrim player should know, every race starts off with different abilities. These vary greatly between each other, and for the most part, the abilities go rather well with the race it is based off. For example, dunmer, or more commonly known as dark elves, live in the province of Morrowind, and in the center of Morrowind, is a bloody giant volcano. Because dark elves have lived there for so long, they have developed a resistance to the heat and fire, that came from living next to a freaking volcano. Same with the nords, but with frost, due to living in colder climates, such as Skyrim.
Khajiit hail from Elsweyr, which is unimportant. What is important is that they are based off cats, which are nimble, fast and quiet. Just the perfect mix for a character based on stealth right? What is my point of that. Khajiit, being based around stealth, start with abilities that aid them with sneaking, not including their claws, those are just for show really, later in they're useless. They get night eye, which lets them sneak through dark places, avoiding people who can't see them in said dark place, as well as bonuses to many stealth orientated skills. But how does that relate to magic with them?Well, one important note is that they don't get any magic resistance like nords, dark elves, and bretons, because they're supposed to be avoiding any confrontation in which they would need it. Because of this, while they aren't really 'weak' to magic attacks, they really aren't all that good against them, seeing as they shouldn't even get near a single powerful spell. That said, they don't make bad warriors or mages, it's just that there are other races that do such a thing better.
In short, they should be sneaking by enemies with magic, rather than attacking them. Unless you're like me, and you enchant everything to make it so magic doesn't do anything. Either or.
Wow, that was a long rant. Sorry if it looked a bit blockish, I get pretty serious when it comes to this series.
aw...nice
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Not a bad idea. I'm not going to restrict his shouts to just four though, but maybe six or five. Something along the lines of that. As for the Oblivion Gate thing, my answer is quite simple. Probably. Unless I can think of some other way of closing it without going in, I most likely will have to do such a thing at one point.
Keep in mind, this isn't "Oblivion in Equestria, Featuring the Dragonborn". Its a separate story, and while it is influenced by other games in the series, it is a standalone story, and it has it's own storyline as well.
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Not to sound daft but um....what? I mean, I didn't quite catch your meaning and, well, you get my meaning.
I wonder how a Thalmor Justiciar would react if thrown into Equestria...
Probably violently.
Stop making me want to continue playing Skyrim! I need to stop the Joker in Arkham City!
Anyways, liked and faved, this story is great. I noticed a number of errors in this chapter (sorry if someone already pointed it out, didn't check the comments >_<) but nothing extremely major. I like your story-telling method, and the narration thing reminds me of the Courier fic I'm also tracking/reading
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Probably.
So...lost any followers in Oblivion recently? I hear they have a habit of doing that.
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Joker, the ultimate troll. I wish you luck my friend.
Okay, serious now, thanks. I do know about several of the errors in it, I'm probably going to do a read over to skim out some of them later. Could you point out a few, preferably the worst ones. It would make them a little easier to fix.
Now let me guess, that Courier fic is called Wayward Courier, isn't it? I hope so, otherwise I probably seem like an idiot right now .
1184121 I actually forgot most of the shouts..... I also remember an ethereal form shout, a calm surrounding animals shout, the summon dragon shout (not really sure if it would work counting he is in a different realm)
And seeing how he is weak in magic.... I'm assuming he doesn't know the heal self spell (the beginner one that takes forever to heal up your health) Granted seeing how stat wise he seems like he would be a mid to higher level character, and with that much health, the spell wouldn't really be that useful for quick healing.... wait... derp he heals the manticore with a spell..... I forgot about that.....
Before I took its life with one final swing, it had the time to say “Well fought.”
If I'm not mistaken, there should be a comma before the quotation, right after say. I could be mistaken though.
They really were minor though. I'm pretty sure there was a too/to issue somewhere as well. I might have gotten mixed up and saw them in the first two chapters, I just read through all three in one go. I'll try to make a point to note them in the future.
Yes! It is the Wayward Courier! I still have two chapter updates to read on them.
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Thanks for pointing that out, I'll look out for it in the future.
About your comparison between this and WC, I would be lying if I said I didn't take a lot of inspiration from it. I mean, it isn't the sole reason I wrote this, but you can defiantly see the similarities. The intro for each chapter for example; practically stolen right out of it. The main difference between mine fic and Tony1685's, is that Wayward Courier is certified gold, mine is maybe a piece of Coal.
Now to finish this I- wait, what! You're two updates behind ! The hell are you doing here then, go read them, now! (I'm kidding, in case it wasn't obvious.)
1184257 No, you;re pretty spot on. He has practically no skill with magic aside from enchantment. When he healed the manticore, he used all his power he had at the time, and it took all his magicka (which is 120), and even then he passed out form the exhaustion. He heals primarily with potions and other such things. Sounds lie he won't have any trouble with healing then, right? Well, I very much doubt Equestria has the same plants and wildlife as Tamriel. He may have to experiment a little first.
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Funny story, I recently moved for a new job and spent about a good week with transit, orientations, packing and unpacking, and when I FINALLY got a phone, still no internet, I was terrified to see my favorites update list at like 89. Absolutely terrified. How the heck do I work, play games, stay social, pay bills AND read stories about ponies?!!??! Not enough hours in the day I tell you.
Oh and I'm down to 19 unread updates, and the freaking feature box isn't helping!
1184448 Hmmmm.... Zecora...... hint hint..... Yeah if you don't have the beginning mastery in the corresponding spell skills, then they do eat up magicka fast.... no matter wether or not they are a low level spell.
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Yeah, I got back from a vacation about a week ago, I've got over a hundred stories still to read before the updates hit zero. And with Past Sins here now....well, I'm going to be busy a while. Just watch Kkat put Fallout Equestria up here, I'd never finish reading.
1184485 I do plan on Zecora being a big part of this story, but only when The Dragonborn heads into Everfree for the second time, which is in a future yet-to-be-written chapter. Still, I'll think on it, I've been given so much advice, I'll need some time to process it all.
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Please don't even MENTION Fallout Equestria! I have it on my tablet in pdf format sitting at chapter 5. I'M SO ASHAMED BY HOW FREAKING DAUNTING IT IS.
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Ha, I have a friend who's been stuck on chapter seven for months now. He's just so intimidated.
I have no idea why, it's only six hundred twenty five thousand words long. I mean, what's to be intimidated by? Project Horizons is almost one million words long after all.
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I know right? I mean, after killing him with the Wabbajack you think he would have gotten the idea that invading a world was a bad idea.
I'm enjoying this.
I think he should have 6 to 7 shouts, seeing as there are over 20 in the game, definitely the call animals shout.
My fave in Oblivion was Argonian straight up, and Skyrim was Nord (Xbox) and Khajiit (PS3. Couldn't come up with a name so I just called him Khajiit Drone #967428 XD )
Good choice on Krosis and Dragonscale! Don't think I've heard of Oathblade before, did you make it or is it in the game?
Also if he's defeated Alduin then he would have already flown in the sky. :3
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Yeah, I think that many shouts would be pretty good too. The call animal shout was one I didn't think of before, good idea, I wouldn't of thought of it. Thanks.
As I already said before, khajiit are my favorite race, at least in Morrowind and Skyrim. In Oblivion I played as a dark elf with pitch black skin in contrast to his red eyes. It was kinda stereotypical but he looked pretty awesome. Also, that name is badass.
As for Oathblade, I kinda based off an actual item, but it really was made by myself. The item I based it off is named Bolar's Oathblade and it's found in a cave somewhere, the one Hircine's quest takes place in. It's a bit tricky to get, seeing as it vanishes once you start the quest.
It's one of the earliest blades swords you can find, but it's enchanted, and oddly enough, needs Quicksilver rather than steel to improve it. Because of this, I generally pick it up once I get out of Helgen, seeing as it does quite a bit more damage than most other weapons at the time. It isn't very good for later in though; it's enchantment is very, very weak, so I ditched it for another blades sword, which I named Oathblade and enchanted with Fiery Soul Trap and fire damage (100 enchantment). That plus Dragonbane with max smithing and a blacksmith increasing potion made for two, very lethal weapons.
And I know he already flew in the sky, he references Odaving in that paragraph.
1182224 yes in chapter 2. You said elsweyr was the wood elf homeland. Valenwood is their province. Elsweyr is the desert land of the khajiit bordering valenwood.
1184934 Sure thing bro. Maybe he can call a hydra to help. XD
Meh. Never cared much for the elves or humans on Oblivion. They all looked like they had downs. Of course in Skyrim they completely turned over and fucked how the Argonian looked. I didn't want Lizardman, I wanted A lizard man.
No kidding? Huh. Guess I'll check it out on a new game.
And its kinda like Ebony Blade on how it needs a different material to make it stronger. (In Ebony Blades case, betrayal)
Oh. I guess I didn't notice.
1184934 Oh and he would have to know Dragonrend if he has already ridden Odahviing.
1184668 Oh yeah he's suppossed to melt after getting hit by a blast right? He never did for me :'(
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What? no please repeat.
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Sorry about that, I don't know how I missed it during proofreading. Thanks for pointing it out. Now for the reference, I did know that, but I guess I just fucked up that part when I was writing. Edit: I found it, and fixed thanks for pointing it out.
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Calling a hydra out of a forest to fight against the waves of Oblivion would be bloody badass, you should have been able to do that in Skyrim. And yes, he knows dragonrend (I can't see him using it all that much, but I have a few idea's). I have to agree with you about Oblivion's elves, they really did look like they had downs. Fuck every race in that game did, but it was still a very enjoyable game. And yep, melting Dagon with the Wabbajack, best glitch ever.
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Thanks for the info on the khajiits it's my first elder scrolls game so kind of a newbie.
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No problem, I understand that was a really long post for such a simple question; for that, my apologies, as I said before, I'm a pretty big fan of this series (started with Morrowind, damn I love me my Morrowind) so I know quie a bit about it. As always, thanks for reading.
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No it's all right I do the same thing some times.
Death is kind of a way of saying 'this story is now over'. If you wanted to end it dramatically without giving the feeling the story was over, you could've said 'So I did and everything faded to black'. You need to be careful with that sort of thing otherwise people will pick up the wrong idea.
This is simply amazing, great story plz finish it
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Thanks. I don't think it's quite as good as everyone says, but I'm still happy all of you are enjoying it.
Yeah I love skyrim and I love ponies, what could be better!
This story is AMAZING except its missing 1 thing Fluttershy!
I know you don't want the guy to be a Gary Stu (which is great), but it seems that you're trying too hard which is making him seem way too weak. Considering how high level a character he's based on (65 or something from the description), he's really pathetic so far. He doesn't seem to have all that much strength, his magic is weak, he apparently keeps forgetting about all his useful abilities (seriously, he doesn't bother trying to use anything until the very end? ).
Most authors seem to think giving a character a lot of power is the only thing that makes a Gary Stu/Mary Sue, but that's just not true. This is the Elder Scrolls verse we're talking about here, where crazy power is par for the course. This is the Dragonborn, so it should be even more true for him, yet for such an experienced warrior, he seems to be getting constantly knocked around all the while making huge mistakes (such as forgetting pretty much all his abilities).
All that said, I did enjoy this so far. It's pretty hard to find good crossovers (most end up being fusions, with ponies replacing all the characters), so I was happy to see this.
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Hmm, interesting. I guess I have made him out to be a little... underpowered, but I think I've kept it around where I want him to be. After all, off screen he did end up taking on and winning against 30 dremora (lesser rank of course, but my point is the same). I have to ask, when did he forget about his abilities? If that was about when he may have been able to use frost breath on the Valkynaz, then.... I dunno, I guess I never use anything other than unrelenting force. It's kinda become my worst case scenario move, one that I use only when I'm losing my fights, I don't use dragon shouts for anything else. Since Do'Jzir (I have yet to have anyone call him that, but it is his name) is my character, he will end up very similar to how I actually play the game, in which I only use UF. Frost breath isn't even all that good later in, and it's cool down takes so long. Still, you may be right about that part.
I also will not deny that I gave the several of the enemies a MASSIVE power increase. The valkynaz for example, is far more powerful in this than they are in Oblivion, but I mean, really, they command armies of Deadra! They have to be more powerful than that game made them out to be.
But regardless, I will try to make him seem more... balanced, and Skyrim like. Thanks for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it, despite the obvious problems you had.
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When I said it seems like he forgot his abilities, I meant that for someone as experienced as he is (you mentioned he would be high level), and as serious as the situation was, he didn't really use anything. No magic, no shouts (the single shout he used, near the end of the fight, was just an under powered Fus Ro, so not even a full shout), nothing. Like the start of the fight after he blocked the sword, I was expecting him to use that perfect moment to do a shout right in his face, but there was nothing. It made it seem like when he finally did that partial shout, he just suddenly remembered that he could do that.
Sorry for the rant, since I still like the story so far. I just think you're trying to hard to avoid making him a Gary Stu, and by doing so you're making him seem underpowered. Basically, just have him do more things when the opportunity calls for it (an example would be like above, when he had the perfect chance to do a full powered shout right in the guys face).