Author's Note: Sorry for the wait, you guys. Had a few minor issues here and there, but I managed to fix things up! I just have a new writing program, so I'm sorry if there's any errors I missed. Still trying to get the handles of it.
P.S. For the record, the Chapter Titles don't make any sense for a reason.
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“Rainbow Dash,” Pinkie Pie exclaimed, “it’s you!” She proceeded to pounce on Rainbow, causing her to fall over. The various stallions were beginning to pull Pinkie off when Rainbow Dash stopped them.
“No, don’t. She’s cool, she’s with me.” She said with a calm voice that still somehow exuberated authority over the much larger stallions.
“Aight, boss.” The orange stallion said and looked over at Fluttershy. “And her?”
“She’s with me too. Midnight Dare, go clean yourself up. The rest of you, follow suit.” The gang of stallions walked away, leaving just Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie and Fluttershy to be in the dank, dark alleyway. Pinkie Pie bounced off of Rainbow Dash and bounced back to Fluttershy, softly nuzzling her and whispering in her ear.
“Its okay, Flutters. The bad men are gone now; you don’t need to be afraid.” Pinkie continued to whisper calming things into Fluttershy’s ear, until she could eventually get her to stand up, minutes later.
“O-okay…” Fluttershy mumbled, shaking like a leaf due to fear. She clung onto Pinkie for support, her clothes dust-covered due to the ancient dirt that laid upon the concrete flooring beneath them.
“Say, what’re you two doin’ out in these here streets anyways? Shouldn’t you two be, you know, somewhere where you won’t get mugged at every turn by my gang?” She asked, quickly adding on “Well, you won’t now, but you were about to be!”
“W-we…” Fluttershy simply hid behind Pinkie, still afraid at the sight of her best friend for obvious reasons.
“It’s okay, Flutters,” Pinkie said soothingly as she stroked Fluttershy’s done-up mane, “I’ll handle this. Just relax, my love.” She proceeded to kiss Fluttershy softly on the lips, making her smile. “Better?” A nod in return. “Goodie.” She turned towards Rainbow Dash again, holding Fluttershy close to her. “Well, we were going to that new pClub that opened up recently before your meanie friends came around!”
Rainbow simply snickered. “Those guys, my friends? Good joke. No, no, you see Pinkie…” she smiled that ever-confident smile of hers. “I am the leader of one of the largest, most organized crime gangs this side of this ‘ere city. We control the majority of the area. They are simply my lackeys, not my friends.” She leaned up against one of the crumbling, graffiti-covered brick walls of the alleyway, took out some gum and began chewing it before continuing. “I’m sorry ‘bout those dunderheads that tried to attack you two, too.” She blew a single bubble that popped rather loudly. “They didn’t realize you were a couple of my girls.”
“It’s okay Dashie, you know I couldn’t stay mad at you!” Pinkie smiled. “I’m just a wee bit angry that they scared my Flutters.”
“N-no, its… its okay. I’m okay.” Fluttershy said rather timidly. “J-just a little dirty is all…”
Rainbow sighed and walked over, brushing off Fluttershy, making a large cloud of dust form that made them all cough and gag until it finally dissipated. “There, good as new. So, where was it you were going now?”
“The pClub!” Pinkie chimed in enthusiastically and a bit louder than normal, making Fluttershy jump. “Oopsie, sorry Flutters.” Fluttershy simply nodded and mumbled something unintelligible.
“Oh, well, y’best be on your way then. I’ll leave word in to not mess with you two.” Rainbow grinned and walked out of the alleyway, leaving the two lovers to their own devices.
“Come on Flutters,” Pinkie entwined her tail with Fluttershy’s, “we’re wasting Luna’s good moonlight!”
“O-okay…”
The two walked out of the alley, Pinkie shaking herself off, leaving a huge cloud of dust where they were standing. They walked towards the pClub and smiled at each other, before waltzing in like nothing had even happened beforehand.
The pClub
They walked in to what seemed to be an abandoned, empty room, save for a single elevator.
“Well, this must the way in.” Pinkie said, dragging Fluttershy along with her in her bounces. The elevator shut behind them, and within a few minutes there was a click and a voice saying “Welcome to the pClub.” and with that, the elevator doors opened to reveal a fenced-in-catwalk and what seemed to be reflective walls, all made out of…
“Mirrors,” Fluttershy whispered in awe, “mirrors everywhere.” And indeed, the entire room was covered in mirrors from floor-to-ceiling, save for the single catwalk that lay in front of them.
“Well, what are we waiting for? Let’s go, you silly filly!” exclaimed Pinkie Pie as she bounced her way down the catwalk, Fluttershy chasing after her. After what seemed to be forever and a century, they finally arrived at a pair of double doors that were solid, making what was behind them a curiosity. When they pushed it open together (it was too heavy for just one of them), they revealed what looked like Pony Heaven, if Pony Heaven was a completely over-the-top underground nightclub. Sitting in front of the two was a staircase that looked like it could easily fit thirty ponies across and a separated balcony on each side. The room was dimmed down to almost nothing, but plenty could be made out: flat screen televisions adorned the walls of the upper-level, right above buffets and tables suited for two. There was also a bar, where at which a light-blue mare with an electric-blue mane expertly juggled bottles of liquor before pouring them into wine glasses, shot glasses, all types of glasses fit for a nightclub of this caliber. But what was truly amazing was what lied beyond the stairs: the lower level contained a dance floor, flanked on two sides by two-story columns that had strobe lights expertly placed around, making the columns shine many different colors. Behind the dance floor laid a wall of glass mirrors, reflecting the many ponies that were dancing. In-between two of the columns laid a DJ Table being expertly played by none other than DJ PON-3, Vinyl Scratch, herself. Ponies thronged everywhere, coming to-and-fro, some more staggered than others.
Fluttershy could barely hear herself think over all the mixed noises. She became more timid than usual, frightened by all of the lights and ponies, but slowly began to warm up to it; within minutes she was looking around in awe. “This is... stunning,” is all she could mouth. Well, she was actually yelling, but nobody would know that over the mixed noise. Pinkie just stared, jaw on the floor. She had finally found the one place that might be able to handle her type of partying – might. Before they knew it, they were moving down the stairs without realizing it, almost as if being beckoned by the dance floor. Within what seemed like seconds, there they were: face-to-face with the dance floor, covered with dancing ponies.
Pinkie began walking towards the DJ Table, but was abruptly stopped due to her tail being entwined with Fluttershy's.“What are we waiting for, Flutters?” Fluttershy shook her head and looked at Pinkie, as if she was in some kind of trance.
“O-oh, sorry... was admiring the club...”
“Well, come on!” Fluttershy and Pinkie walked over to the table, and nudged Vinyl Scratch to get her attention. “Can we get a request in?”
Vinyl smirked and nodded, letting the table work itself. “I get requests all the time here, what's yours?”
Pinkie looked at Fluttershy and contemplated for a moment. “Some Kano remixes?”
“Certainly, haven't had anypony request those tonight.” Vinyl's horn began shimmering, the DJ Table's vinyl records being shrouded with the same shimmering, as it began to fade into one of the newer remixes. Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie quickly found themselves on the floor, dancing into the early hours of the morning.
Sorry to say, but I won't continue reading this story.
This chapter just killed it for me. More specifically the beginning. Rainbow Dash being head of some big street gang...meh, ok. With what this story was showing before, I guess I can accept that, but the fact that the situation was just shrugged off like that, that's what killed it for me. Just wasn't believable to me. Maybe it's just me, but meh.
I liked the idea, it seemed original and real interesting and clubbing ponies? I'm in. I've seen some grunge and punk pony art around and I really like it so I was happy to see a story that took place in this kind of setting. Good luck with the story :D.
Have a good one.
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Sorry to hear that, mate. But if you think about it, Pinkie and Rainbow Dash are portrayed as best friends almost everywhere, both canon and non-canon. Plus the fact that Pinkie Pie is a generally carefree, forgiving pony by nature, I personally would find a big deal being made due to the situation being less believable.
Thanks!
Have a nice day/life/whatever it is you mention it as.
Dare I suggest a better music?
Yes: Take both home!
chapter 3 was a buzzkill, you couldve done so much more in the way of drama, but they just talk it off in a big happy re-union couldve done so much more
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Like I said in my previous comment, it wouldn't make sense to have drama and conflict between two best friends over something they couldn't control (at the time) because of not knowing.
BAH, wrong emote. should've been .
I believe RD will be a major character in later chapters, thus the introduction. If not, it's really not thought out well.
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What?