What happens when the cycle of life and death is disrupted? Only your determination, will, and the friendships you make can defeat what lurks within the eye of the storm.
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Grammar 10/10 progression a little fast for my paste but it will do your OC character relatable overall great story 9/10 good job making this a great story!
Great chapter!
Is the ‘race” kind of like a metaphor for dating?
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Not exactly. It is just a flying race, but by now, Storm has realised that Rainbow will win wether he can fly or not. This is making him think wether the only reason she wants him to be able to fly is so she can brag over winning a race against him.
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I plan on slowing the progression down again pretty soon, I just wanted to make this learning to fly segment a little more unique by having a fight in the middle if that makes sense.
(Also this is the only chapter I haven’t proofread, so if the ending seemed rushed that would be why)