“Why must the master die?” the automaton asked after several silent scenes.
The mare glared at the construct. “He was an awful stallion who tortured ponies for his own self-gratification,” she growled through clenched teeth. “If it weren’t for him, my sister would still...”
She trailed off as another several scenes played out in silence.
“The master was… bad?” the automaton finally asked.
The 'silent scenes' mentioned are the chronicles of the mare's sex life, each playing out one short scene at a time. It's not really overtly stated, but the mare had just killed the master of the temple in the previous room. The master was not a good pony, and the mare explains that to the automaton.
It is implied that the master did something horrible to her sister, and that is why she killed him.
If there is something else unclear about that section, I'd like to be made aware of it, because it looked fine to me.
...Okaaay, I just finished reading this great story. I'm confused as to why this was added; it's got nothing to do with Hondo, Cookie, Rarity and Sweetie, and the temple's better explained in the following chapters.
I don't get why this prologue's here, when the murderous mare's not exactly relevant, or the automaton learning about "freedom".
The automaton simply stood as its master - a stallion garbed in resplendent golden finery - lay splayed out on the ivory floor. Crimson lifeblood stained the ground, slowly pooling beneath.
I'm on the fence about if this fic is squick for me or not, but DAMN that is an unexpected way to start a clop. Well done.
I really don't understand this paragraph
“Why must the master die?” the automaton asked after several silent scenes.
The mare glared at the construct. “He was an awful stallion who tortured ponies for his own self-gratification,” she growled through clenched teeth. “If it weren’t for him, my sister would still...”
She trailed off as another several scenes played out in silence.
“The master was… bad?” the automaton finally asked.
The mare nodded. “The worst.”
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Which part is confusing to you?
The 'silent scenes' mentioned are the chronicles of the mare's sex life, each playing out one short scene at a time. It's not really overtly stated, but the mare had just killed the master of the temple in the previous room. The master was not a good pony, and the mare explains that to the automaton.
It is implied that the master did something horrible to her sister, and that is why she killed him.
If there is something else unclear about that section, I'd like to be made aware of it, because it looked fine to me.
...Okaaay, I just finished reading this great story. I'm confused as to why this was added; it's got nothing to do with Hondo, Cookie, Rarity and Sweetie, and the temple's better explained in the following chapters.
I don't get why this prologue's here, when the murderous mare's not exactly relevant, or the automaton learning about "freedom".
I kind of want to hear about what happened to the automaton and the mare after this
I'm on the fence about if this fic is squick for me or not, but DAMN that is an unexpected way to start a clop. Well done.
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To this day I still don't feel this prologue had the impact I intended, but it is nice to see that someone appreciated the imagery.