That stream of consciousness in the middle was appropriately climactic.
I'm not sure I understand the thoughts at the end, though. I'd have expected that sort of result if she'd have succumbed to her despair or something, but I was under the impression she had instead triumphed. I hope the next chapter makes things clearer.
10213814 That's a great point. I kept it implicit. I think I expected a little too much reading between the lines than was responsible of me. The next chapter does clarify it some, but I'll go back and add a few lines to the end of this one to make the transition more sensible. Thanks.
So that ending part (as of this chapter this is written on) totally shot Metallica's sad but true into my head granted not a prefect song that goes with the red text but that's what came to mind. Also damn spooky stuff
Dann that got deep quickly, great chapter
That stream of consciousness in the middle was appropriately climactic.
I'm not sure I understand the thoughts at the end, though.
I'd have expected that sort of result if she'd have succumbed to her despair or something, but I was under the impression she had instead triumphed.
I hope the next chapter makes things clearer.
10213814
That's a great point. I kept it implicit. I think I expected a little too much reading between the lines than was responsible of me. The next chapter does clarify it some, but I'll go back and add a few lines to the end of this one to make the transition more sensible. Thanks.
So that ending part (as of this chapter this is written on) totally shot Metallica's sad but true into my head granted not a prefect song that goes with the red text but that's what came to mind. Also damn spooky stuff