10454272 Ah, apologies for that. Upon rereading I can tell I could have used more descriptive language to more seamlessly shift between POVs. Thanks for the feedback!
Just echoing what was said in the land of greens. I like the characterizations and I've gotten plenty of laughs. Work a little more on showing the POV change to avoid confusing the reader. I've enjoyed the story so far and I look forward to reading more.
Loving this! Its such a fun read.
Cute and comfy
I am confused at who's perspective is who's every time the POV switches.
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Ah, apologies for that. Upon rereading I can tell I could have used more descriptive language to more seamlessly shift between POVs.
Thanks for the feedback!
Her cover has been blown! I repeat Her cover has been blown!
Just echoing what was said in the land of greens. I like the characterizations and I've gotten plenty of laughs. Work a little more on showing the POV change to avoid confusing the reader. I've enjoyed the story so far and I look forward to reading more.